Many believe that an effective public transport system is a key component of a modern city. What are
the advantages and disadvantages of public transport?
It is believed that in urban areas that public transportation system could be crucial for prosperity of
those cities. However, apart from the priced-off service or safety, but there are is some discomforts as
well.
Добавлено примечание ([оригинал1]): Even with
online search, I could not find any sensible definition for this
word. I assume you meant “cheap”. If so, just use this word.
It is true that public transit transport does not require from that people to pay much money. More and
more individuals in big cities can get benefits of arriving at one place or another by spending less and it
obviously helps for saving up. Moreover, community transport could also give more advantages to reach
destinations safely. A majority of city dwellers are now using services owing to its security condition over
some irresponsible taxi drivers. In Warsaw, Poland, most inhabitants of the city are being induced to
intervene using the underground: therefore, the city government could have reached utmost level of
decreasing pollution along with mass car accidents noticeably.
Добавлено примечание ([оригинал2]): Well, with
some correction it has become clear that this is your thesis.
Nonetheless, despite above opportunities, the community transport may sometimes be uncomfortable.
That is to say, most of the elderly of community could find it unfavourable due to the crowded vehicles
which cause them to take a taxi instead. Furthermore, together with inconveniencye, it has an indecent
factor: that is slowness. Those uncomfortable cars can cause to spend long time in transport and it also
negatively affect to lose time by missing bout crucial events. After the policy of increasing the tax
payments for private cars in China, a tremendous number of people are in need waiting in the queues of
stations regularly.
Добавлено примечание ([оригинал6]): Actually, taxi
is a means of public transport, too
In conclusion, albeit the some positive sides of public transport in terms of reasonable price and safety,
it still make creates some inconveniences.
Добавлено примечание ([оригинал10]): Again, taxi
IS a public transport
LR
5.0
GR / ACC
6.0
CC
7.0
TR
7.0
OVR
6.5
Although essay has frequent word and punctuation mistakes, it follows a clear structure with
sufficient effort to stick to the point. Bodies are developed according to the thesis given in the
introduction. Besides, the candidate made an effort to illustrate points with examples.
However, in terms of vocabulary and grammar, a lot needs to be done yet and conclusion
failed to restate main points, which was important in that section. Work on:
- word choice
- correct usage of phrases
- punctuation
Добавлено примечание ([оригинал3]): Wrong word
Добавлено примечание ([оригинал4]): Correct
structure: require someone do something
Добавлено примечание ([оригинал5]): What
services? Please clarify!
Добавлено примечание ([оригинал7]): Due to
wrong words, meaning is NOT clear
Добавлено примечание ([оригинал8]): Wrong
modal verb
Добавлено примечание ([оригинал9]): Because you
already stated the word “utmost”