The Great Gatsby (Analysis Review and Self Score)

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DECONSTRUCTING YOUR
ANALYSIS ESSAY
3 February 2016
BELL WORK:
Pick up a Self Score Rubric and locate your
completed GATSBY ESSAY.
English III
Mrs. Oualline
Ms. Perkins
Coach Svien
THE RUBRIC
 Your essay will be scored based on the following criteria:
 T HESIS S TATEMENT (10 points)
 T OPIC S ENTENCES (10 points)
 E XAMPLES (30 points)
 Q UALIT Y OF A NALYSIS (30 points)
 C ORRECTNESS OF S T YLE (20 points)
 Today, you are going to DECONSTRUCT and SCORE your own
essay based on the RUBRIC.
THESIS STATEMENTS
 First we are going to take a look at your THESIS STATEMENT.
 Highlight your thesis PINK.
 Now READ THROUGH YOUR THESIS looking for the following:
 The author’s name and the title of the work
 F. Scott Fitzgerald
 The Great Gatsby
 A thematic idea
 Hope, Carelessness, Honesty, Etc.
 A statement of THEME
THESIS STATEMENTS
 Here are some really good examples:
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald presents the idea that hope
drives a person to do great things, but it may also set a person up for
great disappointment.
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald suggests that distrust can
cause a person to damage close relationships which can eventually
lead to a lonely existence.
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald suggests that the obsession
with a single dream can eventually lead a person to disillusionment
and ruin.
THESIS STATEMENTS
 Here are some really good examples:
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald presents the idea that hope
drives a person to do great things, but it may also set a person up for
great disappointment.
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald suggests that distrust can
cause a person to damage close relationships which can eventually
lead to a lonely existence.
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald suggests that the obsession
with a single dream can eventually lead a person to disillusionment
and ruin.
The title of the novel is
underlined or italicized.
THESIS STATEMENTS
 Here are some really good examples:
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald presents the idea that hope
drives a person to do great things, but it may also set a person up for
great disappointment.
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald suggests that distrust can
cause a person to damage close relationships which can eventually
lead to a lonely existence.
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald suggests that the obsession
with a single dream can eventually lead a person to disillusionment
and ruin.
The name of the
author is included.
THESIS STATEMENTS
 Here are some really good examples:
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald presents the idea that hope
drives a person to do great things, but it may also set a person up for
great disappointment.
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald suggests that distrust can
cause a person to damage close relationships which can eventually
lead to a lonely existence.
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald suggests that the obsession
with a single dream can eventually lead a person to disillusionment
and ruin.
The statement includes
a clear thematic idea.
THESIS STATEMENTS
 Here are some really good examples:
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald presents the idea that hope
drives a person to do great things, but it may also set a person up for
great disappointment.
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald suggests that distrust can
cause a person to damage close relationships which can eventually
lead to a lonely existence.
 In The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald suggests that the obsession
with a single dream can eventually lead a person to disillusionment
and ruin.
Includes a FULL statement
of theme connecting to a
universal message
explored in the novel.
THESIS STATEMENTS
Now evaluate your THESIS STATEMENT based
on the following rubric:
Excellent
Generic
No Thematic
Statement
No Thesis
TOPIC SENTENCES
 Each BODY PARAGRAPH should have a TOPIC SENTENCE, the
“mini-thesis” stating the purpose of the paragraph.
 Highlight your topic sentences BLUE.
TOPIC SENTENCES
 Here is an example using the topic sentence format that I
gave you in class:
¶# 1. In the story, the character of Gatsby is hopeful.
¶# 2. Gatsby, however, never realizes that his hopefulness will eventually
lead to his own downfall.
TOPIC SENTENCES
 Here is an example using the topic sentence format that I
gave you in class:
¶# 1. In the story, the character of Gatsby is hopeful.
Thematic
idea from
thesis
¶# 2. Gatsby, however, never realizes that his hopefulness will eventually
lead to his own downfall.
Statement of THEME
from thesis.
TOPIC SENTENCES
 But you could also construct unique topic sentences to fit your
essay and writing style.
¶# 1. Gatsby’s obsession transcends reality, and his dream version of
Daisy can never live up to the real Daisy.
¶# 2. Gatsby’s inability to differentiate between his dream and reality
leads to great disappointment and, ultimately, his death.
TOPIC SENTENCES
 But you could also construct unique topic sentences to fit your
essay and writing style.
Thematic idea from thesis
¶# 1. Gatsby’s obsession transcends reality, and his dream version of
Daisy can never live up to the real Daisy.
¶# 2. Gatsby’s inability to differentiate between his dream and reality
leads to great disappointment and, ultimately, his death.
Statement of THEME
from thesis.
TOPIC SENTENCES
Now evaluate your TOPIC SENTENCES based
on the following rubric:
Excellent
Generic
Not
Connected to
Thesis
No Topic
Sentences
CONTEXT + TEXTUAL EVIDENCE
 You should have chosen EXAMPLES from the novel that are
RELEVANT to your topic.
 You also should have included CONTEXT for each example.
 Highlight your context and examples GREEN.
CONTEXT + TEXTUAL EVIDENCE
 Here are some examples of INEFFECTIVE use of context and
direct quotation for your essay examples:
 In Chapter Six, Gatsby reveals that he wants to repeat the past.
“‘Can’t repeat the past?’ he cried incredulously. ‘Why of course you
can!’” (110).
Ineffective REPETITION.
The quotation is NOT EMBEDDED.
CONTEXT + TEXTUAL EVIDENCE
 Here are some examples of INEFFECTIVE use of context and
direct quotation for your essay examples:
 In Chapter Six, Daisy attends Gatsby’s party. She doesn’t like it. She
is really bored. This upsets Gatsby. “He wanted nothing less of Daisy
than that she should go to Tom and say: ‘I never loved you.’ After she
had obliterated four years with that sentence they could decide upon
the more practical measures to be taken. One of them was that, after
she was free, they were to go back to Louisville and be married from
her house—just as if it were five years before” (109).
The context is TOO WORDY.
The quotation is TOO LONG.
The quotation is NOT EMBEDDED.
CONTEXT + TEXTUAL EVIDENCE
 Now, an example of HIGHLY EFFECTIVE use of context and
embedded quotation:
After Daisy and Tom attend the party at Gatsby’s house, Gatsby is
melancholy. He desperately wants Daisy to “[obliterate] four years”
with Tom so that he and Daisy could “go back to Louisville and be
married in her house—just as if it were five years before” (109).
The context is brief, but provides the relevant information necessary to
put the quotation into context.
The quotation is cut down and embedded into the natural sentence
structure of the essay.
The flow from context to direct quotation is smooth and seamless.
CONTEXT + TEXTUAL EVIDENCE
Now score your EXAMPLES based on the
following rubric:
Excellent
Good, but not
embedded
Ineffective
Completely
disconnected
from topic
QUALIT Y OF ANALYSIS
(COMMENTARY)
 After EACH EXAMPLE, you should
include COMMENTARY.
 The purpose of commentary is to
explain the CONNECTION between
your specific examples and your
thesis.
 Highlight all of your commentary
ORANGE.
 You should have more ORANGE
than you do GREEN.
QUALIT Y OF ANALYSIS
(COMMENTARY)
 Here are some examples of INEFFECTIVE commentary.
 In Chapter Six, Gatsby reveals that he wants to repeat the past.
“‘Can’t repeat the past?’ he cried incredulously. ‘Why of course you
can!’” (110). This shows how Gatsby wants to repeat the past.
The commentary is WAY TOO BRIEF.
The commentary merely REPEATS the quotation.
QUALIT Y OF ANALYSIS
(COMMENTARY)
 Now, an example of HIGHLY EFFECTIVE use of commentary:
After Daisy and Tom attend the party at Gatsby’s house, Gatsby is
melancholy. He desperately wants Daisy to “[obliterate] four years”
with Tom so that he and Daisy could “go back to Louisville and be
married in her house—just as if it were five years before” (109).
Gatsby spends so much time and energy imagining a life with Daisy
that he fails to realize that Daisy has her own life. His unwillingness to
see her as a person with a life beyond a one -month romance makes
the success of the current relationship impossible. Gatsby is not
content with Daisy loving him or wanting to create a life with him in the
present because he is consumed by his desire to recapture the past.
This commentary is thorough and fully explores the quotation provided.
The commentary is longer than the quotation.
QUALIT Y OF ANALYSIS
(COMMENTARY)
Now evaluate the ANALYSIS or COMMENTARY
based on the rubric:
Excellent
Generic
Too brief
Off Topic
SUMMARY SENTENCE
 Should conclude each paragraph by connecting back to your
thesis statement.
 Should not be highlighted.
 If you DO NOT have a sentence at the end of each paragraph
that is not highlighted, then you need to add one when you
are typing up your final draft.
CORRECTNESS OF ST YLE
 The last element you need to evaluate is your:
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Grammar
Usage
Punctuation
Spelling
 Mark any errors you find in your essay.
CORRECTNESS OF ST YLE
Now score the STYLE of your essay based on
the following rubric:
YOUR SCORE
Based on the rubric, what do you think your
scores SHOULD BE?
Add up all of the points to determine your
estimated grade for this essay.
How did you do?
REVISE/EDIT/PUBLISH
 Use the feedback and sample rubric to help guide you as you
revise/edit and type your final draft.
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