Argument Essay Who is admirable? • Who is worth admiring in The Crucible? • Why? 1. Talk with a partner. 2. Tell me your answer. 3. Back up your answer with evidence. (7 Minutes) • Example: Proctor is admirable because he was willing to die for his beliefs. • Socratic Seminar • Who is worth admiring in The Crucible? • Why? 1. Talk with a partner. 2. Tell me your answer. 3. Back up your answer with evidence. (7 Minutes) • What are your first steps in starting an essay? Now • Hamburger/Hamburger paper. Now • Get into your groups. • Choose two post-it notes that show your character is admirable. • Choose one post-it note showing your character is NOT admirable. Hamburger Hamburger Paper ADMIRABLE QUOTE Quote 1 (pg. #) ADMIRABLE QUOTE Quote 2 (pg. #) NOT ADMIRABLE Quote 3 (pg. #) Revi Hamburger Hamburger Paper ADMIRABLE QUOTE Quote 1 (pg. #) NOT ADMIRABLE Quote 3 (pg. #) ADMIRABLE QUOTE Quote 2 (pg. #) Thesis: In the (TEXT) play (TITLE) The Crucible, by (AUTHOR) Henry Miller, Abigail Williams is an admirable character whose resourcefulness and ambition are heroic. Revi Write on center diamond: 1. Driving Question for Thesis: Which character in The Crucible is admirable and why? 2. USE YOUR “KEY WORDS FOR THE CRUCIBLE” IN YOUR THESIS. 3. Answer with FATT. Example: In the (TEXT) play (TITLE) The Crucible, by (AUTHOR) Arthur Miller, Abigail Williams is an admirable character whose resourcefulness and ambition are heroic. Hamburger/Hamburger 1. Say-Mean-Matter Quotes 1 and 2. 2. Leave Quote 3 (quote that goes against your thesis) alone. Hamburger Hotdog Paper Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim Quote #1 Quote #2 Say: ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be mistrusted, denied, questioned like a— DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come. (101) Say:ABIGAIL. She is blackening my name in the village! She is telling lies about me! She is a cold, sniveling woman, and you bend to her! Let her turn you like a—PROCTOR. Do you look for whippin’? (22) MEAN: This passage illustrates just how far Williams uses any means necessary to win Proctor’s love, even questioning his manhood. MEAN: Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that she is suffering because she is aiding the court, MATTER: As a result, her ambition inspires her turning in those who were acting suspicious to try new methods to be romantically involved MATTER: In this case, her denouncement of the In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Abigail never quitting, using her withMiller, Proctor, Williams is an admirable character whose court reveals her admirable ambition to beat the to use every possible way to resourcefulness and ambitionresourcefulness are heroic. unfair judicial system, and by simply pointing at the achieve her goal of Proctor. paranoia in the air, not creating it, she confirms what the judges already believe—that evil has invaded the town and is clouding their judgment. Quote #3 (Counterargument) Say: ABIGAIL. No, he’ll be comin’ up. Listen, now; if they be questioning us, tell them we danced—I told him as much Thesis: Gatsby is admirable. Quote #1 •Say: ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood runnin’ • out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my duty • pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be • mistrusted, denied, questioned like a— •DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you— •ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as • though cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come. (101) Mean (What does the quote “mean”? Summarize): Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that she is suffering because she is aiding the court, turning in those who were acting suspicious. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): In this case, her denouncement of the court reveals her admirable ambition to beat the unfair judicial system, and by simply pointing at the paranoia in the air, not creating it, she confirms what the judges already believe—that evil has invaded the town and is clouding their judgment. Thesis: Abigail is admirable. Quote #2 •Say: ABIGAIL. She is blackening my name in the village! She is telling lies • about me! She is a cold, sniveling woman, and you bend to her! Let her • turn you like a— •PROCTOR. Do you look for whippin’? (22) Mean (What does the quote “mean”? Summarize): This passage illustrates just how far Williams uses any means necessary to win Proctor’s love, even questioning his manhood. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): As a result, her ambition inspires her to try new methods to be romantically involved with Proctor, never quitting, using her resourcefulness to use every possible way to achieve her goal of Proctor. The Counterargument “I know you are, but what am I?” Evidence: The Counterargument What do you know about a “counterargument?” •It’s difficult •Evidence goes AGAINST your thesis •Opposite of what the person is arguing •Use facts •Something that proves a point wrong •Rebuttal Evidence: The Counterargument Your parents tell you, “your curfew is set for 10pm. The Van Nuys police website shows that crime is mostly committed between the times of 10pm-2am.” Talk to a partner and explain how you can give a counterargument. 1 minute. Evidence: The Counterargument Your parents tell you, “you cannot go to Alejandro’s party. He was arrested in middle school for bringing matches and dirty underwear to school.” Talk to a partner and explain how you can give a counterargument. 1 Minute Evidence: The Counterargument Your parents tell you, “downtown Los Angeles is too far. You can’t go there without an adult.” Talk to a partner and explain how you can give a counterargument. 1 Minute Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis Contradicting Evidence Counter-argument on how evidence Is NOT valid. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis Contradicting Evidence Use THE UNTOLD to show how contradicting evidence still proves thesis. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: Pitbulls are one of the friendliest breeds and the ban in Denver should be overturned. Contradicting Evidence: Pitbulls have the highest rate of attacks on humans. • The untold: THE OWNERS! Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: Pitbulls are one of the friendliest breeds and the ban in Denver should be overturned. Contradicting Evidence: Pitbulls have the highest rate of attacks on humans. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: This breed of dog attracts owners who are criminals who raise the dogs to fight, training them to have violent tendencies. Like children, mean and violent owners will translate to mean and violent dogs, and most other breeds have owners who want to raise their dogs properly. It’s not the dog breed that is violent but the type of owner who raise them. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: All types of guns should be legal. Contradicting Evidence: The Sandy Hook shootings left dozens of children dead. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: Work with a partner and come up with why this contradicting evidence can be WRONG. I will give you 3 minutes. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: All types of guns should be legal. Contradicting Evidence: The Sandy Hook shootings left dozens of children dead. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: THE UNTOLD: Mental Illness! Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: We should encourage the use of capital punishment in all states. Contradicting Evidence: Texas has the most executions out of all states, but the murder rate is also the highest. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: Work with a partner and come up with why this contradicting evidence can be WRONG (hint, use 3rd variable, low income, low graduation rates, etc. of TX). I will give you 3 minutes. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: We should encourage the use of capital punishment in all states. Contradicting Evidence: Texas has the most executions out of all states, but the murder rate is also the highest. • THE UNTOLD: Income (low) Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: College athletes should get paid for playing. Contradicting Evidence: In Slovania, where college players get paid, they have the highest dropout rate in the world. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: Unmentioned variable: Slovania’s average income is lowest in the European Union. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: We should encourage the use of capital punishment in all states. Contradicting Evidence: Texas has the most executions out of all states, but the murder rate is also the highest. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: Work with a partner and come up with why this contradicting evidence can be WRONG (hint, use low income, low graduation rates, etc. of TX). I will give you 3 minutes. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: The Lakers are the best team in basketball this season. Contradicting Evidence: The Lakers have the worst record in the league. Counter-argument using THE UNTOLD on how evidence is NOT valid: Work with a partner and come up with why this contradicting evidence can be WRONG. I will give you 3 minutes. Evidence: The Counterargument Thesis: Birmingham Students are the most kind students in all of the valley. Contradicting Evidence: Birmingham has the highest rate of fights. Counter-argument on how evidence is NOT valid: Work with a partner and come up with why this contradicting evidence can be WRONG. I will give you 3 minutes. Thesis: Gatsby is admirable. In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, Abigail Williams is an admirable character whose resourcefulness and ambition are heroic. Say: ABIGAIL. No, he’ll be comin’ up. Listen, now; if they be questioning us, tell them we danced—I told him as much already. (18) Mean (What does the quote “mean”? Summarize): This passage reveals how Williams can masterfully arrange plans so that all the girls involved with the original ritual have the same account of the incident. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): Ultimately, Abigail Williams ambitiously arranges the proper stories to tell using her resourceful mind. Although this may be immoral to some who are obsessive with rules, in the end Williams allows her friends and herself a way to escape the (THE UNTOLD) cruel punishments given out during that time, punishment that included stone presses, hangings, and drowning. The pure ambition to survive allowed Williams to survive the ruthless persecution of that era. Thesis: Proctor is admirable. In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, John Proctor is an admirable character because of his genuine morals. Say: “You are pulling heaven down and raising up a whore!” Mean (Who, What, Where): John Proctor argues that Abigail is a harlot, and that the court is bringing a bad name to heaven because of the lies being told and believed. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): In this case, ALTHOUGH Proctor committed adultery, he is still admirable because he is adhering to his genuine morals by not lying to the court. He is sacrificing his life by telling the truth and upholding his morals, all for the love of his wife. Hamburger Hotdog Paper Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim Quote #1 Quote #2 Say: ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be mistrusted, denied, questioned like a— DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come. (101) Say:ABIGAIL. She is blackening my name in the village! She is telling lies about me! She is a cold, sniveling woman, and you bend to her! Let her turn you like a—PROCTOR. Do you look for whippin’? (22) MEAN: This passage illustrates just how far Williams uses any means necessary to win Proctor’s love, even questioning his manhood. MEAN: Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that she is suffering because she is aiding the court, MATTER: As a result, her ambition inspires her turning in those who were acting suspicious to try new methods to be romantically involved MATTER: In this case, her denouncement of the In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Abigail never quitting, using her withMiller, Proctor, Williams is an admirable character whose court reveals her admirable ambition to beat the to use every possible way to resourcefulness and ambitionresourcefulness are heroic. unfair judicial system, and by simply pointing at the achieve her goal of Proctor. paranoia in the air, not creating it, she confirms what the judges already believe—that evil has invaded the town and is clouding their judgment. Quote #3 (Counterargument) Say: ABIGAIL. No, he’ll be comin’ up. Listen, now; if they be questioning us, tell them we danced—I told him as much MEAN: This passage reveals how Williams can masterfully arrange plans so that all the girls involved with the original ritual have the same Introductions • You are making a first impression. What do you do when first meeting someone you want to like you? Charm? Humor? Sincerity? • Writing is a social act. Introduction • Anecdotal using Scene • Interesting Factual statement • COLLECT NOTES on these moves. Introductions • Interesting Statement of Fact – Start introduction with a compelling fact. – Tone of introduction is factual, objective, and scientific. – Writer is telling reader, “I’m not messing with feelings. It’s all facts, baby.” – Good for writing that is heavily leaning on logic • Research papers • Science writing Introductions • Take out a piece of paper. • Write “interesting fact” on this paper. Introductions • Interesting Statement of Fact • Look up a famous person that has the admirable traits of your character: • In 1967 John McCain, a United States senator, was shot down by the North Vietnamese while flying a mission. • Edith Cavell, a nurse in Belgium during World War One, was arrested and executed for helping allied servicemen escape back to England. . Introductions • Look up 3 famous people that has the admirable traits of your character: Martin Luther King Junior had a dream. His strong sense of morals allowed him to think of man, woman, white and black to live in the same space. He paid the ultimate price for this strong sense of morality, much the same way as JP in the play The Crucible. In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, John Proctor is an admirable character because of his strong sense of morals. . • Example: In 1967 John McCain, a United States senator, was shot down by The North Vietnamese while flying a mission. According to Wikipedia.com, when McCain’s North Vietnamese captors tortured him, he resorted to making an anti-American confession in order to avoid further torture. McCain acted in ways that were unscrupulous in order to survive, and this resourcefulness and ambition were the only ways he could endure the terrible conditions of the prison. (Move #1) Not only do political figures have these admirable traits, but characters in literature also Demonstrate these admirable qualities..(Move #2) In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, Abigail Williams is an admirable character whose resourcefulness and ambition are heroic. Introductions • Start first sentence with interesting fact Fifty two percent of marriages end in divorce, which means someone at some point was not acting admirably. Human beings (WHO) are embedded with flaws, and it is the drama of trying to understand these flaws under the light of our strengths that is the human struggle (WHEN), represented through every day statistics and in literature. Those who live understanding this struggle are to be admired for their awareness (WHAT). In the play The Crucible, John Proctor lives with this awareness, because of his conscious way of living, he is admirable. Who, what, where of argument. – Who: Human Beings, Divorced people – What: Awareness – When: Human struggle Introductions • Start first sentence with interesting fact Stanford University’s acceptance rate is 0.6%, and these candidates are the top students of their schools. These candidates strive for what they want, despite the statistics, enduring hours of homework, playing sports, and surviving disastrous family lives. In the same way these students strove for greatness, Abigail Williams, in the play The Crucible, also attains what she wants with ambition against the odds. Who, what, where of argument. – Who: Human Beings, Divorced people – What: Awareness – When: Human struggle Introduction • Take out a piece of paper and label it, “Statement of Opinion.” Introduction • Father Thesis, Baby Thesis: Statement of Opinion • Write a more GENERAL version of your thesis as your first line. First line must HOOK. Introduction Father Thesis, Baby Thesis: Statement of Opinion Write a more GENERAL version of your thesis as your first line. First line must HOOK. GENERAL STATEMENT: To survive is supreme, and to die is failure. THESIS: In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, Abigail Williams is an admirable character whose resourcefulness and ambition are heroic. . Introduction Father Thesis, Baby Thesis: Statement of Opinion Write a more GENERAL version of your thesis as your first line. First line must HOOK. GENERAL STATEMENT: To survive is supreme, and to die is failure. During difficult times, one must take every measure simply to survive, which takes characteristics that can at times be difficult to accept. One must act with ambition and resourcefulness in the face of death of persecution. THESIS: In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, Abigail Williams is an admirable character whose resourcefulness and ambition are heroic. . Introduction • Scene • • • • Use 3 out of the 5 senses Quickest way to emotionally convince the reader Pure storytelling Mr. Kim is nuts about this one. But you should learn other techniques. • Who, what, where of argument. – Who: People, beings, living creatures – What: Transience – Where: Living rooms, kitchens, schools, anywhere! Introduction • Take out a piece of paper. • Label it “Scene Introduction.” Introduction • Turn in “Scene Introduction” in the back tray. Introduction • Scene: Write 3 sensory details about a time you experienced the thesis: EXAMPLE: MR. KIM’s FATHER IN COMMUNITY COLLEGE. 3 SENSORY DETAILS • Air conditioning • Back Pack zipping • Whispering of students Introduction • Scene: Write 3 sensory details. The air conditioning of the classroom (WHERE) came down heavily on my father’s (WHO) head, chilling the sweat off of his neck. The community college classroom was filled to capacity, with 80 students rustling papers, zipping up back packs, and whispering to each other before the professor arrived. My father smelled the strange perfumes that reminded him of fruit and flowers. When the professor began the lecture, my father was utterly bewildered. He could catch a few words, but the Chemistry class seemed fractured, unable to be pieced together. Although he had a minimal understanding of English, my father charged ahead to take this class to provide a better life for his family. The impossibility (WHAT) stared him in the face, but he attempted the class anyways. He ultimately dropped out of the class, but it doesn’t mean he is less admirable. (TRANSITION TO THESIS)It is the reaching that matters more than the attaining. • Who, what, where of argument. – Who: My father – What: impossibility – Where: Classroom Introduction • Scene: Write 3 sensory details. Use a student sample “admirable” character Introduction • Write your thesis after each of your introductions: Scene, Rhetorical Question, Factual Statement. • Example: The black smoke from the burning Blackhawk helicopter smothered my uncle’s face. He and his partner, Delta Force Sergeant Shugart, watched as mobs of Somali soldiers approached the crashed helicopter. Even amid the thumping helicopter blades, my uncle could hear the shots and cheers of the mob. But my uncle asked to be lowered closer to the crash. My uncle, Delta Force sniper team leader Gary Gordon, slid down a nylon rope from the helicopter, landed on the dirt, and ran to the injured pilot tangled in the crash. My uncle knew his chances of survival were close to zero. The impossibility stared him in the face, but he attempted to secure the perimeter anyways. He ultimately was killed, but it doesn’t mean he is less admirable. It is the reaching that matters more than the attaining. In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, John Proctor is one such hero, an admirable character whose reaching for the impossible is considered heroic. • In groups of 3: 1. 2. 3. 4. Receive two pieces of paper from Mr. Kim Hamburger Hot Dog your papers. Read each person’s introductions. Critique the following items for each introduction: 1. Transition from introduction to thesis 2. Presence of: WHO-WHAT-WHERE 5. Vote for each partner’s best introduction on center diamond. For full credit, you must turn in all reviews attached to all 3 introductions. Introduction • Note the following items for each introduction: 1. Is the “who-what-where” of the argument present? 2. Do the sentences following the first sentence flow properly? In other words, is the sentence after the hook relevant or just wacky? 3. Is the transition from introduction to the thesis smooth? Or does it need a transition word/phrase? 4. Is there even a thesis with “F.A.T.T.”? • YOU MUST ADDRESS ALL 4 OF THESE ITEMS FOR EACH INTRODUCTION, “STATEMENT OF OPINION, STATEMENT OF FACT AND SCENE” IN ORDER TO GET FULL CREDIT. Hamburger Hotdog Paper Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim Quote #1 Quote #2 Say: ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be mistrusted, denied, questioned like a— DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come. (101) Say:ABIGAIL. She is blackening my name in the village! She is telling lies about me! She is a cold, sniveling woman, and you bend to her! Let her turn you like a—PROCTOR. Do you look for whippin’? (22) MEAN: This passage illustrates just how far Williams uses any means necessary to win Proctor’s love, even questioning his manhood. MEAN: Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that she is suffering because she is aiding the court, MATTER: As a result, her ambition inspires her turning in those who were acting suspicious to try new methods to be romantically involved MATTER: In this case, her denouncement of the In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Abigail never quitting, using her withMiller, Proctor, Williams is an admirable character whose court reveals her admirable ambition to beat the to use every possible way to resourcefulness and ambitionresourcefulness are heroic. unfair judicial system, and by simply pointing at the achieve her goal of Proctor. paranoia in the air, not creating it, she confirms what the judges already believe—that evil has invaded the town and is clouding their judgment. Quote #3 (Counterargument) Say: ABIGAIL. No, he’ll be comin’ up. Listen, now; if they be questioning us, tell them we danced—I told him as much MEAN: This passage reveals how Williams can masterfully arrange plans so that all the girls involved with the original ritual have the same The Crucible Argumentative Essay Take out: • • Hamburger/Hamburger paper • Say-Mean-Matter Power verbs/phrases worksheet • (Extra Fun! Vocabulary: Doltish, Asinine, Moronic, Vapid) Introduction • Take out your introduction (Statement of fact and scene) • Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog paper Introduction • Take out your introduction • Take out your thesis • Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog paper • Take out your 18 moves list Introduction • Write your thesis and transition into your thesis after your favorite introduction: • Example: The people worth admiring are the people who don’t know how to be contained. An artist’s soul is capacious, able to take in the entire world and place it on a plate, or a blueprint, or a classroom. A visionary requires limitless thinking and dreaming, a way of being that cannot be bound by sensibility and conventions. Christopher Columbus saw a world that in fact never ended, a circumference that could run forever with enough wind and will. Those who are tyrannized by fear and limited vision seem always bound by height, weight, or aptitude, reasons for staying cornered by fear and cynicism, a combination that always underlies sadness for what is already determined in their minds. It is our reaching and straining beyond limitations that make us admirable, that make life boundless and soaring with the very stars we can’t reach. (Move #1) In the novel The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald, Jay Gatsby is one such hero, an admirable character whose reaching for the impossible is considered heroic. Introduction • Take out the essay “Star Travel” by Tommy Kim. Introduction • Writing can be reduced to a series of moves. Let’s see what kind of moves Mr. Kim has! • • • • • Transience Essay Moves Take out the essay, “Alive or Remembered, or Dead and Forgotten” by Elana Ferrante. Work with a partner You will highlight each move I will call on you Read the first three words of the sentence for each move. Essay Moves: The Crucible 1. Transition into thesis 2. Thesis Paragraph #1 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 Paragraph #2 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9. Say #2 10. Mean#2 11. Matter#2 Paragraph #3 12. Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 13. Introduce counterargument quote (Moves 12 & 13 could be the same sentence) 14. Say #3 (Counterargument) 15. Mean#3 16. Matter#3 (Introduce THE UNTOLD) Paragraph #4 17. Transition into last paragraph 18. Restatement of thesis 19. Connect thesis to original fact, scene, opinion or the rest of the world Paragraph #5 Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote #1 Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) Underline and number each move: 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. Transition to thesis Thesis Introduction to quote Say #1 Mean#1 Matter#1 Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph Introduction to quote (Moves 6 & 7 could be the same sentence) Say #2 Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9. Say #2 10.Mean#2 Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9. Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9. Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9. Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 13.Introduce counterargument quote Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9. Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 13.Introduce counterargument quote 14.Say #3 (Counterargument) Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9. Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 13.Introduce counterargument quote 14.Say #3 (Counterargument) 15.Mean#3 Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9. Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 13.Introduce counterargument quote 14.Say #3 (Counterargument) 15.Mean#3 16.Matter#3 Underline and number each move: 1. Thesis 2. Transition to thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9. Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 13.Introduce counterargument quote 14.Say #3 (Counterargument) 15.Mean#3 16.Matter#3 17.Transition into last paragraph Underline and number each move: 1. Transition to thesis 2. Thesis 3. Introduction to quote 4. Say #1 5. Mean#1 6. Matter#1 7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9. Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 13.Introduce counterargument quote 14.Say #3 (Counterargument) 15.Mean#3 16.Matter#3 17.Transition into last paragraph 18.Restatement of thesis Underline and number each move: 12. Transition from matter #2 to next paragraph 13. Introduce counterargument quote 14. Say #3 (Counterargument) 15. Mean#3 16. Matter#3 17. Transition into last paragraph 18. Restatement of thesis 19. Connect thesis to original fact, scene, opinion or the rest of the world Introduction • Take out your introduction (scene/statement of fact, statement of opinion) • Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hamburger paper • Take out my essay “Alive and Remembered, or Dead and Forgotten” with your notes. Essay Take out the following and begin your essay: •3 introductions (interesting statement of fact, statement of opinion and scene) •Hamburger/Hamburger paper •My rubric, paragraph by paragraph Move #1 • Write your thesis after your transition into your thesis. • Example: In 1967 John McCain, a United States senator, was shot down by the North Vietnamese while flying a mission. According to Wikipedia.com, when McCain’s North Vietnamese captors tortured him, he resorted to making an anti-American confession in order to avoid further torture. McCain acted in ways that were unscrupulous in order to survive, and this resourcefulness and ambition were the only ways he could endure the terrible conditions of the prison. Not only do political figures have these admirable traits, but characters in literature also demonstrate these admirable qualities.. (Move #1) In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, Abigail Williams is an admirable character whose resourcefulness and ambition are heroic. (Move #2) MOVE #3, PARAGRAPH #2! • Introduce quote “move. Summarize what is happening around the quote. Assume the reader hasn’t read the book.) • Use the following template: (Character’s Name) first exemplifies how he/she is admirable by (who-what-when of scene), “Quote” (Page #) – Example: Abigail Williams first exemplifies how she is admirable when the pressure is greatest on her, specifically when she is in court and is testifying for her innocence, Move #4 - 6 (Move # 4) ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be mistrusted, denied, questioned like a— DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you— ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come. (101) (Move # 5) Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that she is suffering because she is aiding the court, turning in those who were acting suspicious. (Move # 6) In this case, her denouncement of the court reveals her admirable ambition to beat the unfair judicial system, and by simply pointing at the paranoia in the air, not creating it, she confirms what the judges already believe—that evil has invaded the town and is clouding their judgment. Move #7 & 8 • Transition “move” into paragraph #3 • Use the following template: (Move #7) In addition to (Character’s name) (Admirable traits) displayed in (Where say #1 occurs) we also see these features in scenes when (Where say #2 occurs). (Move #8) Another example of (Character’s name) being admirable takes place when (_who-what-when), Paragraph #3: Moves 9-11 Move 9 (Say):ABIGAIL. She is blackening my name in the village! She is telling lies about me! She is a cold, sniveling woman, and you bend to her! Let her turn you like a— PROCTOR. Do you look for whippin’? (22) Move 10 (Mean) This passage illustrates just how far Williams uses any means necessary to win Proctor’s love, even questioning his manhood. Move 11 (Matter) As a result, her ambition inspires her to try new methods to be romantically involved with Proctor, never quitting, using her resourcefulness to use every possible way to achieve her goal of Proctor. Paragraph #4: Moves 12-16 Move 12 (Contrast Transition): Although this character’s traits are overall admirable, there are some traits that some might find unappealing, such s the time when Move 13 (Introduce quote): • Move 14 (Say: a quote that CONTRADICTS your thesis)“ABIGAIL. No, he’ll be comin’ up. Listen, now; if they be questioning us, tell them we danced—I told him as much already. (18) Move 15 (Mean): This passage reveals how Williams can masterfully arrange plans so that all the girls involved with the original ritual have the same account of the incident. Move 16 (Matter): Ultimately, Abigail Williams ambitiously arranges the proper stories to tell using her resourceful mind. Though this may be immoral to some who are obsessive with rules, in the end Williams allows her friends and herself a way to escape the . (Unmentioned Variable) cruel punishments given out during that time, punishment that included stone presses, hangings, and drowning. The pure ambition to survive allowed Williams to survive the ruthless persecution of that era. Paragraph #5: Moves 16-18 16. 17. 18 Transition into last paragraph Restatement of thesis Connect thesis to the rest of the world (Move 17: Transition) On the whole, Abigail Williams’ survived her time, which is not what we can say about Proctor. (Move 19: Restatement of thesis) In order to enjoy our life, we must be alive, and because of Abigail Williams’ admirable ambition and resourcefulness, she lives another day (Move 18: Connect thesis to rest of the world). This survival is a primary drive in all of human civilization, including during war, when we must take any measure possible to survive, just as John McCain did when the North Vietnamese electrocuted, beat, and starved him. Essay Rubric • Attach the following: – Rough draft of essay (printed) – Three introductions – Two peer edits of introductions – Say-mean-matter: Hamburger/Hamburger outline • Typed draft is due Friday: 11/14. Essay Rubric • If you are finished, turn in the following, stapled: 1. Your Essay 2. The rubric, graded by your partner (attach the paper your partner WROTE on) Finish! 1. Turn in your rough draft in the back tray. 2. If you are not done, finish the essay this weekend or come into tutoring during lunch. Or schedule a time to meet. DEMAND a time to meet. Own your life.