***Have out: Expository Benchmark Essay (MISTAKES = OPPORTUNITY FOR LEARNING) and your PINK strategies sheet!*** – Which introduction strategies did you try last week? How are you feeling about your intro now? Has it improved? Ineffective Conclusions • • • • • I hope you enjoyed reading my… In this essay/letter you have learned… In conclusion,… As you can see/tell… I just told you about (exact thesis)… Paraphrasing or restating your thesis statement or big ideas to provide closure to your essay. Using a famous or often heard by you quote that thematically ties into your topic. (Note: the FINAL sentence of your essay needs to be in YOUR words.) Some sort of general statement or idea about your topic or thesis to provide closure to your essay. I carry my grandfather’s advice with me everywhere. Whenever I fail to make the right choice or just find myself in difficult situations, I try to pause and remember his wise words… Side by Side Comparison Introduction: Used a QUOTE Conclusion: ECHOES Quote “Pick yourself up and dust yourself off.” That’s what my grandpa always used to tell me whenever I screwed up big time… I carry my grandfather’s advice with me everywhere. Whenever I fail to make the right choice or just find myself in difficult situations… “Goonies never say die!” My favorite childhood movie embodies that same idea my grandfather tried to drill into me… Side by Side Comparison Introduction: Used a QUOTE Conclusion: NEW Quote (also echoes) “Pick yourself up “Goonies never say and dust yourself die!” My favorite off.” That’s what my childhood movie grandpa always embodies that same used to tell me idea my grandfather whenever I screwed tried to drill into up big time… me… Growing up is hard. No matter who you are, where you live, how much money you have, navigating the waters of life is no easy task… Side by Side Comparison Introduction: Used a QUOTE Conclusion: Uses a GENERALIZATION “Pick yourself up Growing up is hard. and dust yourself No matter who you off.” That’s what my are, where you live, grandpa always how much money used to tell me you have, navigating whenever I screwed the waters of life is up big time… no easy task… Final words about Conclusions… • Different strategies work better with different topics. • Use strategies that work to your strengths as a writer. • Remember, “showing” is always better than “telling”! • Do NOT introduce new information in your conclusion. REVISE YOUR CONCLUSION PARAGRAPH! – In your CONCLUSION make sure you have: Rephrasing of Thesis Statement (echo or quote) Possible brief Summary of Body Paragraph details (careful it doesn’t sound formulaic) Final Reflective Commentary (generalization) Revised Conclusion written below intro revision. All conclusion strategies clearly LABELED. Stapled to the TOP of ALL your pages. Read your NOVEL. Do NOT distract others.