MOCK EXAM PART 1: Identify and correct the mistakes. 1. After making an investigation, the fire department reached the conclusion that blaze was set intentionally. Unburied verbs Revision: After investigating, the fire department concluded that … 2. Although they began as a side business for Disney. Destination fragments weddings now represent a majorincome source. Fragments , 3. Because his laptop was small in size, he could carry it everywhere. Empty word Bỏ đi 4. Every employee must wear his photo identification on the job. Gender bias language Their 5. Pertaining to your request, the above-referenced items (printer toner and supplies) are being sent toyour Oakdale office, as per your telephone conversation of April 1. Trite business phrase Redundancy At your request during our telephone conversation on April 1, printer toner and supplies are being sent toyour Oakdale office 6. Plans for the new community center cannot go forward without full community support. Negative expression Redundancy Plans … can continue with 7. There is a password-checker that is now available that can automatically evaluate the strength of your password. Opening filler 8. This is an announcement to tell you that all computer passwords must be changed every six months for security purposes. Long lead in All … 9. When collecting information before purchasing a tablet, the Web proved to be my best resource. Dangling When I collected information …, the Web … 10. Kindly inform (indirect language) the undersigned (not conversational tone of voice) whether or not (redundancy) your representative will be making a visitation (unburied word) in the near future (flabby expressions). PART 2: The following is a negative letter responding to a customer, Mr. Tom Landon, Social Chairman, Zeta Tau Omega Fraternity, 220 Gaines Commons, Athens, GA 30601. Identify weaknesses and rewrite this in an effective negative announcement. Your spring fraternity party sounds like fun. We’re glad you’ve again chosen us as your caterer. Unfortunately, we have changed a few of our policies, and I wanted you to know about these changes in advance so that we won’t have any misunderstandings on the day of the party. We will arrange the delivery of tables and chairs as usual the evening before the party. However, if you want us to set up, there is now a $100 charge for that service. Of course, you might want to get some of the brothers and pledges to do it, which would save you money. We’ve also added a small charge for cleanup. This is only $3 per person (you can estimate because I know a lot of people come and go later in the evening). Other than that, all the arrangements will be the same. We’ll provide the skirt for the band stage, tablecloths, bar setup, and of course, the barbecue. Will you have the tubs of ice with soft drinks again? We can do that for you as well, but there will be a fee. Please let me know if you have any problems with these changes and we’ll try to work them out. I know it’s going to be a great party. Cần có letter head No Batter Need Softening bad news added fee Closing PART 3: Choose one of the following options. 1. As the boss of Forward Link Electronic Solutions, write to all staff, refusing requests of letting staff’s family and friends to participate in the annual sports tournament of the company. This is an employee-only event. 2. Suppose you are the manager of a restaurant. After covid, the restaurant's revenue started to recover but the landlord intends to increase the rent from April 2023. Write a message to persuade the landlord to reduce the rent. 1
