Example 4: Assessment / Exemple 4 – Évaluation / Ejemplo 4: Evaluación
External assessment: Paper 1
Évaluation externe : épreuve 1
Evaluación externa: prueba 1
Examiner commentary
Commentaires de l’examinateur
Comentarios del examinador
English B HL / Anglais B NS / Inglés B NS
Total marks / Total des points / Puntuación total
16
Criterion A / Critère A / Criterio A:
Marks awarded / Points attribués / Puntuación asignada
7
There are mixed indications in this script. On the one hand, much of the language is quite clear and correct (consider
the first paragraph)—but there are quite regular errors, often in basics such as agreement of verbs. The range of
vocabulary is generally rather simple and colloquial (e.g. “become way bigger”), although there are glimpses of
relatively sophisticated words at times (“consideration”, “sensibilization”). Overall, one has to say that the command of
the language is slightly better than “partially effective”, since it is mostly quite clear—and so it just reaches into the 7–9
markband.
Criterion B / Critère B / Criterio B:
Marks awarded / Points attribués / Puntuación asignada
6
Of the three elements required, the “opinions” are quite clearly presented and developed to some extent; and the ideas
about “what needs to be addressed” are mentioned at the bottom of page 3—although these are simple outlines with
little development, especially concerning the “story behind thoses problems”. Is the third element of “describe the
situation” covered? The only relevant mention seems to be at the start of the second paragraph and consists of “our city
is very popular” and “big amount of tourists”—with no more explicit development. However, arguably, “the situation”
can be understood from and through the various opinions. It is clear that there are more jobs—“development of the
country”—but also pollution and lack of respect. In the end, though, the explanation and development of all the ideas
is somewhat thin and incomplete, so no more than the 4–6 markband should be awarded; the task is only “generally
fulfilled”.
Criterion C / Critère C / Criterio C:
Marks awarded / Points attribués / Puntuación asignada
3
The speech is classed as “generally appropriate” in the marking notes, which places the mark in the 3–4 band. A semiformal register, and a reasonably serious tone, can be detected. However, this is not a particularly striking speech: neither
opening nor closing statements are particularly impressive, and there is only a vague attempt at active address to the
audience (e.g. the use of “we” in the last couple of paragraphs). The top of the markband is not justified.
Language B assessed student work / Travail d’élève évalué de langue B / Trabajos evaluados de los alumnos de Lengua B
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Example 4: Assessment / Exemple 4 – Évaluation / Ejemplo 4: Evaluación
General Commentary / Commentaire général / Comentario general:
This is a middling performance, being quite competent in terms of language and message. What significantly lowers the
total is the weak performance under criterion C—the choice of text type is only “generally appropriate”, and the text type
is then not very well handled. Note that it is always important to mark each criterion in isolation as far as possible—a
certain success under two criteria should not influence a low mark in the other.
Language B assessed student work / Travail d’élève évalué de langue B / Trabajos evaluados de los alumnos de Lengua B
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