GREEN: Comments
and suggestions. RED:
Grammar, spelling, or
vocabulary errors.
Yellow, punctuation
errors.
My Reflection Paper for 15 March2013
Name Abdul Wahab (Labib)111100088 Ethics Class Group A7
I have Ethics class in this week. I learn few sensitive issues such as abortion, cloning, suicide etc. Dr. Ahmed fausoy was the
main lecturer in this week. I am going write about abortion. (KNOWLEDGE:RECALL) 1.. SUGGESTION: Indicate the
Cognitive Level, then the Cognitive Skill that you used here. 2. SUGGESTION: Always place the cognitive level and
skill before the sentence or group of sentences.
Abortion is one of the sensitive issue. In my own understanding, it means close the pregnancy by removal from the uterus to
viability. I believe that it is unethical, it is killing of a life. (COMPREHENSION: DESCRIBING WITH MEANING)
SUGGESTION: Always place the cognitive level and skill before the sentence or group of sentences.
Suppose my classmate have a relationship, but unexpectedly she become pregnancy. Should she tell her family regarding her
pregnancy or should she go to doctor for abortion her pregnancy. Is it ethical to do abortion? (APPLICATION: USING
KNOWLEDGE TO CREATE NEW QUESTIONS) VERY GOOD. SUGGESTION: Always place the cognitive level and skill
before the sentence or group of sentences. NOTE: Good understanding can be destroyed by poor grammar.
I cannot think how difficult it would be that moment. She must be face reality. The truth thing is, life is precious. She need
courage from her society, family and boyfriend or husband. We can solve this problem very easily. It is ethical to do abortion
that time. When, she became pregnancy for rape or bad relationship with a boy. Another hand, it is unethical to do abortion
that time. When, she is killing one life. She do not have a right to kill one life. According to Carloff (2003), “The first situation
that I will deal with concerning an Abortion is when the act of it is neither immoral nor moral. The situation is this: when the
unborn fetus is not a conscious being. In this case, the unborn infant is incapable of feeling pain or suffering. To say that it is
immoral to destroy it is just as absurd as saying it is immoral to destroy a rock”. 1. QUESTION: How is this quote related to
the preceding sentence? 2. SUGGESTION: Download from our website > Useful Stuff > Writing Skills > Differentiation
and Transparency > Selective Quoting 3. QUESTION: Why is this paragraph an example of the cognitive skill of
evaluating?
(ANALYSIS: USING KNOWLEDGE TO SOLVE A PROBLEM) SUGGESTION: Always place the cognitive level and skill
before the sentence or group of sentences.
Abortion makes it too easy for young people to think it can be fixed when required. One question should be the issue to solve
abortion. What would cure a woman of an abortion? (SYNTHESIS: INTEGRATING KNOWLEDGE TO CREATE NEW
QUESTIONS) 1. SUGGESTION: Answer the question. 2. SUGGESTION: Always place the cognitive level and skill
before the sentence or group of sentences.
REFERENCE(S):
Carloff, A. (2003, April 10). The ethics of abortion. Retrieved on 15 March 2013 from
http://www.punkerslut.com/articles/ethicsofabortion.html 1. SUGGESTION: Google or ehow – APA citation for website or
webpage. 2. A website named punkerslut doesn’t seem to be a good authority about the topic. Try a better source.
Bpas. (2010). Bpas. Retrieved on 15 March 2013 from http://www.bpas.org/bpasyoungpeople/what-is-abortion 1. QUESTION:
Where in the diary is this source used? 2. SUGGESTION: Google or ehow – APA citation for website or webpage
SUGGESTION: Download from our website > Useful Stuff > Writing Skills > Outline Ideas > Outline: The Research
Paper (you can use the outline to improve the structure of your diary)
ERROR CODES
09 punctuation 17 grammar 02 clarity 02 vocabulary 70 conciseness 00 accuracy 00 precision
00 formatting
01 flow
26 logic 01
spelling
384 TOTAL
Total words
Total Error Frequency
128
Note: At the university level, the acceptable error frequency is 0.01% or less
Error Frequency Grade
100
Clarity Grade
33.33 x 2 = 66.66
Language
(CIRCLE ONE GRADE PER
CRITERIA)
Conciseness (Length)
Clarity (Mechanics)
Transparency
Differentiation
Language Score
Cognition Score
None
Poor
So-so
Great
0%
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0%
0%
60
80
5%
5%
5%
5%
X
X
15%
15%
15%
15%
50%
50%
Total Score
25%
25%
25%
25%
30
40
70 (B)
Cognition
(CIRCLE ONLY ONE GRADE)
Remembering
Understanding
Applying
Analysing
Evaluating
Creating
128/384
384
33.33%
-33.33
100-66.66
66.67% (C)
44.44% (E)
None
0%
0%
0%
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0%
Poor
So-so
29%
39%
39%
49%
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59%
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69%
69%
79%
80%
90%
Highest Score:
Great
49%
59%
69%
79%
89%
100%
80%
My Email for XX Month 2013
Each section should be
single-spaced: the
preliminaries the body,
and the signature. The
sections are separated
by double-spaces.
From:
To:
Date:
Subject:
Attachment filename
Ethics7 111100088 Wahab
<abdul.wahab.bangladesh@gmail.com>
Jaime Cabrera <mr.jaime.aiu@gmail.com>
Fri, Mar 15, 2013 at 7:07 PM
Reflection Diary Week09 Ver1 (for corretion)
WAHAB Reflection+Paper+Wk 9+(Mar+15).docx
Mr. Jaime Alfredo Cabrera
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Lecturer, Introduction to Ethics (2013 Term 1)
TOTAL GRADE:
(70+62)/2 = 66 (C)
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School of Humanities and Social Sciences
Preliminaries
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Albukhary International University
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Alor Setar, Malaysia
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15 March 2013
Dear Mr. Jaime,
Thank you for reading and correcting my Reflection Diary Week 9.
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I am writing to request you to check my Reflection diary week 9. (Version 2?)
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Body
Please find attached a Doc document containing my Reflection Diary for week 9.
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Thank you for your time
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Yours truly,
Abdul Wahab ( Mr.)
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Full Scholar, Bachelor of Business Administration
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School of Business
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Signature
Albukhary International University
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Alor Setar, Malaysia
ERROR CODES
21 punctuation 00 grammar 01 clarity 00 vocabulary 000 conciseness 00 accuracy 0 precision
Total words
22
118
Total Error Frequency
22/66
18.64%
Note: At the university level, the acceptable error frequency is less than 0.01%
Error Frequency Grade
100
-18.64
81.36% (A)
Clarity Grade
18.64 x 2 = 37.28
100-37.28 =
62.72 % (C)