Name______________________________ Funnel Introduction Self-Edit Goal: I can revise my introduction to meet the criteria for the funnel format. Directions: Complete the self-edit document, and then revise your introduction paragraph for Wednesday, December 3rd. Be sure the completely edited draft is printed in class. GENERAL STATEMENT – Write the general statement below. __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ Is your first sentence the general statement? Yes or No Does the general statement reflect the thesis statement? Yes or No Does the general statement include anything specific about the novel, such as the title, author, characters, etc.? Y or No Does the general statement need to be revised? Yes or No If the general statement needs to be revised, write the revised sentence below. __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ LINKING SENTENCES – Write the linking sentences below. __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ Do the linking sentences come directly after the general statement? Yes or Is there more than one linking sentence? Yes or No Do the linking sentences further explain the general statement, getting more specific? Do the linking sentences need to be revised? Yes or No No Yes or No If the linking sentences need to be revised, write the revised sentences below. __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ INTRODUCTION TO AUTHOR AND NOVEL – Write the sentence that introduces the authors of your short stories and the titles. __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ Does the sentence come directly after the linking sentences? Yes or No Is this sentence the first time the authors and short stories have been mentioned? Does the sentence connect to the general statement? Yes or No Does the sentence need to be revised? Yes or No Yes or No If the linking sentences need to be revised, write the revised sentences below. __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ BACKGROUND INFORMATION – Write the sentences that provide necessary background information. __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ Do the sentences come directly after the short stories and authors are introduced? Is the information completely relevant to the thesis statement? Yes or No Are there 2-3 sentences? Yes or No Do any of the background sentences need to be revised? Yes or No Yes or No If the background sentences need to be revised, write the revised sentences below. __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ THESIS STATEMENT – Write the thesis statement below. __________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________ Does the thesis statement include the two characters being compared? Yes or Does the thesis statement state which character is more villainous and why? Yes or Does the thesis statement need to be revised? Yes or No No No If the thesis statement needs to be revised, write the revised sentence below. __________________________________________________________________________________________________