LEAVE AROUND 10 LINES FROM THE
DESCRIPTION YOU STARTED LAST
LESSON ON THE HAUNTED HOUSE.
KQ: Can I use SHOWING not TELLING in
my descriptive writing?
Starter. Complete the following sentences.
The sky was…
The girl screeched at the sight of…
Dancing on the breeze, the tree…
The boy laughed at the sight of…
The staircase creaked ominously in…
The car careered to a halt as the massive…
Superstar:
What
technique is
used here?
Superstar:
What does
this mean?
The door was hit with such a force that it swung
clear off its hinges and with a deafening crash
landed flat on the floor.
A giant of a man was standing in the doorway.
His face was almost completely hidden by a
long, shaggy mane of hair and a wild, tangled
beard, but you could make out his eyes,
glinting like black beetles under all the hair.
The giant squeezed his way into the hut,
stooping so that his head just brushed the
ceiling. He bent down, picked up the door and
fitted it easily back into its frame.
KQ: Can I use SHOWING not TELLING in my descriptive writing?
What do each of these sentences show the reader?
Showing Sentence
‘The garden grew wild,
the grass up to my knees.’
‘His palms felt clammy.’
‘ Fear hung in the air.’
‘Last year’s calendar hung on
the wall.’
‘She stopped when Mrs
Palmer came in.’
What does it show the reader?
KQ: Can I use SHOWING not TELLING in my descriptive writing?
Telling Sentence
Scrooge was mean.
Showing Sentence
People didn’t look Scrooge in the eye for fear of becoming the victim
of his cutting words.
He was frightened of
the ghosts.
Scrooge never spent
any money.
It was always cold in
Scrooge’s house.
He despised Bob
Cratchitt.
Scrooge was an ugly,
thin man.
LO2 - To be able to use SHOWING not TELLING in our descriptive writing
KQ: Can I use SHOWING not TELLING in
my descriptive writing?
Start with a verb (“-ing”)
Smashing against the bottom of the rocks, the waves sent white foam shooting
into the air.
Start with “as” or “while” (prepositions – you can also use prepositions like under,
behind, before etc …)
As the skies darkened, raindrops began to pour down.
While the gulls screamed overhead, a lonely dog raced along the wet sand.
Start with an adjective (a describing word)
Grotesque images danced before my eyes.
Start with an adverb (a word that describes the verb)
Silently, he crept towards the exit
KQ: Can I use SHOWING not TELLING in
my descriptive writing?
Plenary
Can you now re-visit the description you started
about the haunted house.
Apply the knowledge you have learnt today in
RED PEN.