Positive 1. You have given reasons given for your opinions, which helps successfully develop your arguments. Links between your different ideas could have been stronger 2. You used the APA style consistently for formatting the paper. However it should be at the separate page. You have structured your work logically into paragraphs. To develop, you could improve your introduction by introducing your main argument, in addition to providing an overview of the subject of the essay 3. 4. Work on summary part. Make sure that your summary is not just a sentence. Negative Comments 1. You have presented the key information accurately, but need to develop your evaluation by explaining your opinion and interpreting the sources in greater detail. 2. Do not add your own stories or samples. You have to discuss given lecture and text. 3. Try to make it more academic. After writing proofread 4. Good extra research from a range of sources. It would be good to demonstrate critical evaluation by analysing the reliability of the sources. 5. Please, read the rubric carefully for future assignments. Work on the structure of the essay: Introduction, body part and conclusion.