Informative Essay
Provide an explanation
You must use 2 of the “Key Words” in your
essay.
Question: What is one central idea expressed through all the
texts, and how is the central idea developed?
Thesis—Rough Draft:
In the articles “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and
“Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent
Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed
throughout the texts.
What is missing in the thesis according to the question?
•Talk to a partner
•1 minute.
Question: What is one central idea expressed through all the
texts, and how is the central idea developed?
Thesis—Rough Draft:
In the articles “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and
“Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent
Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed
throughout the texts by the use of figurative language and
diction.
•Talk to a partner
•1 minute.
• Write an essay in which you discuss the development of one
central idea you have identified in the text(s you’ve been
studying. Be sure to explain how the central idea is developed
(Style: figurative language, irony, diction) and how it is shaped
and refined by specific details.
• Find examples all of your examples of figurative language,
irony, diction, and see what two out of the three you can use to
for your thesis.
• You must use TWO out of the three stylistic choices.
Write your own rough draft of a thesis.
Take out the hamburger/hamburger paper.
Write thesis in the diamond (middle).
Question: What is one central idea expressed through all the
texts, and how is the central idea developed?
•Use this template to write your own thesis:
Thesis: In the articles (Article #1 Title, by Author #1), and
(Article #2 by Author #2), the central idea of fearing the other
is developed throughout the text by
3: Irony, diction, metaphor/similes).
the use of (2 out of
(If you don’t like this template, feel free to be creative and
write your own! Just make sure you answer the essay
prompt.)
Question: What themes are introduced in The Crucible and how
are the themes developed over the course of the text?
•Use this template to write your own thesis:
Thesis: In the essays “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and
“Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent Staples,
the idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts
by the use of irony and diction.
(If you don’t like this template, feel free to be creative and
write your own! Just make sure you answer the essay
prompt.)
• What are your first steps in starting an essay?
What is a thesis?
• A thesis is an answer to a question.
– How did hip-hop change popular
culture?
Hit the “Sweet Spot” with a thesis.
General Statement
“Sweet Spot”
Too Narrow
Hit the “Sweet Spot” with a thesis.
THESIS
Question: How did hip-hop change popular culture?
General Statement: The main idea was proven with lots
of things.
“
Sweet Spot”: The idea of fearing the “other” is developed
throughout the texts by the use of irony and diction.
Too Narrow: The idea of fearing the “other” is developed in
the third sentence by Ascher, who is also a vegetarian, but
she was a vegan 5 years ago, until her husband left her—
Brent Staples is a great writer. He’s also attractive, and he
talked about lots of thing and used things like irony and stuff.
F.A.T.T. Thesis
Include “F.A.T.T.” in your thesis.
•Focus: What is the main idea?
•Author: Author’s full name
•Title: Poems and short stories use “quotations”
•Text: what type of text is it? Short story? Poem?
F.A.T.T. Thesis
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•
•
•
Focus: What is the main idea?
Author: Author’s full name
Title: Poems and short stories use “quotations”
Text: what type of text is it? Short story? Poem?
In the article(Text), “Rap the World”(Title) by Dean Young(Author)
(Focus) hip hop influenced popular culture through dress,
language and attitude throughout the country, specifically with
the youth.
Introductions
• What do you know about introductions?
Introductions
• Take out a piece of paper.
• Write “1st Draft” on this paper.
Introductions: Informative Essay
• You can use two types of introductions
for this informative essay:
– Interesting Fact
– Personal Anecdote
Introductions
• Anecdote
• Think of a personal moment of your
subject matter for your thesis. My
subject: Fear of the Other
• The shriek of Dana Campbell’s cries paralyzed the entire class—
Dana had a form of Autism which included behaviors like self-harm.
• My Filipino neighbor had a dead pig over his shoulder, its ears
flopping with each of my neighbor’s step.
• As the woman wearing the Burka walked through the airport, even
children paused and stared at her.
Introduction
• Anecdotal Using Scene
• Use 3 out of the 5 senses
• Quickest way to emotionally convince the reader
• Pure storytelling
Introduction
• Scene: Write 3 sensory details about a
time you witnessed/experienced “the
other.”
EXAMPLE: When Dana Campbell began hitting herself
and screamed during class (5th grade).
3 SENSORY DETAILS
• Dana Campbell’s shrieks and cries
• Tony’s Funions
• Mrs. Travis’ forearm muscle and veins
Introduction
Scene: Write 3 sensory details.
The shriek of Dana Campbell’s cries (Sensory detail #1
paralyzed the entire class. Dana had a form of Autism that
included behaviors like self-harm, and today, it was a severe
episode that shed blood. Her blond hair was clumped near the
scalp with blood. My best friend, Tony, had just opened his
Funions (Sensory detail #2), and the pungent scent made me
want to wretch. Mrs. Travis side stepped desks and ran down
the aisle, grabbing Dana’s wrist, Mrs. Travis’ forearms corded
with veins and muscle (Sensory detail #3). I was afraid to help.
I was afraid of Dana, since her behaviors were so frighteningly
different from my own. She was the “other,” and when I
categorized her as such, it was easy to dismiss compassion
toward her.
Introductions
• Find one interesting fact about your
thesis, and write it down as your first
line of your essay.
Introductions
• Interesting Statement of Fact
• Look up an interesting fact about the
subject matter of your thesis. My
subject: Compassion is dismissed
when fear takes over
Introductions
• Start first sentence with interesting fact
• As a class, get me from the first sentence to the thesis:
• Six million Jews were murdered.
In the essays “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and “Just
Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent Staples, the
idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts by
the use of irony and diction.
Introductions
• Start first sentence with interesting fact
• As a class, get me from the first sentence to the thesis:
• Six million Jews were murdered.
In the essays “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and “Just
Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent Staples, the
idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the texts by
the use of irony and diction.
Finding Quotes to support your thesis
• Take out a piece of paper.
• Hamburger-Hamburger a regular piece of
paper.
• Write your thesis in the middle diamond.
• Choose two quotes to support your thesis
on the two halves.
Hamburger Hotdog Paper
Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim
Quote #1
Author: Lazaear Ascher
Title: “On Compassion”
Quote #2
Author: Brent Staples
Title: “Walk On By: Black Men in Public
Spaces”
Say: “Up the avenue, at Ninety-first
Say: “My first victim was a woman—white,
Street, there is a small French bread
shop where you can sit and eat a buttery,
overpriced croissant and wash it down
with rich cappuccino” (Ascher 47).
well dressed, probably in her early
twenties. I came upon her late one
evening on a deserted street in Hyde
Park, a relatively affluent neighborhood…”
(Staples 383).
In the essays “On Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and
“Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent
Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed
throughout the texts by the use of irony and diction.
Introduction
• How do you find quotes to support your
thesis?
Outline (Do Steve Jobs Assignment)
• Choose two quotes to support your thesis.
How do you analyze evidence/quotes?
Quote #1
Say: QUOTE demonstrating Irony/Diction/Metaphor-Simile
“Up the avenue, at Ninety-first Street, there is a small French
bread shop where you can sit and eat a buttery, overpriced
croissant and wash it down with rich cappuccino” (Ascher 47).
Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Summarize the use
of Irony/Diction/Metaphor-Simile.
Ascher recounts an incident in which she witnesses a
homeless man enter an affluent café.
*MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): How does
the Irony/Diction/Metaphor-Simile support the main idea?
In this case, Ascher is carefully using the word “rich” to
describe a beverage in order to emphasize the contrast
between the upscale café and its customers to the homeless
man that enters. Ultimately, this use of diction portrays the
homeless man as even more anomalous and develops the idea
of the “other” through contrast, of rich and poor, of familiar and
Quote #2
Say: “My first victim was a woman—white, well dressed,
probably in her early twenties. I came upon her late one
evening on a deserted street in Hyde Park, a relatively affluent
neighborhood…” (Staples 383).
Mean (What does the quote “mean”?):
Staples ironically explains his position as a predator, preying
on a white woman on a nightly stroll, when in reality he is simply
walking down the street as an African American man, innocent
and in fact wanting to be considerate.
MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?):
In other words, he takes on the position as a predator so the
reader can better understand what he experiences, using irony
to persuade the reader of the appalling judgment made on him
based simply on his skin color, based simply on being an
“other.”
Quote #1 (Do as a class)
Say: QUOTE demonstrating Irony/Diction/MetaphorSimile
Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Summarize the
use of Irony/Diction/Metaphor-Simile.
MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): How
does the Irony/Diction/Metaphor-Simile support the
main idea?
Hamburger Hotdog Paper
Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim
Quote #1
Author: Lazaear Ascher
Title: “On Compassion”
Quote #2
Author: Brent Staples
Title: “Walk On By: Black Men in Public
Spaces”
Say: “Up the avenue, at Ninety-first Street,
Say: “My first victim was a woman—white, well
there is a small French bread shop where you dressed, probably in her early twenties. I came
can sit and eat a buttery, overpriced croissant
her the
late
one
In the play The Crucible, by upon
Arthur Miller,
theme
of evening on a deserted street
and wash it down with rich cappuccino”
paranoia diminishing the charity
people Park,
have towards
in Hyde
a relatively affluent
one
another
is
developed
throughout
the
text by the
(Ascher 47).
actions of the characters. neighborhood…” (Staples 383).
Mean (What does the quote “mean”?):
Ascher recounts an incident in which she
witnesses a homeless man enter an affluent
café. .
MATTER (How does this matter to the
thesis?):
In this case, Ascher is carefully using the
word “rich” to describe a beverage in order to
emphasize the contrast between the upscale
café and its customers to the homeless man
that enters. Ultimately, this use of diction
portrays the homeless man as even more
anomalous and develops the idea of the
“other” through contrast, of rich and poor, of
Mean (What does the quote “mean”?):
Staples ironically explains his position as a
predator, preying on a white woman on a
nightly stroll, when in reality he is simply
walking down the street as an African American
man, innocent and in fact wanting to be
considerate.
MATTER (How does this matter to the
thesis?):
In other words, he takes on the position as a
predator so the reader can better understand
what he experiences, using irony to persuade
the reader of the appalling judgment made on
him based simply on his skin color, based
Introduction
• Take out your introduction (Statement of fact and
scene)
• Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog
paper
Introduction
• Take out your 1st draft
• Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog
paper
• Take out your 13 moves list
Introduction
Write your thesis and transition into your thesis after your
introduction:
Example:
The shriek of Dana Campbell’s cries paralyzed the entire class.
Dana had a form of Autism that included behaviors like self-harm,
and today, it was a severe episode that shed blood. Her blond hair
was clumped near the scalp with blood. My best friend, Tony, had
just opened his Funions, and the pungent scent made me want to
wretch. Mrs. Travis side stepped desks and ran down the aisle,
grabbing Dana’s wrist, Mrs. Travis’ forearms corded with veins and
muscle. I was afraid to help. I was afraid of Dana, since her
behaviors were so frighteningly different from my own. She was the
“other,” and when I categorized her as such, it was easy to dismiss
compassion toward her. . (Move #1) There have been writers
exploring the same conflict I had when encountering the “other,”
using rhetorical techniques to persuade the reader to accept their
point of view.. (Move #2) In the essays “On Compassion” by Lazaear
Ascher and “Just Walk on By: Black Men in Public Space” by Brent
Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is developed throughout the
texts by the use of irony and diction. .
Introduction
• Take out the essay “Fear and Loathing in Salem”
by Tommy Kim.
Introduction
• Writing can be reduced to a series of moves. Let’s see
what kind of moves Mr. Kim has!
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•
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•
Expository Essay Moves
Take out the essay “We Are All the
Other” by Tommy Kim.
You will highlight each move
I will call on you
Read the first three words of the sentence
for each move.
Informational Essay Moves
Underline and number each of these moves:
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
Paragraph #1
3. Introduction to quote
4. Say #1
5. Mean#1
6. Matter#1
Paragraph #2
7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
9. Say #2
10.Mean#2
11.Matter#2
Paragraph #3
12.Transition into last paragraph
13.Restatement of thesis
Paragraph #4
Expository Essay Moves
1. Transition INTO thesis.
Expository Essay Moves
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
Expository Essay Moves
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
3. Introduction to quote
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Mean#1
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Mean#1
Matter#1
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
7.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Mean#1
Matter#1
Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
7.
8.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Mean#1
Matter#1
Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
7.
8.
9.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Mean#1
Matter#1
Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
Say #2
Expository Essay Moves
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
3. Introduction to quote
4. Say #1
5. Mean#1
6. Matter#1
7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
9. Say #2
10.Mean#2
11.Matter#2
12.Transition into last paragraph
13.Restatement of thesis
Expository Essay Moves
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
3. Introduction to quote
4. Say #1
5. Mean#1
6. Matter#1
7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
9. Say #2
10.Mean#2
11.Matter#2
12.Transition into last paragraph
13.Restatement of thesis
Expository Essay Moves:
Copy these moves and check them off as
you write.
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
3. Introduction to quote
4. Say #1
5. Mean#1
6. Matter#1
7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
9. Say #2
10.Mean#2
11.Matter#2
12.Transition into last paragraph
13.Restatement of thesis
Introduction
• Take out your introduction (scene/statement of
fact)
• Take out your say-mean-matter
hamburger/hamburger paper
• Take out my essay “Fear and Loathing in Salem”
• Take out your 13 moves list (we just copied them
down)
Essay
Take out the following and begin your essay:
• Introduction (interesting statement of fact)
•Hamburger/Hamburger paper
•My rubric, paragraph by paragraph
1.Transition INTO thesis.
2.Thesis
3.Introduction to quote
4.Say #1
5.Mean#1
6.Matter#1
7.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
8.Introduction to quote
9.Say #2
10.Mean#2
11.Matter#2
12.Transition into last paragraph
13.Restatement of thesis
Move #1
• Write a transition from your introduction into your
thesis.
• Sample you can steal: “There have been writers
exploring the topic of__________, using rhetorical
techniques to persuade the reader of their
arguments.
Move #1
• Remember to use TWO of the key
words in your essay.
Move #1 and 2
• Write your thesis after your transition into your
thesis.
The shriek of Dana Campbell’s cries paralyzed the entire class.
Dana had a form of Autism that included behaviors like self-harm,
and today, it was a severe episode that shed blood. Her blond
hair was clumped near the scalp with blood. My best friend, Tony,
had just opened his Funions, and the pungent scent made me
want to wretch. Mrs. Travis side stepped desks and ran down the
aisle, grabbing Dana’s wrist, Mrs. Travis’ forearms corded with
veins and muscle. I was afraid to help. I was afraid of Dana,
since her behaviors were so frighteningly different from my own.
She was the “other,” and when I categorized her as such, it was
easy to dismiss compassion toward her. . (Move #1) There have
been writers exploring the same conflict I had when encountering
the “other,” using rhetorical techniques to persuade the reader to
accept their point of view.. (Move #2) In the essays “On
Compassion” by Lazaear Ascher and “Just Walk on By: Black Men
in Public Space” by Brent Staples, the idea of fearing the “other” is
developed throughout the texts by the use of irony and diction. .
MOVE #3, PARAGRAPH #2!
• Introduce quote “move”
• Use the following template:
In (Writer’s Name) essay, (Title of essay),
he/she uses (Rhetorical technique) to
persuade the reader of his/her position.
Move #4 - 6
•
(Move # 4) “Up the avenue, at Ninety-first Street, there
is a small French bread shop where you can sit and eat a
buttery, overpriced croissant and wash it down with rich
cappuccino” (Ascher 47).
(Move # 5) Ascher recounts an incident in which she witnesses
a homeless man enter an affluent café.
(Move # 6) In this case, Ascher is carefully using the word
“rich” to describe a beverage in order to emphasize the
contrast between the upscale café and its customers to the
homeless man that enters. Ultimately, this use of diction
portrays the homeless man as even more anomalous and
develops the idea of the “other” through contrast, of rich and
poor, of familiar and aberrant.
Move #7 & 8
• Transition “move” into paragraph #3
• Use the following template:
Not only is (Rhetorical technique #1) used to
emphasize
, (Rhetorical
technique #2) is also used to
.
Paragraph #3: Moves 9-11
Move 9 (Say): “My first victim was a woman—white, well
dressed, probably in her early twenties. I came upon her late
one evening on a deserted street in Hyde Park, a relatively
affluent neighborhood…” (Staples 383).
Move 10 (Mean) Staples ironically explains his position as a
predator, preying on a white woman on a nightly stroll, when in
reality he is simply walking down the street as an African
American man, innocent and in fact wanting to be considerate.
Move 11 (Matter) In other words, he takes on the position as
a predator so the reader can better understand what he
experiences, using irony to persuade the reader of the
appalling judgment made on him based simply on his skin
color, based simply on being an “other.”
Paragraph #4: Moves 12-13
•
This (Main idea) espoused by both (Writer #1) and (Writer
#2) is tied to my own experience of (main idea). (Summarize
your scene, or touch on it again). (Then use the pronoun “we”
or “us” and connect the main idea to the rest of the world).
Essay Rubric
• If you are finished, turn in the following,
stapled:
1. Your Essay
2. The rubric, graded by your partner (attach the
paper your partner WROTE on)
Finish!
1. Turn in your rough draft in the back tray.
2. If you are not done, finish the essay this weekend or come into
tutoring Tuesday morning. 15 week is fast approaching.