Clarity and Conciseness
Revise these sentences so that they are clear and concise. You may add or change
some words if you need to, as long as you retain meaning.
1) Ms. Willey's claim that the president had attempted to kiss her resulted in great
embarrassment on the part of the White House.
2) The burying of nuclear waste in Antarctica would be in complete violation of
international agreements.
3) There is no doubt that the use of computerized testing will ultimately have a
great effect on the way students are taught.
4) The interesting and vivid descriptions that the author uses to describe the
atmosphere of the journey are extremely interesting and prove to be very effective.
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