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Explain and analyse one obstacle to implementing “Fair Trade” for Southern producers?
The Fair Trade movement is considered to be a “response to” (Leclair, 2002: 957) and a
“critique of” (Raynolds and Ngcwangu, 2010: 74) neoliberal free trade whilst representing
an alternative to aid as a mechanism for development (Hira and Ferrie, 2006: 108). By
offering a guaranteed minimum price for exported products and a social premium to
participating producers (FLO, 2011), Fair Trade aims to “secure the rights of marginalised
producers and workers – especially in the South” (FINE, 2001 cited in Fairtrade Foundation,
2011).
Whilst the movement has a well documented history (see Kocken, 2003; Murray and
Raynolds, 2007), this essay will define Fair Trade with respect to its most recent
manifestation; compliance with Fairtrade standards and the terms of trade as defined by
the Fairtrade Labelling Organisation International (FLO) (2011) – a non-governmental
organisation established in 1997 comprising of 24 organisations working to promote Fair
Trade in general but also specifically products carrying the Fairtrade Mark (FLO, 2011).
FLO (2011) state that the movement is “designed to address the imbalance of power in
trading relationships, unstable markets and the injustices of conventional trade” and
therefore reduce the inequality of international trade that well recognised within the
development literature (see Stiglitz, 2002 and 2007). So, as Fair Trade provides an
opportunity for development (Leclair, 2002: 957) and empowerment (MacDonald, 2007:
794) through the mechanism of higher but stable prices for exported products, it seems
logical for Southern producers to participate.
Whilst the literature identifies a multitude of interrelated challenges (see Hira and Ferrie,
2006; Tallontire, 2002), this essay will consider one obstacle to implementing Fair Trade for
Southern producers; that is, the financial costs associated with becoming a certified
Fairtrade producer.
In light of this obstacle, this essay will then critically analyse the Fair Trade movement so to
make a judgement as to whether overcoming the obstacles associated with implementing
Fair Trade can be justified to Southern producers. It will comment specifically on the
internal pressures faced by the movement as it grows – especially in relation to
mainstreaming.
Firstly this essay will discuss is the short-term and long-term financial costs associated with
becoming a certified Fairtrade producer. Despite claims that the Fair Trade movement is
“unique” (Leclair, 2002: 957; FLO, 2011) in terms of the contribution it makes towards
development throughout the Global South and also the overwhelmingly positive and
optimistic tone of the literature (see Raynolds and Ngcwangu, 2010; Welford et al., 2003),
there are many financial costs associated with the implementation of Fair Trade. Although
broad challenges associated with the movement are well documented the financial barriers
to implementing Fair Trade are often either completely ignored or traded against the
“remarkable” benefits available to certified producers (Murray and Raynolds, 2007: 5).
Listed separately from the academic praise and glossy photographs of beaming Southern
producers are the “Producer Certification Fees” available from FLO-CERT – the certification
body and the more corporate arm of the Fair Trade movement. For a Small Producer
Organisation comprising of less than 50 members they list a €525 fee for the application
service, €1430 fee for the initial certification fee and €1170 annual auditing fee regardless of
whether the audit takes place that year or not (FLO-CERT, 2010: 4-6). Whilst this does not
seem exceptionally expensive, given the variety in market (or guaranteed) prices between
commodities and, for example, the fact that many family based coffee growers in
Guatemala earn less than $600 per year (Levi and Linton, 2003: 412), there is a question as
to whether Fair Trade is accessible and thus whether all marginalised workers can benefit
(Tallontire, 2002: 13).
A guaranteed price and the social premiums offered to certified producers allow for
consistent income and welfare projects respectively thus contributing to development
(Welford et al., 2003). However, using coffee prices as an example, the market price has
only dipped below the guaranteed price 10 times since 1976 (International Coffee
Organisation, 2011; Levi and Linton, 2003: 411) and given rising commodity prices currently
the necessity of Fair Trade is drawn in to question. Obviously this particular argument
ignores the other benefits of certification such as the establishment of long-term trading
partnerships (FLO, 2011) however as not all certified produce can always be sold (Renard,
2005: 427) which limits the effectiveness of the movement.
Short-term costs can be justified if payback periods are acceptable, especially if certification
costs are covered with micro-finance loans (Hayes, 2006: 460) however the long-term
implications of Fair Trade should be considered. The Fair Trade movement is designed to
support producers so they can eventually gain access to conventional markets (Tallontire,
2002: 13) however some critics see the minimum price as a form of subsidy and suggest that
inefficient production techniques are thus promoted (Boersma, 2009: 54; Tallontire, 2002:
14). This risks future competitiveness, especially given the opportunity cost associated with
not diversifying in to more lucrative export markets (see Prebisch, 1950; Singer, 1950) and
also when products have to compete in oligopolistic markets (Doherty and Meehan, 2006:
305) such as chocolate and bananas – two of the largest Fair Trade markets (Moore et al.,
2006: 332).
In light of this discussion of the financial costs associated with becoming a certified Fairtrade
producer, this essay will now critically analyse the movement in order to comment on the
effectiveness of the movement and thus whether the obstacles mentioned previously can
be justified to Southern producers. As stated previously this essay will focus on one issue
with the Fair Trade movement; the internal pressures faced by the movement as it grows –
especially in relation to mainstreaming.
Although the ethos of Fair Trade is simple – ensuring a better deal for Southern producers –
the mechanism by which to go about achieving this aim is contested within the literature.
FLO (2011) recognises the benefits from mainstreaming so to increase impact on
development in the Global South by expanding the scale of Fairtrade products sold. This
view is supported throughout the literature. For example, Murray and Raynolds (2007: 8)
suggest that expanding the movement brings benefits to “a greatly increased number of
marginalised producers”.
Meanwhile, and despite this, many are critical of mainstreaming. Moore et al., (2006: 330)
proclaim that Fair Trade has “sold out” and even “lost its soul” whilst Barrientos and Smith
(2007: 109) suggest that there are “inherent tensions between the underling social values of
Fair Trade and the commercial principles and practices”. Tallontire (2002: 12) summarises
this well by suggesting that “Fair Trade has feet in both the development and business
camps, which can create tension”. So what does this mean for Southern producers?
Southern producers will need to be able to adapt to the shifting demands of the movement.
For example, as supermarkets gain an increasing relative and absolute share of the Fair
Trade market products will need to become more homogenous (Wilkinson and Mascernhas,
2007: 127) and this may favour certification of plantations and cooperatives as opposed to
small-scale plots. Evidently there will be winners and losers from this potential shift and this
will depend on the context and the commodity. For example, coffee production is highly
decentralised (Levi and Linton, 2003: 412) and so within this market a shift in employment
structure may occur.
This essay set out to discuss the obstacles to implementing Fair Trade for Southern
producers. By presenting an analysis of the financial costs associated with becoming a
Fairtrade producer and then outlining one critique of the movement this essay has
highlighted the complexities associated with implementing Fair Trade as well holistically
explaining the advantages and disadvantages of a movement that is both “in and against the
market” (Raynolds and Ngcwangu, 2010: 75). By demonstrating the breadth of academic
discussion within this field this essay has aimed to show that any obstacles to implementing
Fair Trade are highly contextual. This is important given the expansion in product categories
within the Fairtrade scheme. Despite this, there are evidently benefits to implementing Fair
Trade. For example, the potential for increased revenue and expertise as well as the
opportunity for often much needed development projects are major incentives for Southern
producers to become Fairtrade certified.
It is not practical to decide definitively on whether the obstacles to implementing Fair Trade
can be justified to Southern producers given the risks associated with the future of the
movement as each case is highly contextual. However it is possible to conclude that
Southern producers should carefully examine the risks and benefits associated with Fair
Trade. Throughout this essay has highlighted the contention between short-term
protectionism (as a result of guaranteed prices and social premiums) and long-term growth.
Hira and Ferrie (2006: 113-114) argue that the market price is key to signalling appropriate
changes to supply and demand and thus, by removing this signal, the Fair Trade market risk
diverging from the mainstream market. This potentially could allow competing companies
to gain market share. Whilst Fair Trade offers the opportunity for “trust, shared ownership,
and access to network resources [such as] capital, skills [and] technology” (Doherty and
Meehan, 2006: 302) which increase profitability, it is noted that few Fairtrade producers
ever move to the mainstream market (Tallontire, 2002: 14) resulting in problems such as
those associated with the infant industry debate.
This essay thus concludes that the success of the movement depends on its future direction
which, as shown, is far from certain. The obstacles to implementing Fair Trade for Southern
producers will shift over time, and, whilst today Fair Trade can offer some protection against
the impersonal global market, producers in the Global South cannot afford to become
complacent.
Word Count: 1581
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Routledge, pp103-122.
BOERSMA, F. (2009). The Urgency and Necessity of a Different Type of Market: The
Perspective of Producers Organized Within the Fair Trade Market. Journal of Business Ethics.
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DOHERTY, B and MEEHAN, J. (2006). Competing on social resources: the case of the Day
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FEEDBACK
1st: 70
research, knowledge and understanding [30%]
1st+
x
1st
2:1
2:2
3rd
FAIL
argument and analysis [40%]
structure and coherence [10%]
grammar and style [10%]
referencing [10%]
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x
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x
In the assessment criteria a first is described as:
Excellent work. A clear command and understanding of the issues can be noted along with
independent thinking. The essay contains a wealth of relevant information, and
demonstrates wide reading of appropriate literature.
Tutors comments:
Strengths:
Very well organised and thorough essay which answers the question directly, fully and
intelligently. Literature is well handled, with some excellent commentary and analysis of
your own. Clearly written, focussed and engaging. Your critical analysis of the literature was
especially good, the fact that you identified areas of popular agreement with multiple
references and then used your line of argument to put various academic works up against
each other helped make your answer worth 70.
Weaknesses:
Whilst your essay clearly presents one challenge to implementing fair trade for southern
producers, by making reference to some of the other challenges that exist such as the
weakness of the movement due to mainstreaming, you could have commented on the
significance of the one challenge you identify. For example, you stop short of arguing that
fair trade can potentially trap producers into poverty by incentivising them to remain in low
return and volatile markets but by mentioning this briefly, you could add context to your
conclusion.
Suggestions for improvement:
Check through your work for awkward phrasing e.g. “Obviously this particular argument
ignores the other benefits of certification such as the establishment of long-term trading
partnerships (FLO, 2011) however as not all certified produce can always be sold (Renard,
2005: 427) which limits the effectiveness of the movement.” (page #) and missing words.
Perhaps re-visit your essay the day before it is due in (after a short break) and go though it
very carefully looking for grammar mistakes. If you can’t face re-reading your essay or you
haven’t left yourself enough time to ‘go back’ to it then potentially ask a friend to read it for
you?
Despite achieving a 1st in this essay there is always room for improvement. Improving the
grammar and being more bold with your argument (see weaknesses section) would have
increased your mark.
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