“Putting the Brakes on Teenage Driving”
Introduction Attention Getter
Anecdotal Instance about a cold night out driving when the driver crashed
into a tree along with three others in the car.
Credibility Connection
A person in the Attention Getter was her nephew, who lost his ability to
Walk simply because, the person driving him tried to text, causing
the crash.
Thesis Statement
Stating that the driving age requirement is currently unsafe, and
therefore, should be raised to 18.
Body Problem
Drivers at the young age of 16, are considerably less safe when on the road.
This makes them more accident prone.
Cause/History
The cause of such rapid numbered road incidents is that the age and overall
maturity of those on the road is too low. Also, that it has been this way for a long
time.
Solution
She suggests that the required minimum age be raised to eighteen, rather
than beginning at fifteen to sixteen.
Benefit
In doing so, this would create a safer and faster, less traffic prone driving
environment for those on the road.
Optional Action
The proposed action she suggests is to increase the drivers required
age to twenty-one.
Conclusion Restatement of Thesis
She briefly went over what her main points were based on her topic.
Final Line (Challenge)
She stated that we all should strive to do better and be safer on the roads
for the lives of those around us.
Delivery Body Language
She stays rather consistent throughout. Seeming rather neutral having good eye
contact with her audience.
Words
She did not overuse pointless jargon and made her speech understandable to her
audience.
Vocal Variety
She has good use of inflection and her tone is fluid and dynamic throughout,
Changing it as needed to further her points.
Visual Aid
She displayed her overwhelming statistics in the form of a slide show to display
how bad it is.
Research/Citation
She does well in citing her sources and provides credit where credit is due.
Opinion I rather enjoyed her topic because of the relatability to me as a teenager driving.