Sentences to Correct
Streamline the following sentences according to the guidelines we have discussed in
class. Chapter 4 on Style in ETC should help you.
1. This memorandum sets forth those entities that will be given access to the
information contained in the files, together with the terms and conditions upon
which such access will be provided, including the duration of time and the
information held and disseminated.
Example revision:
This memorandum defines entities that will receive information in the files, the terms
of access, and the time users can hold and disseminate the information.
2. There are two programs presently available for testing software systems.
3. There are a certain number of steps that must be performed manually in the
operation of the machine.
4. There are other areas of study that need investigation.
5. In the data, there is at least one group of figures where there is a question about
machine errors.
6. There were only 20 students who volunteered for the program. .
7. It was his belief that the applicants had stated that there are inferior schools in our
city.
8. It is the nature of his type of program to perform slowly
9. That there would be a reduction of undergraduate math failures was a major goal
of the new dean.
10. It is clear that the new plant has now been in operation for two years.
11. It was noted that the employee was placed under observation for six months.
12. The functioning of an effective internal audit department provides continuous
monitoring of the integrity and accuracy of interim financial statements as well as
adherence to established policies and procedures.
13. My refusal is based on my assumption that his statement is erroneous.
15. By using these materials little need exists for the bulky pneumatic and hydraulic
components. Active materials available include metals, ceramics and polymers.
Polymers are especially interesting as they are light weight, cheap and can conform to
many shapes.
16. The perflourinated membranes are very expensive, which is also considered as a
limiting factor. Thus new polymer electrolyte membranes for fuel cells are introduced
with lower cost, higher proton conductivity and more easily to process.
17.
I propose to write a comparison of the different methods researchers use in X and
Y.
18.
I will write the article in a way that can appeal to multiple degrees of expertise. .
20.
The study proposes to empirically test the human capital assumption that there are
no differences across racial and ethnic groups in the returns to education in the
labor market.
21.
This makes the evaluation of current solutions less accurate, and sometime
misleading.
22.
The end product of this project would be a class of algorithms that have a lot of
practical applications.
23.
Theoretically this project will greatly help people to understand both distributed
systems and resource allocation problems. Practically this project will tell people
that to solve certain resource allocation problems, what they need to have in
distributed systems.
24.
Coach Warner was impressed with the new player’s skill and he looked for a
chance to try him in an actual game.
25.
Jim passed Coach Warner’s test but he did not get to play right away.
26.
Then in one game a player was injured and Coach Warner sent Jim into the game.
27.
At first, no one but Jim and the coach believed that Jim could play well enough.
28.
He lost five yards the first time he got the ball but the next time he ran sixty-five
yards for a touchdown.
29.
His sports career began with that game, and included major honors in track,
lacrosse, baseball, and football.
30.
After Jim Thorpe’s death, his friends still worked to have his medals restored, and
to get his name back on the list of Olympic winners.
31.
Knowing that they would not be happy, until the AAU and the Olympic
committees changed their minds, his friends made repeated appeals.
32.
The AAU acted first, reversing itself some years later, (in 1973) by saying that
Thorpe’s titles should be restored.
33.
The American Olympic Committee agreed two years later but it was not until 1982
that the International Olympic Committee voted to restore Jim’s titles.
34.
She began work for us in June 1997 as a sales trainee and has been in the sales
department ever since.
35.
After all the anxiety is greater than the actual demands of the presentation and
stress plays on the speaker/s mind.
36.
When you achieve a goal you have the feeling of growth for you can look with a
different perspective at those around you.
37.
To learn the student must use tutorial software as well as the text.
38.
I left class early and after I had eaten my mother brought me back to the lab.
39.
Another topic and one that I have enjoyed best of all requires new research.
40.
The best known journal however is the JBBA Journal.
41.
I know from experience that making backup copies of files can be extremely
important.
42.
We tried for two days to solve the problem then we gave up and called our
professor.
43.
The lab director is a busy man, he seems busier, in fact, that he really is.
44.
I have trained myself to use six application programs for this research, thus I save
myself many hours.
45.
Because Dr. X can be extremely difficult we have to be careful in dealing with
him.