Hero Essay
Response Sheet #1
Writer ____________________
Response Partner _______________
Colored Pencil color ______________
TASK: Switch response sheets and hero essays with a partner in class. Carefully follow the
directions listed below and make all corrections, comments and additions on the writer’s paper. USE
A COLORED PENCIL!
Introduction
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Underline the writer’s hook. DESCRIBE their hook below:
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Underline the thesis.
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The thesis should be the last line of the first paragraph. Write a note if it is not.
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The thesis should be ONE SENTENCE. Write a note to the author if it is not.
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LABEL THE THESIS with #1 where function is addressed, #2 where example is addressed,
and #3 where negation is addressed.
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How many sentences are between the hook and the thesis? ____________(should be 3-4)
Body Paragraph 1: Function
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Underline the topic sentence.
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Topic sentence introduces everyday hero either by name or role.
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The relationship between the author and the everyday hero is described.
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The first trait that this everyday hero possesses is____________________.
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The writer describes this trait in detail. Circle one.
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The second trait that this everyday hero possesses is __________________.
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The writer describes this trait in detail. Circle one.
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Underline the concluding sentence.
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Do all sentences align with topic sentence? Draw a line through anything that doesn’t go with
the topic sentence.
YES
YES
OR
OR
NO
NO
Body Paragraph 2: Example
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Underline the topic sentence.
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Topic sentence introduces “textual” heroes by name and trait. All three should be from text.
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Hero # 1 is ___________________. His/her heroic trait is _________________.
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Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.
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The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.
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The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).
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The writer made a detailed connection from this quote to topic sentence.
Circle one. YES OR
NO
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Hero # 2 is ___________________. His/her heroic trait is _________________.
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Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.
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The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.
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The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).
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The writer made a detailed connection from this quote to topic sentence.
Circle one. YES OR
NO
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Hero # 3 is ___________________. His/her heroic trait is _________________.
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Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.
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The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.
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The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).
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The writer made a detailed connection from this quote to topic sentence.
Circle one. YES OR
NO
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Underline the concluding sentence.
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Do all sentences align with topic sentence? Draw a line through anything that doesn’t go with
the topic sentence.
Body Paragraph 3: Negation
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Underline the topic sentence.
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Topic sentence introduces “textual/movie” heroes by name and trait. (2 text + 1 movie 0r 3 text)
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Hero # 1 is ___________________. His/her non-heroic trait is _________________.
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Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.
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The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.
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The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).
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If a movie scene, does the writer paraphrase the events of the scene clearly?
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The writer made a detailed connection from this example to topic sentence.
Circle one. YES OR
NO
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Hero # 2 is ___________________. His/her non-heroic trait is _________________.
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Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.
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The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.
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The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).
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If a movie scene, does the writer paraphrase the events of the scene clearly?
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The writer made a detailed connection from this example to topic sentence.
Circle one. YES OR
NO
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Hero # 3 is ___________________. His/her non-heroic trait is _________________.
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Does the writer give background information about this hero? If not, note on his/her draft.
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The first quotation has quotation marks. If not, note on his/her draft.
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The quotation is cited appropriately. (SpringBoard page#).
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If a movie scene, does the writer paraphrase the events of the scene clearly?
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The writer made a detailed connection from this example to topic sentence.
Circle one. YES OR
NO
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Underline the concluding sentence.
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Do all sentences align with topic sentence? Draw a line through anything that doesn’t go with
the topic sentence.
Conclusion paragraph
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Thesis is restated in first sentence including function, example, and negation.
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Thesis is written in different words than in intro paragraph.
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Reflection on heroes is a minimum of 4 sentences.
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Suggestions for writer
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Conventions
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Circle any word that looks FUNKY!
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Place a dot in front of the line that may have a punctuation error (one dot/error)
Transition words
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Circle each transition word or phrase
Appropriate use of transition words/phrases at the beginning of each paragraph AND ALSO at
the beginning of at least THREE sentences. (Please list in provided space)
o Body paragraph #1
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o Within text #1
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o Body paragraph #2
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o Within text #2
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o Body paragraph #3
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o Within text #3
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o Conclusion paragraph
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