Elisa Catania Revision Ideas 1. Change the ending - instead of the dragon twirling around Lisa to send her back home (random) maybe instead she finds a magic paintbrush and paints a door to make her way back home? 2. What if the dragon was the first creature Lisa meets when she arrives in Forestelle? 3. Touch more on what Lisa sees when she first steps outside. Where is her house? What else is missing besides her phone? Is there any more technology that is missing or nonfunctional? 4. Adding a memory or flashback into the story. Could be a memory of Jules and Lisa enjoying a fun moment in the natural world. This would build more meaning of Jules’ character and her and Lisa’s relationship. 5. Slow down the ending. Slow down the whole story but more specifically the ending. I feel the pace of the story isn’t as steady as it could be and is a little rushed, like I’m trying to cram everything in all at once, especially at the end. How can I make the pace of the story a little more steady? I have a lot to include but don’t want to make it very long.
