New Horizon College English §Book 2 Unit 5 Section A weeping for My Smoking Daughter Background information Text structure analysis Summary of the passage Grammar & Language points Difficult sentences & translation Writing After-reading discussion I. Background Information Hollywood: Hollywood is a district in Los Angeles, California, situated west-northwest of Downtown Los Angeles. Due to its fame and cultural identity as the historical center of movie studios and movie stars, the word "Hollywood" is often used as a metonym of cinema of the United States. Many historic Hollywood theaters are used as venues and concert stages to premiere major theatrical releases and host the Academy Awards. It is also a popular destination for nightlife and tourism. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hollywood I. Background information Prince Albert: Prince Albert (1819–1861) was the husband of Queen Victoria of Great Britain. This is also the name of a kind of British tobacco. I. Background Information Queen Victoria: Queen Victoria (1819–1901) was queen of Great Britain & Ireland (1837–1901) and empress of India. Her rule was the longest in English history. II. Text analysis --- main idea What is the main idea of the text? When seeing her daughter smoke heavily, the author as a mother can do nothing but weep. Her weeping is attributed to a bitter lesson she learned from her painful experience with her father’s smoking. Through years she had to sit by, seeing her father breathe hard at first, then cough a lot, and eventually die from lung disease. So she feels deeply hurt to watch her daughter and many others following in her father’s steps. She hopes her father’s fate will be a lesson to all. II. Text Analysis --- structure How is the text organized? The whole passage consists of three parts: 1) My worries about my daughter’s smoking (Para 1) 2) My recall of my father’s story (Para 2-5) 3) My views on smoking based on what I see and read. (Para 6-8) During her narration, time sequence is adopted to make it clear and smooth. Besides, the device of cause and effect is used to help people have a strong feeling of the harm smoking does. The cause and effect pattern: (Para 6) II. Text Analysis-- Structure The author’s anxiety about her daughter’s smoking (Para 1) The author’s bitter experience with her father’s smoking (Para 2-5) The author’s heart-felt appeal to all people (Para 6-8) Based on what sheshe To illustrate why By giving a vivid saw and read, how description of how her felt so terrible when daughter while much understand seeingshe hersmokes daughter doing her homework, the harm of smoking, smoke, the author the author intends toshe and howtime helplessly follows sequence express how she feels — watches others and cause-and-effect she feels sothe terrible that smoking, author pattern to— tell theto she weeps and finally appeals to all reader her painful imply how bitterly she people to keep away experience with hates the habit of her from tobacco and smoking. father’s death from value their lives. smoking. III. Summary I feel terrible seeing my daughter smoking. My father was hooked by cigarettes and died from pneumonia. In the Third World, I see many people like my father and daughter. They are attracted by huge advertisements showing beautiful worldly girls and confident men dragging away. Money intended for food is spent on tobacco. Over time, people starve for food and air, weaken and hook their children and eventually kill themselves. III. Summary I read in the newspapers and magazines that cigarette ends are so poisonous that if swallowed by a baby, it is likely to die; and that water from a bunch of boiled ends is an effective insecticide. I feel a deep hurt, a feeling of uselessness as I remember how carefully and patiently I took care of my daughter when she was little. I view smoking as self-battering which also batters those who helplessly watch . I think, to lose one family member to the prosperous tobacco companies is enough. IV. Grammar & Language points …her feet on the bench… and her calculator clicking out answers (L1) This expression can be rewritten by adding This type of expression describes the behavior “with” or by using the “and + finite verb” or a minor event which goes together with the structure. The above sentences can be major event in the clause. rewritten as follows: The man sat in the front row, his hands on the table. The man sat in the front row, with his hands on the table. Or: 那男子坐在前排是,手放在桌子上。 …, and his hands were on the table. Hefell fellto tothe theground, ground,blood with blood streaming He streaming from his from his nose. Or: nose. He fell to the ground, and his blood was 他跌倒在地,血从鼻子里流了出来。 streaming from his nose. IV. Grammar & Language points at hand: near; within reach (L3) The final examination is (close) at hand. 期末考试近在眼前。 It is very important to have a dictionary close at hand when you are learning English. 学英语的时候,随时在手头放一本字典很重要。 Fortunately there was a someone at hand, so we asked him to deliver the message at once. 幸好旁边有个人,我们就请他立即把信送去。 IV. Grammar & Language points They’re filtered, for which I am … (L4) In this sentence, “which” refers to the fact mentioned in the first part of the sentence. Tyson stole his neighbor’s car, for which he was put into prison. 泰森偷了邻居的车,为此被送进了监狱。 The police arrived, after which the situation became better. 警察来了,这以后的局势比先前平静了一些。 See Ex VII on P125 IV. Grammar & Language points So … that … & so that… (L6; L33) so that…: in such a way that; to such an so…that + can (or may, will, etc.): amount to…; produce a particular result 表结果(I in order that with the aim that …表目的 For whatas (I did all these), I sometimes wonder, did all these) so that she can struggle to breathe He came into the classroom so quietly (that) no through mosthim. of her life feeling half her strength, one noticed and then die of self-poisoning, …? (L49) 他悄悄地走进教室,以致于没人注意到他。 warm clothes so that hethat wouldn’t be not He Thewore student has so many books he does know to do with them. cold inwhat the winter snow. 那个学生的书多得让他有些无所适从。 • 有时我纳闷:自己这样做到底是为了什么?难道是为了她今 后有气无力地挣扎着呼吸,然后再像她外公那样自己把自己 My father is so forgetful that he is always looking for his keys. 毒死? 我父亲如此健忘以至整日都在不停地找钥匙。 • See 他穿得暖暖的,这样就不会在冰天雪地里受冻了。 Ex VIII on P125 IV. Grammar & Language points It is/ was … who/that … (L9) This structure is used for emphasis. Notes: It was her grandfather who (that) died from 1. It is/was + the emphasized part + who/ that … smoking. 2. This emphasized part can be the subject, the 是她的外公由于抽烟死亡的。 object, the adverbial, and the attributive in the sentence. It was last month that I bought a video 3. Judge whether the following sentences are camera. right or wrong. 我是在上个月买的一部摄象机。 • It was in this room where he was born. × •It It was camera that which I took wasthis in London I met herwith for me. the × first • time. It was in this room where he was born. × • 我是在伦敦第一次遇见她的。 It was he who/that save my life. √ • It was him who/that I saved. √ IV. Grammar & Language Points dress:vt. put clothes on (L13) Dress the baby, please. = Put clothes on the baby. 给孩子穿衣服。 The people at the funeral were all dressed in black. = were all wearing 参加丧礼的人都穿着黑色衣服。 dress up: to put on smart or unusual clothes, usually for special occasion You don’t need to dress up for the party. 你用不着盛装打扮去参加这次宴会。 IV. Grammar & Language Points couple with:join one thing to another; link / associate sth. with sth. else (L17) The slippery road, coupled with the strong wind, made it impossible to ride a bike. 路面很滑,加上大风,不可能骑车。 The writer wrote with plain words coupled with humor. 那位作家的写作风格质朴中不失幽默。 The name of Mozart is forever coupled with the city. 莫扎特的名字永远与这座城市联系在一起。 IV. Grammar & Language Points be hooked by/on:be addicted to (L21) Don’t get hooked on computer games. 不要玩电游成瘾了。 He is hooked on jogging. 他迷上了慢跑。 Some idioms with “hook”: be on the hook: be in a position of difficulty get off the hook: get out of one’s trouble脱身 swallow her story hook, line and sinker: believe sb completely 无保留地;完全地 IV. Grammar & Language Points double negative: (L28) It is not unusual for sb to do sth. …是常事/不少见 Heavy snow is not unusual in the northeastern China. 在中国东北下大雪很平常。 It was not unusual for him to sleep only two or three hours a night. 他每晚只睡两三个钟头是常事儿。 not … without … 一准儿,肯定 She cannot go anywhere without being the center of the attention. 她无论走到哪里都会成为人们关注的焦点。 She cannot sleep without taking some sleeping pills. 她不吃安眠药就无法入睡。 IV. Grammar & Language points die from /of: die because of 死于 (L31; L50) die away: (风, 声音, 电等)渐息, 渐弱animals can die from In a severe winter, wild •die The sound of music died away. down/back: (树木等)渐渐凋零, 枯萎(根未死) lack of food. die hard: diemay difficultly or down slowlyin死得很痛苦 • The bush have die the cold winter The driver dieddied from the wounds received •die My grandmother hard, suffering through a but they willbravely grow again next spring. he game: die 英勇就义 in the road accident. long illness. •die The old general died game, fighting death to the out: disappear last. •die If by: toodie many ofgrief these rareafter animals killed, this byof means of She died soon her are husband’s animal species will die out. •die They that deny of commit the kingsuicide shall die by by one’s hand:the killpower oneself, death. sword. •bethe He was suspected die much by his own hand. dying for: want sthtovery The baby died that of SARS in 2003. •die It’s so hot today I am dying for (an a cold drink. for: be prepared to die to support idea, etc.) •beMany people die for their beliefs. dyingreligious of: feel sth verywould strongly •die The children are dying善终, of curiosity to see what’s in one’s bed: 寿终正寝, 病死 More collocation with “die”: inin the parcel.die in one’s shoes: die while still die harness/ working at one’s usual job IV. Grammar & Language Points be always doing sth: 总是 (L33) When we use “always” with a verb in the progressive tense, we mean that something happens again and again in an annoying way My grandfather is always forgetting things. 我的爷爷总是很健忘。 Why are you always biting your nails? 你为什么总是咬指甲? The spoiled boy is always spending money like water. 这个被娇惯坏了孩子总是花钱如流水。 IV. Grammar & Language Points direct at: 针对;瞄准 (L39) The English program is directed at preschoolers. 这个英语节目是针对学龄前儿童的。 beautiful, “worldly” young woman: 漂亮、“世故”的年青女子 We are all worldly people. 我们都是凡夫俗子。 An experienced and worldly man 经验丰富又老于世故的人 IV. Grammar & Language Points starve: suffer or die from hunger挨饿/饿死 (L42) They got lost in the desert and starved to death. In order to keep herself slim, Carpenter, the famous pop singer, starved herself so much that she died of anorexia(厌食症). starve sb of /be starved of: lack something needed People there are starved of drinking water. 这个地区的人们极需饮用水。 The plant was starved of light and died. 这棵植物因缺乏光照而死掉了。 IV. Grammar & Language Points make:serve or function as (another thing) (L46) This hall would make an excellent theatre. 这个大厅能成为绝好的剧院 Cold tea makes a good drinking in summer. 凉茶在夏季是理想的饮料。 Their success makes a good ending to the book. 他们的成功成为这部书的圆满的结局。 The ends of cigarettes are so poisonous that the boiled water from a bunch of them makes an effective insecticide. 烟蒂的毒性非常之强,将一把烟蒂加水煮开就成了很有效 的杀虫剂。 V. Difficult Sentences & Translation While she is doing her homework, her feet on … While she is doing her homework, her feet on … (Para. 3, L17) and her calculator …, Icoupled am looking atHollywood the halfThe tobacco industry, with The tobacco industry, together with Hollywood empty package ofboth Camels tossed carelessly movies won over people father. movies in which malelike andmy female heroes close hand. Bothatmale female heroes (in the Hollywood smoked likeand chimneys, completely won over smoked like chimneys. • movies) 烟草业,再加上好莱坞电影——影片中的男女主角都是老烟鬼——把 译:她做家庭作业时,脚搁在前面的长凳上,计算机嗒嗒地跳出几何题的答 people who were hopelessly People like like my my father, father were hopelessly hooked 像我父亲那样的人完完全全争取了过去, 他们无可救药地抽烟上了瘾。 案,而我正盯着那包她已抽了一半并随意扔在紧靠手边处的骆驼牌香烟看。 by cigarettes. hooked by cigarettes. ((将有关的修饰成份译成:几个分句 句中主从句之间关系并不十分密切,且各自具有相对的独立性,翻译时 或 并列的几个谓语动词) 将从句子分离出来,单独译成句子。) Refer to “Translation of long sentences” in Unit 3 V. Difficult sentences & translation Translation of long sentences: 分析+重组 分析: 为了清晰明了原句,我们要根据上下文分析长句中复杂的语法关 系和语义上的逻辑关系 1、作者想表达什么意思? 2、如果有多个从句或修饰成份,分析其间的语法结构 3、分析原句中从句间的(条件、因果、转折、递进等)逻辑关系 重组: 根据汉语行文习惯,按照时间先后和逻辑顺序,重新加以安排。 汉语句子短小精悍,较少使用关联词。汉语中所谓的长句往往包含形 式上并列的几个谓语动词或几个分句,表示几层不同的意思,按时间 顺序和逻辑顺序排列起来。故翻译时一般将英文的主句和从属及修饰 成份尽可能转化为并列谓语形式,省去不必要的关联词。如果句中各 层意思之间关系并不十分密切,各自具有相对的独立性,应将句子拆 开,分译成两句或几句。 V. Difficult sentences & translation Translation skill: addition 1. 对意义的增补: 在翻译中,增词法就是按意义上、修辞上、或句法上的 补充概括词、补充原文暗含的词、补充注释性词语、数词、量词等 China, England, France and the United States 需要增加一些词来更忠实通顺地表达原文的思想内容。并非 There are large advertisement signs directed 随意增词,而是增加原文中虽无其词但有其意的一些词。 中英法美四国 them both: thescientists tough, confident orare to the 到处都有针对他们这两类人的巨大广告牌:强壮、自信或时髦、年龄较 at Facts are to the as words fashionable older man, the beautiful, “worldly” poets. 大的男人, 以及漂亮、“世故”的年青女人,都在吞云吐雾。 事实对于科学家如同文字对于诗人一样重要。 2.对语法结构的增补: 词义的增补主要有以下两种方法: young woman, both dragging away. (Para 6) 为保证译文语法结构的完整进行的增补:增加代词、连接词、介词、句 He slipped on a banana skin. 子中的省略部分等。 他踩在香蕉皮上滑倒了。 Gail and I imagined a quiet wedding. (Unit 3 ) 我和盖尔计划(想象着举行)一个不事张扬的婚礼。 Our racial and cultural differences enhanced 2. 对语法 1. 对意义 our relationship and taught us 结构的增 a great deal 的 的种族及文化差异 tolerance, compromise, and being(而且) open about 我们 (之间) (不但) 增强了我们的关系, 教会 补 增补 other. 了我们彼此要宽容、谅解和开诚布公。 with each ( Unit 3, L. 5 ) V. Difficult sentences & translation Translation skill: addition He never looked as Prince All ideas don’t occuras likefashionable that but so many do, 注意介词with结构的翻译及增词减字 though; heimportant continued to so look like a 8, particularly the most ones. (Para 2,she Unit Albert, For what, I sometimes wonder; that Book ) overweight, poor, hard working canI struggle to breathe throughcolored most ofman her 增词法:注意把字里行间的隐含的意思表明。 In 然而我父亲看上去从来就没有像阿尔伯特亲王那样时髦。他 these poor countries, as in American inner 并非所有的思想都是这样产生的,但许多思想的产生确实如此,尤其是 with too large a family, black,what withI ahave verydone 有时我纳闷:自己这样做到底是为了什么? 难道是为了她今后大半辈 还是一个贫穷、过于肥胖的黑人,为养活一大家人而拼命干 Ilife sometimes wonder why/for feeling half her strength, and then die of cities and on reservations, money that should 那些最为重要的思想。 活。他浑身漆黑,嘴里却总叼着一支雪白的香烟。 starve themselves of both food and air: white cigarette (Para 3, 子有气无力地挣扎着呼吸,然后再像她外公那样自己把自己毒死? all those things.stuck in his mouth. self-poisoning, asso herthat(=in grandfather did? be spent forthose food goes instead to the tobacco (对意义的增补) 译成“不但缺少食物,而且还缺少空气”更符合汉语习惯。 就像在美国的市中心和印第安人的居留地上发生的事一样,在这些贫 Did I do all order that) she L21) struggle to ritual breathe …? 困的国家里,那些本应该花在食物上的钱却流进了烟草公司。久而久 companies; over time, people starve (Para.7, L49) can weakening and hooking their children: They will miss the interaction that goes原句中 with a 之,人们不但缺少食物,而且还缺少空气,这样不但大大削弱了孩子 weakening 和hooking共一个宾语,而在汉语中就得将其译成 themselves of tea both effectively welcoming cup of or food coffeeand thatair, may be a 们的体质,还使他们染上了烟瘾, 最终使他们丧命。 “削弱孩子们的体质”和“使孩子们染上烟瘾/使他们吸烟成瘾”。 convention in their own country. (Unit 1, Book 2) weakening and hooking their children, 要达到这个目的,势必加词。再加上一个无伤雅的“不但…而且” 他们会怀念那种以茶或咖啡招待客人的礼节性交往。而在茶馆或咖啡吧 eventually killing themselves. (Para 6, L40) ( 语法结构的增补) 结构,与前文形成排比句式,更符合中文习惯。 为客人接风也许就是他们自己国家的一种习俗。 V. Difficult sentences & translation …surely one such victory in my family… is enough. (Para 8, L57) from the viewpoint ofhere the family, the TheBut word “victory” is used ironically. father was nothing a victim ofand Asauthor’s the passage shows, tobaccobut advertising tobacco prosperous owners film actorsindustry. won overThe many people like the of the tobacco industries won a victory author’s father, who washave hopelessly hookedinby her family, herthe family has paid bigger cigarettes. Sobut from viewpoint ofathe price –company, her fatherthis diedseemed from smoking. tobacco a great The success, author believes one such victim is enough. a big “victory”, because more people smoking Otherwise, it would be too much for her will definitely bring it more profit. family. V. writing ----structure analysis Paragraph writing: cause and effect The writer of the text presents us with a horrible picture of the harmful effects of smoking, and the harmful effects are described as a result of the cause: smoking. A typical example is: VI. Writing The cause and effect pattern: (Para 6) The cause: Large advertisement signs, showing both the tough, confident, or fashionable older man and the beautiful, “worldly” young woman, are directed at people like my father and daughter who are attracted to smoking. The effect: As a result, many people smoke. And the money that should be spent for food goes instead to the tobacco companies. People then starve themselves of both food and air, effectively weakening and hooking their children, and eventually killing themselves. VI. Writing: Cause and Effect Pattern a statement supported by effects In Unit 4, we learned that a cause-effect paragraph generally follows a basic format: topic sentence + specific supporting details If the topic sentence introduces an effect, the supporting sentences describe causes. However, a paragraph will show a chain reaction in a cause and effect pattern. One effect may be the cause of some other effects. So a General statement may be followed by many supporting sentences that express what would happen as results/effects. VI. Writing --- paragraph writing pattern A General Statement supported by effects General statemen t Effect 1 Effect 2 Effect 3 Smoking does us more harm than we thought. Smoking is a form of self-battering. Smoking leads to diseases. Smoking threaten one’s beloved VI. Writing: sample writing for reference Smoking does us more harm than we thought. In Reference Words: the first place, smoking is a form of self-battering to do sb. more harm than he thought, in the Smoking can affect your well-being and appearance, first place, form than of self-battering, to , making you agea faster you think. Secondly smoking may lead to different kinds of diseases. increase sb.’s risk of heart attack, stroke, Four cigarettes a day can double the smoker’s risk of smoking patterns, dieas prematurely tobacco-related diseasestosuch heart attack,from, and lung cancers. Thirdlydiseases, , smokingin may tobacco-related thethreaten second,the to smoker’s beloved. The second-hand smoking do form a fatal threat to more harm to those whoto, sit during by than pregnancy, to the smokers themselves. According to or recent studies, women who experience bleeding spontaneous abortion smoke during pregnancy are more likely to give birth to unhealthy children. VII. 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