Subject: English
Name: Lara Sameh
Year
Writing Feedback
Date: ____________________
Paper 1: News Article Checklist (Structure, Ideas, Language)
This checklist assesses the News Article Writing.
Evaluation Criteria
A-(Style and Structure) (Inverted Pyramid)
Teacher- check (X√/)
1. Does the Headline quickly and accurately summarize the main news?
2.Does the Lead (Lede) paragraph present the most important facts first?
3.Does the Lead address the "5 W's and H" (Who, What, When, Where, Why,
How)?
√
X
X
4.Is the information presented in descending order of importance?
5-Are quotes integrated smoothly into the text, and is the speaker identified clearly
before or immediately after the quote?
X
X
6-(Body/Detail) Does the body use details and evidence (like statistics or specific
examples) to support the facts introduced in the lead?
√
7.(Conclusion) Does the article conclude with future-facing information or the least
critical details that could be cut without losing the core message?
√
B-(Ideas/Content)
1. Are all facts, names, and figures accurate and properly supported by sources?
X
2. Does the article explore the topic with necessary depth?
√
3. Is the content objective about the facts, but does it use a distinctive and
appropriate voice/tone to tell the story?
√
4. Are human sources/voices used effectively to provide emotional depth, expert
commentary, and context?
X
C-(Language)
1. Is the article written primarily in the third person?
√
2. Does the writing use active voice, evocative language, and imagery to keep the
reader engaged?
√
3. Is the vocabulary accessible but sophisticated enough to handle the complexity of
the topic?
4. Are grammar, spelling, and punctuation impeccable throughout the piece?
√
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X
Subject: English
Name: Lara Sameh
Year
Writing Feedback
Date: ____________________
Paper 2: Teacher Feedback (Stars and Steps)
STARS (Elements that STEP UP! (Points to work on for Phase 2)
SHINE!)
• Clear headline, conclusion ties
back to theme of education.
• Strong inspirational theme;
shows resilience and ambition.
• Evocative imagery (“seas of
Arabic Literature”), mostly thirdperson narration.
1.Structure:
•
•
•
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(2) Lead paragraph: Start with the most important fact. Example:
Instead of “When Omar Khaled was two years old…,” write: “Omar
Khaled, now celebrated as Egypt’s Dean of Arabic Literature,
overcame blindness and poverty to inspire millions.”
(3) 5 W’s & H: Add clear details: Who (Omar Khaled), What (Dean of
Arabic Literature), Where (Cairo, Egypt), When (early 20th century or
specify), Why (education, perseverance), How (through Quran schools,
Al-Azhar, Braille books).
(4) Descending importance: Place achievements first, then
background story.
(5) Quotes: Introduce properly. Example: Khaled once said,
“Education is like the air we breathe.”
2.Ideas:
•
•
(1) Facts supported: Add sources or specific references. Example:
“According to Al-Azhar records, Khaled graduated in 19XX…”
(4) Human voices: Include more quotes from family, teachers, or
readers. Example: “His professor at Al-Azhar recalled, ‘Even in
darkness, Omar’s mind was full of light.’”
3.Language:
•
(4) Grammar & spelling: Correct errors. Examples:
o “Brial” → “Braille”
o “proffessor” → “professor”
o “perserevance” → “perseverance”
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Subject: English
Name: Lara Sameh
Year
Writing Feedback
Date: ____________________
Grading Rubric – Teacher’s Evaluation
Evaluator
Criteria
Code
Score
Creation of
Texts
WC
4/5 …Strong inspirational story, but lead not sharp. Example: headline works well.
Structure of
Text
WS
4/7
Grammar
and
Punctuation
WG
5/7 …Several spelling/grammar errors. Example: “Brial” instead of “Braille.”
Vocabulary
and
Language
WV
4/5 …Evocative and accessible. Example: “seas of Arabic Literature” is vivid.
Word
Structure
(Spelling)
WW
2/3 .. Mostly fine but repeated errors.
Total Score
—
19/25 .. Good effort, strong theme, but needs sharper structure and proofreading.
Comments
…Chronological instead of inverted pyramid. Needs clearer 5 W’s. Example: achievements
should come first.
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