Welcome to our first
Writing Celebration
Sponge: Writing
Celebration
• Entitle a Source book entry
“Writing Celebration.”
• When you accomplish something
important in your life, how do you celebrate?
Why is it important to celebrate?
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Activator
• Turn to a Peer, and share out your response t
the Sponge.
Today I celebrate your successful
completion of your Narrative Piece.
WE’VE COME A LONG WAY FROM
WHERE WE BEGAN!
LET’S CELEBRATE!
Peer Feedback is
Delightful!
Working with your classmates
to help celebrate their work can be
scads of joy. First, you have to
learn what it means to give
“feedback” and how to do it!
What is Peer Feedback?
• A peer is someone your own age.
• Feedback means making suggestions, comments,
compliments to help improve a piece of writing or
other work.
Peer feedback means communicating with
someone your own age – usually someone
in your class – to help improve, revise, and
perfect his or her writing.
3 Steps to Peer Feedback
There are three important steps to remember
when you are evaluating
and celebrating another student’s
work.
• Step 1 – Compliments
• Step 2 – Suggestions
• Step 3 - Corrections
STEP 1
Compliments
• The first rule of peer feedback is to
STAY POSITIVE!
• Remember, THIS IS A
CELEBRATION! Think about how you
would want someone to speak to you
about your writing.
STEP 1
Compliments
Tell the writer what you think he or she
did well:
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I really loved your story because
I think you used a lot of supporting details
I liked when you used the word ______
My favorite part was ________ because…
This was really engaging because…
I liked the way you_________…
Teacher Model
Sample Narrative: It was a frigid, misty day, as my
mom, brother, and I approached the airport. We
were about to get on the longest plane ride of our
lives by ourselves. “Okay were here?” mom said.
“Let’s check your kids in!” Mom shouted
sounding too excited to be rid of us for two
straight weeks.
Compliment: (Peer’s Name)_______, your use of a
vivid description and dialogue to open your
narrative was a great way to engage your
reader.
STEP 2
Suggestions
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Making suggestions means giving the
author some specific ideas about how
make his or her writing better.
• Remember – stay positive and be specific
• Instead of, “It didn’t make sense,” say,
“If you add more details after this sentence,
it would be more clear.”
• Instead of, “Your word choice was boring,”
say, “Instead of using the word good,
maybe you can use the word exceptional.”
STEP 2
Suggestions
• Here are some areas that you may
want to make suggestions about:
• Perhaps using the word ________ would have
helped the reader ________.
• Sensory words like ________ would have made this
sentence stronger.
• I didn’t understand the sentence ________. You
could have said __________.
• Your closing was too obvious. Maybe if you used a
circular ending…
• ___________ statement is an extraneous detail.
Teacher Model
Sample Narrative: It was a frigid, misty day, as my mom,
brother, and I approached the airport. We were about
to get on the longest plane ride of our lives by
ourselves. “Okay were here?” mom said. “Let’s check
your kids in!” Mom shouted sounding too excited to be
rid of us for two straight weeks.
Suggestion: (Peer’s Name)_______, Perhaps if you move
the second sentence to the end of the paragraph after
the dialogue, the reader would understand more
clearly who is boarding the plane.
STEP 3
Corrections
• The third step in the peer feedback process is
making corrections.
• Corrections means editing your peer’s paper
for:
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Spelling mistakes
Grammar mistakes
Missing punctuation
Incomplete or run-on sentences
Teacher Model
Sample Narrative: It was a frigid, misty day, as my mom,
brother, and I approached the airport. We were about
to get on the longest plane ride of our lives by
ourselves. “Okay were here?” mom said. “Let’s check
your kids in!” Mom shouted sounding too excited to be
rid of us for two straight weeks.
Correction: (Peer’s Name)_______, Instead of placing a
question mark at the end of the statement “Okay were
here,” you should use a comma.
Student Practice
Work Period
• You will now read a peer’s paper to yourself.
• In your Source book record your Peer Feedback
for each student’s paper you read.
• Remember you can write a compliment, suggestion or
correction.
• When I say Time, we will share our feedback aloud.
• When I say Pass, pass the paper you were reading to
your right (It’s ok if you don’t finish reading the entire story.)
• YOU MUST HAVE WRITTEN FEEDBACK
FOR AT LEAST 3 PEERS!
Things to Remember…
• Stay positive – Try to make
suggestions and corrections in a
positive way.
• Be specific – Give the author specific
ideas on how to improve his or her
writing.
• Use the sentence starters if you
need help giving feedback.
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Closing: 3-2-1
• 1- Thing I learned during the
• Writing Celebration is…
• 2- Words (skills) that will help me when
• I’m working on my next piece are…
• 3- Things that I’m proud of about my Narrativ
piece are….