My major idea that I am trying to communicate is that morality is objective and is derived from
God. The areas I need to explain more are how God came up with morality and why. I will do my
best to do research on this and hopefully make the reader understand better.
Each paragraph is divided into its claim or main point. It connects to the main idea by explaining
different parts of the main point.
I use direct quotes with every claim, and I cite all sources at the end, but I could benefit from
explaining them deeper. The idea that needs the most work is explaining how humans acquire
knowledge of right and wrong.
I think my main ideas and points are intertwined correctly, but I am open to correction.the larger
picture is being unfolded in this essay. I am connecting all of these points to the main idea by
dividing it and explaining all individually.
I guess the final draft question is “Where do you derive your morality?” I think my introduction
prepares the reader for the essay as a whole so I'm good on that. The conclusion will have to
close everything up nicely too. I will revise my introduction after the whole essay is done to
ensure that I prepared the way for the whole essay, for all readers.
My four revision tactics are simple: Reread, analyze, fix, repeat. Practically, I will expand on my
commentary and connect the evidence to the right context by rearranging them and making
direct quotes more direct.