Note that student work varies significantly from one assignment to the next, even within the
same mark range. The intent of providing samples such as this one is to guide students in
recognizing key criteria of assignments and in assessing their own work.
SAMPLE CONCLUSION – GOOD
Essay question: Examine the causes and effects of prejudicial attitudes and beliefs in the
novel, To Kill a Mockingbird.
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Strengths:
• All elements of a concluding paragraph are present and developed (application).
• Transition words (“therefore”, “in turn”, “in addition”) are used appropriately
(communication).
Tips for Improvement:
 At the end of the conclusion, generalize more about the causes and effects of
prejudice. The use of the phrase, “appreciating everyone”, could lead to mentioning
key values that lead to a more progressive society (application).
• The thesis and outline of arguments are clear and specific, but basically copied from
the introduction; more rewording would add variety (communication).
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Therefore, prejudice robs Maycomb’s citizens of the ability to change, of the ability to
be responsible for their actions and deeds, and of the ability to feel secure and accepted in
society. The prejudices, attitudes and beliefs about women learned during the formative
childhood years are difficult to overcome during adulthood. In turn, most of Maycomb's
white citizens are prejudiced against blacks because they use the blacks not only as handy
scapegoats but also menial servants to the white people, therefore showing how people are
reluctant to take responsibility for their actions. In addition, Alexandra Finch prejudges others
based on their social class to make herself feel superior and to prevent social rejection,
therefore illustrating that no matter how respected one's family is, deep down inside most
people are concerned about what others think of them. Unfortunately, prejudice, like a
robber, steals from these people their most valuable possession – the ability to live a happy
and fulfilled life. Personal happiness is possible only through appreciating everyone.
Connections to others make it possible for individuals to reach their potential.