Day 1
The most earliest record of whaling as an organized business dates from
around 875 A.D.
Two year whaling voyages were so common that the whole entire regions
were depleted of whales.
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Day 1
The earliest record of whaling as an organized business dates from around
A.D. 875.
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whole
Two-year whaling voyages were so common that the entire regions were
depleted of whales.
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Day 2
American whaling took place from Nantucket and Cape Cod, Massachusetts,
New London, Connecticut, San Francisco, California, and Sag Harbor, New
York.
In all more than 70 American ports sent out whalers.
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Day 2
American whaling took place from Nantucket and Cape Cod, Massachusetts;
New London, Connecticut; San Francisco, California; and Sag Harbor, New
York.
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In all, more than seventy American ports sent out whalers.
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Day 3
The peak year for American whaling was 1846, when 736 vessels and 70000
people were engaged in the industry.
The decline in whaling was accelerated by the fact that there were fewer
whales. The decline begun in 1847.
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Day 3
The peak year for American whaling was 1846, when 736 vessels and 70,000
people were engaged in the industry.
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The decline in whaling, which began in 1847, was accelerated by the fact that
there were fewer whales.
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Day 4
Sailing off of the shore of Long Island, a school of whales was seen.
Controlling endangered species, such as the whale, is everyones responsibility.
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Day 4
of
Sailing off the shore of Long Island, we saw a school of whales.
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Controlling endangered species, such as the whale, is everyone’s responsibility.
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Day 5
In 1946, the international whaling commission was established in Washington
D.C.
This organization limits the number of whales that can be killed so the species
will not become extinct.
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Day 5
In 1946, the International Whaling Commission was established in
Washington, D.C.
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This organization limits the number of whales that can be killed so that the
species will not become extinct.
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