Name ____________________________________________ date _____________
Revision: 23 points
Bone level
14
Essay follows proper structure
(Descriptive, Sequential/Narrative)
consistently. Tone of the essay
(Informative/Entertaining) is obvious
and consistent throughout.
12
10
7
Evidence of structure and tone
are present, with satisfactory
consistency. Paper could use
some minor bone-level
reorganization.
Obvious bone-level problems
still exist in final draft. Essay
“switches” between structures
or tones, or seems to
“meander” without clear
purpose.
Obvious bone-level
problems still exist in final
draft. Essay has no clear
structure or tone, and/or
is extremely informal.
5
4
Muscle level
6
Thoughtful attention was paid to muscle-level revision process. Sentence
structure is varied and writing “flows” through the use of transitions.
Writing style could be more
varied or descriptive.
Insufficient effort given
to muscle-level revision.
Skin level
3
2
1
Numerous spelling and
formatting errors in the essay.
Very little attention paid
to skin-level revision; essay
is often illegible.
10
5
3
MLA Works Cited Page reflects attention to detail and a concerted effort
to properly document and format sources. Page is perfect or has one or
two errors.
MLA Works Cited Page
reflects great effort toward
completeness. However,
information is missing, or
there are more than three
minor errors with the format.
Spelling, capitalization, punctuation, and other “skin” revisions paid
proper attention. The essay was neatly typed.
MLA Works Cited Page
needs heavy revision, is
not formatted correctly
more than 65%..
Essay: 17 points
17
Essay demonstrates understanding of
the first-person retelling genre, and its
purpose.
Thoughtful and creative insights and
observations exist in the essay, and solid
evidence from sources is presented to
back up claims.
14
Much effort was put into the
essay, with above average
results. However, the
examples cited, or the
meanings gleaned from the
examples, are faulty or vague.
Researched information is “densely
packed” into a coherent essay.
Strong writing effort.
Comments:
Total: ___________________________/ 50
12
Effort was paid to building a
cohesive essay, with weak
results.
Essay lacks a unifying “theme”
or meaning.
Points require further
description or elaboration.
Some effort in writing shown.
9
Essay is overly vague and
broad.
Points are mentioned
without elaboration.
Author does not
demonstrate sufficient
understanding of essay
purpose/format.
Insufficient effort in
creativity or writing.
Name ____________________________________________ date _____________
Name 0
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Title 0
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Cover (Neat, Color) 0 10
Battles (1861, 62, 63, 64) 0
Entries (10) 0
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Interviews (2 generals) 0
Life before: 0
Attitude: 0
Map (by hand)
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(war, Lincoln, South, North, slavery, country, away from home)
PowerPoint: 0
Music: 0
10
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Bonus:_______
Total:_______