Hi-Lights I
Chapter Seven Review!!!
Clichés/Sexist
Language
Homophones
Grab Bag
Objectivity
Wordiness/
Redundancies
Clarity/
Conciseness
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Clichés/Sexist Language - 100
• Replace the sexist term with a more
appropriate one.
• They’ve Always wanted to be firemen.
Did you get it right?
Clichés/Sexist Language - 100
•Firefighters!
Back to Game Board
Clichés/Sexist Language - 200
• Blah blah blah . . . One giant leap
for mankind . . .
The Answer
Clichés/Sexist Language - 200
• Humankind
Back to Game Board
Clichés/Sexist Language - 300
• The businessman’s job is giving
the business.
Think you got it?
Clichés/and Sexist Language
300
• Business executive’s, manager’s, etc.
Back to Game Board
Clichés/Sexist Language
- 400
 Dude, this motor oil is totally man-made.
And the answer is . . .
Cliches and Sexist Language 400
• Machine-made, synthetic
Back to the Game Board
Clichés/Sexist Language - 500
• After the cyclone ripped through the
sprawling metropolis of Cascade,
seamstress rode her bike to Marshall’s for a
frozen Snicker’s Bar.
So, you think you’re right, eh???
Clichés/Sexist Language - 500
• Seamster, Tailor, Sewer
Back to Game Board
Clichés/Sexist Language - 600
• Rephrase without using
clichés
• After his bath, Cody was as
fresh as a daisy.
Here’s the answer . . .
Clichés/Sexist Language - 600
After
his bath, Cody was
fresh.
Back to the Game Board
Clichés/Sexist Language - 700
Don’t beat around the bush; get
right down to the meat and
potatoes of these clichés!
The answer . . .
Clichés/Sexist Language - 700

Don’t waste time; get to the point of these
clichés!
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Clichés/Sexist
Language - 800
•After the dust settled, my parents
grounded me for the rest of my life.
Think you’re right?
Clichés/Sexist Language - 800
 After
the argument, my parents grounded
me for the rest of my life.
 My parents grounded me for the rest of my
life.
Back to the Game Board
Clichés/Sexist Language - 1000

A general rule of thumb is to avoid
like the plague taking your girlfriend
to the pizza joint and video arcade for
your first date.
Click for the answer
Cliches/Sexist Language- 1000
• Generally, avoid taking your
girlfriend to the pizza joint and
video arcade for your first date.
• Avoid taking your girlfriend to the
pizza joint and video arcade for
your first date.
Back to the Game Board
Homophones - 100
 According
to school policy, students
cannot (where, wear) tank tops that show
stomachs.
This way to the answer
Homophones - 100
• According to school policy, students
cannot wear tank tops that show
stomachs.
Back to Game Board
Homophones - 200
• (“Who’s, Whose) ears are you talking
about, big mouth?”
This way to the answer
Homophones - 200
“Whose ears are you talking
about, big mouth?”
Back to Game Board
Homophones - 300

“Dude, I totally have (two, too, to) much
homework tonight; woe is me! How will I
ever find time to play X-Box tonight?”
This Way to the Answer
Homophones - 300

“Dude, I totally have too much
homework tonight; woe is me! How
will I ever find time to play X-Box
tonight?”
This way to the answer
Homophones - 400
• George’s insane laughter (effected,
affected) the teacher.
This way to the answer
Homophones - 400
• George’s insane laughter affected the
teacher.
To the Game Board
Homophones - 500
• Large (wastes, waists) and much
(waists, wastes) are sad symbols of our
nation’s wealth.
This way to the answer
Homophones - 500
• Large waists and much waste are sad
symbols of our nation’s wealth.
Back to the Game Board
Homophones - 600
 She
(through, threw) the spitball (through,
threw) the classroom.
And the answer is . . .
Homophones - 600
 She
threw the spitball through the
classroom.
Back to Game Board
Homophones - 700
• I will play tetherball with (you’re, your)
pancreas.
Homophones - 700

I will play tetherball with YOUR
pancreas.
Game board
Homophones - 800
“You shut up, man – don’t
think you can (led, lead) me
around!”
Homophones - 800
• “You shut up, man – don’t
think you can lead me
around!”
To the Game Board!!!!
Homophones - 1000
• (Their, They’re, There) neighbor
drowned in the creek over (their, they’re,
there). (Their, They’re, there) never
going to forget it.
This way to the answer
Homophones - 1000
• Their neighbor drowned in the creek over
there. They’re never going to forget it.
This way to the answer
Objectivity - 100
 The clowns, who were really scary
looking, made small children cry.
Objectivity - 100
 The clowns made small children cry.
Back to the Game Board
Objectivity - 200
• When he blows his nose, he doesn’t use
tissues or his sleeve; he uses magazines,
which is really disgusting.
Objectivity - 200

When he blows his nose,
he does not use tissues or
his sleeve; he uses
magazines.

To the Game Board
Objectivity - 300
• This makes no
sense, but none
of the campsites
has electricity.
Objectivity - 300
• None of the campsites has
electricity.
To the Game Board
Objectivity - 400

Everyone will remember Greenbush
as a sprawling metropolis.
Objectivity - 400
• Many Sheboygan County residents will
remember Greenbush as a sprawling
metropolis.
• Scott Fischer will remember Greenbush.
Objectivity
500
 Mr.
Munson, that weird guy
with all of the dogs, walks
down Reed Street every
morning.
Subject/Verb Agreement - 500
Mr. Munson, the guy with all of
the dogs, walks down Reed Street
every morning.
Objectivity - 600
Albert Einstein heroically
saved five groundhogs from
a steamroller.
Objectivity - 600
• Albert Einstein saved
five groundhogs from a
steamroller.
OH
NO!!!
Game Board
Objectivity - 700
 Dressed
like a player with a
bunch of bling-bling, Mr. Mella
said, “Go Panthers!”
Objectivity - 700
• Dressed like a player with a
bunch of bling-bling, Mr. Mella
said, “Go Panthers!”
Go Panthers!!
This way to the game board
Objectivity - 800
• We love to finish our
paper on time.
Objectivity - 800
•
Hi Lights students
like to finish their
newspaper on time.
Objectivity - 1000
• Ponyboy Curtis, A Greaser, Will always
be remembered as a hero.
Objectivity - 1000
• Jerry Smith of Windrixville will remember Ponyboy Curtis as A hero.
• Many will remember Ponyboy Curtis as a hero.
Back to the Game Board
Wordiness/Redundancies - 100
Find a better word.
 Students should utilize their time better.

Think you’ve got it??
Wordiness/Redundancies - 100

Students should
use their time better.
Game Board
Wordiness/Redundancies 200
• The teacher planned to
initiate new methods of
keeping students awake.
Wordiness/Redundancies 200
• The teacher planned to
start, begin, use new
methods of keeping
students awake.
Click on the clock!
Wordiness/Redundancies- 300
• The goblin of fire and the yard gnomes
reside in front of Plymouth High School.
Think you’ve got it, eh?
Wordiness/Redundancies - 300
• The goblin of fire and the yard gnomes
live in front of Plymouth High School.
To the Game Board
Wordiness/Redundacies - 400
• We will proceed to the concert to
make the garage band feel like rock
stars.
Click Here
Wordiness/Redundancies- 400
• We will go to the
concert to make the
garage band feel like
rock stars.
Rock back to the Game Board
Wordiness/Redundancies - 500
Oh Man!!!
Wordiness/Redundancies - 500
Eliminate the redundancy.
• Dude, Big John has that exact same
jacket!
Click for next slide
Wordiness/Redundancies - 500
• Dude, Big John has the same jacket!
• Dude, Big John has that exact jacket!
Go Home!
Wordiness/Redundancies 600
 I usually pack my lunch at 6:00 a.m. in the
morning.
Wordiness/Redundancies - 600
• I usually pack my lunch at 6:00 a.m.
Game Board, Y’all
Wordiness/Redundancies - 700
• The CD is blue in color.
Wordiness/Redundancies 700
• The CD is blue.
• Click Here
Wordiness/Redundancies - 800
• Samantha is now currently
pumping iron to make sure she
aces tomorrow’s Hi-Lights test.
Wordiness/Redundancies - 800
• Samantha is now pumping iron to make
sure she aces tomorrow’s Hi-Lights test.
Game Board
Wordiness/Redundancies - 1000
• The Dude was ubiquitous in Malibu.
Stay out of Malibu!!!!
Pronoun/Antecedent - 1000
The Dude was widespread/all over (in)
Malibu.
Malibu
Click to return to game board
Conciseness/Clarity - 100
 Make this sentence more concise.
 The drag race was won by the schmuck
in the corvette.
Conciseness/Clarity - 100
• The schmuck in the corvette won the
drag race.
Click here for more review fun!
Conciseness/Clarity - 200
 Pat and Joe decided to make a journey
to Lake Michigan to give a performance
in basketweaving.
Conciseness/Clarity
- 200
• Pat and Joe decided to go to Lake Michigan
to perform basketweaving.
Dude, really, we’re not
that good.
To the Game Board
Conciseness/Clarity 300
• The square dance was performed by a
pig.
•
Click on the pig
Conciseness/Clarity - 300
• A pig performed the square dance.
This way to the Game Board
Conciseness/Clarity - 400
• Some residents protested against the plan.
Conciseness and Clarity - 400
• Some residents protested the plan.
Game Board
Conciseness/Clarity - 500
• In the event that Mr.
Cleary speaks on the
subject of journalism
during the course of the
day, students should be
ready and prepared to
take notes.
Conciseness/Clarity
- 500
• If Mr. Cleary speaks about
journalism, students should be
ready to take notes.
The Game Board
Conciseness/Clari
ty
600
The committee held
•
a meeting for the
purpose of
checking plans for
the months of
summer.
Conciseness/Clarity - 600
The committee met
to check summer
plans.
Game Board
Conciseness/Clarity -700
• The car that is completely broken will
not make it to the city that is full of
garbage.
Conciseness/Clarity
- 700
 The
broken car will not make it to
garbage-filled city.
Game Board
Conciseness/Clarity 800
• Due to the fact that Hi-Lights is
awesome, PHS will hold a writing clinic
in the month of January.
Conciseness/Clarity - 800
Because Hi-Lights is awesome, PHS will
hold a writing clinic in January.
Back to the Board
Conciseness/Clarity –
1K

The movie of the name
“Office Space” is one that
people who enjoy comedy
will enjoy.
Conciseness/Clarity –
1K
• People who enjoy
comedy will enjoy the
movie “Office Space.”
Grab Bag - 100

“Yeah, I’m doing the drywall at the
work (cite, site, sight) for the new
McDonald’s.”
Grab Bag - 100
• “Yeah, I’m doing the drywall at the
work site for the new McDonald’s.”
Grab Bag - 200
 Please (except, accept) this fine job mowing lawns, Forrest.
Grab Bag - 200
• Please accept this fine job mowing lawns, Forrest.
Grab Bag - 300
• Find a simple replacement for
this wordy term:
• After stuffing himself over
Christmas and New Year’s
Eve, Mr. Cleary became rather
corpulent.
Grab Bag - 300
• After stuffing himself over Christmas and
New Year’s Eve, Mr. Cleary became rather
fat / chubby.
The Game Board Awaits
Grab Bag - 400
• Tyler (could of, could have) told us it wasn’t
a costume party before we rented these
stupid giant squid and Spongebob
Squarepants costumes.
Grab Bag - 400
 Tyler could have told us it wasn’t a costume
party before we rented these stupid giant squid
and Spongebob Squarepants costumes.
More Jeopardy fun awaits . . .
Grab Bag - 500
• All of the Backstreet Boys (accept,
except) Josh were there.
Grab Bag - 500
• All of the Backstreet Boys
except Josh were there.
Grab Bag - 600
• After nine months of suffering and
pandemonium, Davis left school to begin
his summer vacation.
Grab Bag - 600
• After nine months, Davis left school and
began his summer vacation.
Back to the Game Board.
Peace.
Grab Bag 700
• “Hey, Mr. Munson, get the (led,
lead) out!”
Oh jeepers! . . . I’m trying,
man! I need some water!
Oh my goodness, I think
I’m going to be sick!
Come on, Munson,
can’t you ride any
faster?
Mr. Munson . . Putt . . .putt . . . putt
Mr. Cleary
Grab Bag - 700
“Hey, Mr. Munson, get the
lead out!”
Grab Bag - 800
• What is a transitional element?
Grab Bag - 800
• Transitional elements are
words, phrases, or whole
sentences that or whole
paragraphs that tie a story
together. They take the
readers from subject to subject,
fact to fact, time to time, place
to place, without confusing
them along the way.
Grab Bag- 1000
• What is a “backup” quote?
Grab Bag - 1000
• A back up quote is a quote
designed to support the lead.
Pack up your nuts,
and go home