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My hometown
My hometown Zhoushan is a beautiful place which is the only city
of islands in China. He is located in the east of China.
He is noted for his spectacular beauty of hills and the sea. The area
is rich both in natural landscapes and cultural and historical heritages,
where people will see integral harmony of ancient traditions with other
mainland citys.
And my hometown is well-known by another place, mount Putuo. It
has been reputed as “Buddhist Paradise amidst the Sea and Heaven” and
“Number one Buddhist Paradise in China” for a long time. This mountain
and Wutai Mountain in Shanxi Province, Emei Mountain in Sichuan
Province, and Jiuhua Mountain in Anhui Province are called Four
Famous Mountains of China’s Buddhism. So,when on holiday, it will
become more crowd than daily . By the way,the most local people are
worked as guider or open a hotel for the tourist.
All in all, I think my hometown is a charming place .You will find
some enjoyable from there and then love him.
Revised by the Group
My hometown
My hometown Zhoushan ，is a beautiful place， which is the only
city of islands in China. He is located in the east of China.
He is noted for his spectacular beauty of hills and the sea. The area
is rich both in natural landscapes and cultural and historical heritages,
where people will see something different with mainland citys. For
example, which made us feel proud , our fishery culture, marine culture
and so on.
And my hometown is well-known by another place, mount Putuo. It
has been reputed as “Buddhist Paradise amidst the Sea and Heaven” and
“Number one Buddhist Paradise in China” for a long time. This mountain
and Wutai Mountain in Shanxi Province, Emei Mountain in Sichuan
Province, and Jiuhua Mountain in Anhui Province are called Four
Famous Mountains of China’s Buddhism. So,when on holiday, it will
become more crowd than daily . By the way,the most local people are
worked as guider or open a hotel for the tourist.
All in all, I think my hometown is very charming .You will find
some enjoyable from there and then love him.
Revised by the Teacher
My hometown
My hometown Zhoushan ，is a beautiful place， which is the only
city of islands in China. He is located in the east of China. He is famous
for his beautiful natural scenery and a famous scenic spot Putuo.
He is noted for his spectacular beauty of hills and the sea. The area
is rich both in natural landscapes and cultural and historical heritages,
where people will see something different with mainland cities. For
example, us feel proud of our fishery culture, marine culture and so on.
On the other hand, my hometown is well-known by a place, mount
Putuo. It has been reputed as “Buddhist Paradise amidst the Sea and
Heaven” and “Number one Buddhist Paradise in China” for a long time.
This mountain and Wutai Mountain in Shanxi Province, Emei Mountain
in Sichuan Province, and Jiuhua Mountain in Anhui Province are called
“Four Famous Mountains” of China’s Buddhism. So, on holidays, it will
become more crowded than usual because more people come and visit .
By the way, the most local people work as guiders or open hotels for the
tourists.
All in all, I think my hometown is very charming .You will find
something enjoyable from there and then love him.
Teacher’s Comments and Suggestions: It is a good
description of a place with a clear developing patter and
necessary semantic elements. You have given two very
important characteristics of city Zhoushan.
Your score for this assignment is 85.