Bujumbura, Burundi
Nikondeha Justin
justin@baiaexcellence.org
August 23, 2021
Mr. Apollo Ssempebwa
Technolgy teacher
I appreciate the feedback and comments on each part where the marker felt that I fell short of the
requirements. However, I have reasons to believe that the paper was not marked according to my
expectations. I am confident that the marks awarded do not reflect my efforts. Therefore, I would
like to appeal the score and request for remarking after which I am confident that I will score higher
marks. There are various instances where the marker has given unfair comments on the items that I
have covered. For example, in the executive summary I have mentioned the two models that I will
use in my analysis that include swot and vrio. The reason for mentioning the models in the executive
summary is to give a snapshot of what is in the research paper in regards to environmental analysis.
However, the marker has disputed the inclusion of the models citing that they are not important.
However, I believe that the models make a very important part of the research, which warrants their
inclusion in the executive summary.
In the introduction, I included information about the company and then gave the reason for the
research. Therefore, it is not clear to me why the marker said that I did not provide a reason for
writing the report in the introduction.
In the stakeholder analysis, I mentioned customers and scientific researchers as the major
stakeholders. Therefore, kindly remark the section and consider the mentioned stakeholders.