Benchmark Assessment: Descriptive Writing
J. Fernandez
Grade 11 Assignment: Concrete Description of an Abstract Word
Situation: What is the difference between an abstract and a concrete word? We can smell, touch,
taste, hear, or feel something that is concrete. A word such as shame is an abstract word—we are
unable to see, touch, smell, feel, or hear something called shame.
Task: Note that in the student sample and in Gregory’s narrative, Not Poor, Just Broke, both authors
make their abstract words shame and mess vividly real to the reader by providing clear, specific,
personal sensory examples. Your task is to select an abstract word and write an essay in which you
define it concretely. You must make use of imagery by appealing to all five of your reader’s senses in
your description.
Task-Specific Guidelines:
Be sure to:
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Complete a graphic organizer before you begin writing your first draft.
Write a lead (introduction) that draws your audience into the piece.
Select words that are concrete and specific enough to create a picture in your reader’s mind,
appeal to his/her senses, create images, express your intended meaning, and convey the
appropriate emotional associations (make effective use of imagery).
Avoid using vague, general descriptions.
Paint a concrete picture of your abstract word by including details that appeal to all five senses.
Turn your concrete description of your abstract word into a narrative or essay.
General Guidelines:
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Organize your ideas in a logical and coherent manner.
Use language that communicates ideas effectively.
Follow the conventions of standard written English. Correct all spelling and grammatical errors.
Your essay must be at least two pages. Your essay must be at least two pages. **Handwritten
essays will be accepted for this essay [only] due to the media lab being closed on Thursday and
Friday. I encourage you to skip lines and type the essay if possible**
If you would like my editing, commentary, etc., your draft must be submitted by Wednesday,
May 6, 2015. The draft will not receive a grade.
Proofread, edit, and revise your draft; submit your final draft by Friday, May 8, 2015.