Monday, September 29, 2014
ENTRY TASK:
HOMEWORK:
Grab a Computer. Go to Google.com.
Search “Banned Book The Giver Lois.” Click on
the first result: a SLATE.com article and read.
Why Do So Many Schools Try to Ban The
Giver?
- Check out you and
your partner’s
banned Book from
the Tyee or Newport
Public library (if you
haven’t done so yet)
IN YOUR JOURNAL ENTRY FOR TODAY:
What’s the biggest ARGUMENT in the article?
What do you think might be the difference
between BANNING a book and
CHALLENGING a book?
- Continue your
RESEARCH based on
the Banned Book
Project questions.
- Banned Book Project
DUE WEDNESDAY
October 1st
(Yes, it’s an extension!)
- Email Lois Lowry!!!!!!
PARAGRAPH
STRUCTURE
Topic Sentence (TS)
The TS introduces the primary point of the paragraph. It tells the reader
what you will be discussing. Thus, your TS should be direct to the point so
that your reader will easily understand your topic. In some cases, this
sentence is called the thesis statement or claim.
Concrete Detail (CD)
The CD is a sentence that states evidence, facts, illustrations, examples,
and other supporting statements for the topic sentence. The CD
typically begins with any one of these “transition" words: for example, as
a matter of fact, or for instance.
Commentary (CM)
The CM provides the analysis, opinion, or interpretation. It is the
sentence that shows how the CD is linked to the TS. The CM is basically
your personal take.
Concluding/Closing Sentence (CS)
The CS summarizes the whole point of the paragraph while serving as a
transition sentence for the next paragraph. A common way to start a CS
is by using the “transition" phrase as a result, therefore, or in effect.
TYPICAL STRUCTURE : TS->CD->CM->CD->CM-<CS
FOR EXAMPLE:
(MY BANNED BOOK), BY ________, WAS BANNED BECAUSE __________.
(TOPIC SENTENCE)
AS A MATTER OF FACT, ___________ WAS BANNED DURING ____________,
BECAUSE SOME PEOPLE FELT THAT “________________”.
(CONCRETE DETAIL)
THIS IS SIGNIFICANT BECAUSE _____________________.
(COMMENTARY)
DURING THE TIME OF ITS CHALLENGE, IT WAS ALSO ______________ , JUST AS
SOMEONE POINTED OUT WHEN THEY SAID THAT “_________________”.
(CONCRETE DETAIL)
WHAT THEY MEANT BY THIS WAS _______________; IN THIS WAY, THIS IS
SIGNIFICANT BECAUSE______________.
(COMMENTARY)
AS A RESULT, THE BANNED BOOK IS CURRENTLY _____________________.
(CLOSING SENTENCE)
FOR EXAMPLE:
Digital piracy is both a boon and a bane depending on who
benefits and who loses from it. For example, John Doe, an
independent musician whose career started early in 2012, has
been able to make his music available to a wider audience at
minimal costs. On the other hand, recording labels such as
Warner Music have been dealing with unrealized profit -about $1 billion in 2010 -- due to the pervasive digital
reproduction and unauthorized online distribution of the
company's records. There is little doubt that the effects of
digital piracy relies on the interests of those who are affected
by it. A group with purely business or money-making interests
will find digital piracy a dangerous technology. Meanwhile,
the artist seeking mass exposure for his or her music will
certainly benefit most from digital piracy. In general, the
public will also stand to benefit from it. Clearly, one side stands
to benefit from digital piracy while another side has to suffer
the ill consequences.
Digital piracy is both a boon and a bane depending on who
benefits and who loses from it [Topic Sentence]. For example,
John Doe, an independent musician whose career started
early in 2012, has been able to make his music available to a
wider audience at minimal costs [Concrete Detail]. On the
other hand, recording labels such as Warner Music have been
dealing with unrealized profit -- about $1 billion in 2010 -- due
to the pervasive digital reproduction and unauthorized online
distribution of the company's records [Concrete Detail]. There
is little doubt that the effects of digital piracy relies on the
interests of those who are affected by it [Commentary]. A
group with purely business or money-making interests will find
digital piracy a dangerous technology [Commentary].
Meanwhile, the artist seeking mass exposure for his or her
music will certainly benefit most from digital piracy
[Commentary]. In general, the public will also stand to benefit
from it [Commentary]. Clearly, one side stands to benefit from
digital piracy while another side has to suffer the ill
consequences [Closing Sentence].
Tuesday, September 30, 2014
ENTRY TASK:
Grab a Computer. Turn it on & Log On. Do nothing else
with the computer.
IN YOUR JOURNAL PACKET FOR TODAY (NOT on a blank
paper):
Write a short letter to your parents/guardian to welcome
them to the 8th grade Language Arts classroom.
Your letter may include the following:
 What you’ve learned and/or accomplished in LA so far
 Something about your teacher and/or the routines and
procedures in class
 Your goal for Language Arts this year, AND how you
plan to accomplish that goal
 Something your parent/guardian can do to help you
succeed in this class
HOMEWORK:
- WRITE your final
draft Banned
Book Project
paragraphs (2-3)
with your partner.
- Think, Plan, and
REHEARSE your
project
presentation with
your partner (1-1.5
minutes)
- Banned Book
Project: First Draft
– DUE TOMR,
October 1st
TLQC:

Transition


Use as a bridge to strengthen
cohesion and fluency.

Ex. Early in the book, Jonas reveals
his concern with the unknown
when he realizes that “the sense of
his own community, silent, made
his stomach churn.”

Use to set the context for the
information in the quote
Ex. Early in the book, Jonas reveals
his concern with the unknown
when he realizes that “the sense of
his own community, silent, made
his stomach churn.”
Use ideas from a credible source to
strengthen your own ideas,
illustrate a point, or support your
thesis/claim.
Ex. Early in the book, Jonas reveals his
concern with the unknown when he
realizes that “the sense of his own
community, silent, made his stomach
churn.”
Lead-In

Quotations

Citation

Consider the following for in-text
citation (tomorrow)
IN-TEXT CITATIONS:

In-Text Citations are used when you have quoted, paraphrased, or
otherwise used information that you took from another source.

An in-text citation will go directly after the quote or paraphrase,
unless you have used information from the source throughout a
piece, in which case it will go at the end of the paragraph in which
you use the information.

An in-text citation is generally the name of the work or source, and
goes in parenthesis. Here are some examples
IN-TEXT CITATIONS:
Book: As she tromped through the snow, carrying Daniel, Mercy thought about “what
Papa would think once he returned” (Cooney 29).

* Note that it is the author’s last name with the page number of the quote, with no
“pg.” or “p.” to separate them. If you are only referring to one book in the text, you
may cite the author in the beginning and then only cite the page number in
parentheses thereafter.

Article: Furthermore, Serena Williams showed great tenacity by getting back on the
court, despite the fact that she underwent “a year of major health problems and
major doubts about whether she would return to the game” (Clarey 1).

* Note that the author’s last name is with the page number of the quote, which
came from The New York Times. In a print article, there are page numbers included.
The purpose of using the author’s name rather than the publication is that it refers to
the full citation on your works cited page. If there is no author, for some reason, you
would refer to the publication.
IN-TEXT CITATIONS:

Online Source: According to Grammar Girl, the question of whether to use
whomever or whoever in a sentence can cause “confusion and frustration”
(Grammar Girl).

* Note that online sources do not generally have page numbers (unless it is
an online version of a print source, like a newspaper). Therefore, you will
simply cite the author, or, if there is no author, the organization responsible
for the site.

REMEMBER: WE DO IN-TEXT CITATIONS TO GUIDE OUR READERS TO THE
SOURCE ON OUR WORKS CITED SHEET! THAT IS HOW WE DO BUSINESS!
DIRECT QUOTES SHOULD:
DIRECT QUOTES SHOULD NOT:

CONTAIN A COMPLEX IDEA THAT IS
THOUGHT PROVOKING

CONTAIN A SIMPLE IDEA THAT YOU
COULD PARAPHRASE

ADD DEPTH TO YOUR WRITING

REPEAT AN ALREADY STATED IDEA

BE SMOOTHLY EMBEDDED

STAND ALONE, NOT FRAMED

BE NO MORE THAN A FEW LINES OF
TEXT

BE LENGTHY (TOO LONG!)
What we end up with
Early in the book, Jonas reveals his
concern with the unknown when
he realizes that “the sense of his
own community, silent, made his
stomach churn”(Lowry 2).

LOOK AT YOUR CURRENT PARAGRAPH,
AND THINK…HOW YOU COULD MODIFY
IT TO BE MORE EFFECTIVE USING TLQC.

ANNOTATE YOUR PARAGRAPH FOR
INNEFFECTIVE TARNSITIONS OR FARMES.

NOW, REVISE ONE OF YOUR SENTENCES
WITH AN EMBEDDED QUOTE SO THAT IT
IS PROPERLY FRAMED.

SHARE WITH YOUR PARTNER: WHAT IS
THE EFFECT?
YOU DO: TPS
T – TRANSITION
L – LEAD-IN
Q – QUOTE
C – CITATION
Wednesday, October 1, 2014
ENTRY TASK:
Grab a Computer. Turn it on & Log On. Take the TYEE
STUDENT SURVEY.
AFTER you are done with the Survey:
Take out you and your partner’s paragraph. “Grade” it
against the Banned Book Project Rubric. Ask yourself:
 Are there any questions I have NOT answered yet?
 Do I have my Transitions, Lead-Ins, Quotes, and
Citations?
 Did I create my “Works Cited” page? (It should be
attached in a SEPARATE sheet to your paragraphs – see
Works Cited Handout)
 In ALL my paragraphs, do I have my TS, CD(s), CM(s),
and CS? Check it.
HOMEWORK:
- Continue to work
on your Banned
Book Project
PARAGRAPHS and
the ARTISTIC
CREATION.
- Think, Plan, and
REHEARSE your
project
presentation with
your partner (1-1.5
minutes)
- Banned Book
Project:
Presentations on
FRIDAY, OCT 3
Thursday, October 2, 2014
ENTRY TASK:
Grab a Computer. Turn it on & Log On. Then do the
following:
 Grab you and your partner’s paragraph paper.
 SWITCH papers with another pair. GIVE THEM YOUR
JOURNAL ENTRY PACKET as well.
 With a RED PEN, you and your partner will “grade” the
paper against Banned Book Project Rubric. Overall, how
many points would you give them?
 IN THAT PERSON’S JOURNAL PACKET ENTRY FOR TODAY,
give them a long paragraph of FEEDBACK as if you were
the teacher. For example…





“Some questions you have not yet addressed include…”
“I’ve marked your Transitions/Lead-Ins/Quotes/Citations,
and it seems like…”
“Your WORKS CITED page was….”
“You should have attached your WORKS CITED page on a
separate sheet of paper…”
“You have great TS and CS, but your CDs and CMs need
some work because…”
HOMEWORK:
- Banned Book
Project
- FINAL
PARAGRAPHS+
- ARTISTIC
CREATION+
- PRESENTATION
DUE
TOMORROW,
FRIDAY, OCT 3
Friday, October 3, 2014
ENTRY TASK:


With a RED PEN, you and your partner will “grade”
HOMEWORK:
the paper ON YOUR DESK against Banned Book
Project Rubric. Overall, how many points would you
give them?
- Banned Book
In YOUR JOURNAL PACKET ENTRY FOR TODAY, give
Project
them a long paragraph of FEEDBACK as if you were
- FINAL
the teacher. For example…
PARAGRAPHS+
 “Some questions you have not yet addressed
- ARTISTIC
include…”
CREATION+
 “I’ve marked your Transitions/LeadIns/Quotes/Citations, and it seems like…”
- PRESENTATION
DUE
 “Your CITATIONS were….”
 “You should have attached your WORKS CITED
page on a separate sheet of paper…”
 “You have great TS and CS, but your CDs and
CMs need some work because…”
 “I’m still wondering about…”