Assignment #14
Acitivity: Writing an Opinion paragraph.
Part A: Graphic Organizer for Drafting
Section
Description
1. Topic Sentence
Write a clear and concise statement presenting your main
opinion on the subject.
2. Reason
Provide a strong reason supporting your opinion. This should The rapid pace of technological development often leaves us
explain why you hold your viewpoint.
unable to anticipate its consequences or mitigate potential risks.
3. Supporting Details
Detail 1: Provide a fact, example, or piece of evidence
supporting your reason.
One example of this is the proliferation of social media
platforms, which have been linked to various negative impacts on
mental health, including increased rates of anxiety and depression,
especially among young people.
Detail 2: Add another supporting fact, example, or evidence.
the widespread adoption of automation and artificial intelligence
threatens to disrupt traditional employment models, leading to job
displacement
Detail 3: If possible, include a third piece of support to
solidify your argument.
The increasing reliance on connected digital systems and
networks exposes us to unprecedented cybersecurity threats,
potentially leaving each of us with no secrets on the Internet.
From data breaches to software attacks, these threats can have a
profound impact on personal, corporate, and even national
security.
Summarize your opinion and supporting arguments,
reinforcing the importance of your viewpoint.
While technological developments provide tremendous assistance
to progress and innovation, it is vital to recognize and address
their hidden dangers. Through awareness-raising, responsible
development and proactive measures to mitigate risks, we can
harness the benefits of technology, but it is also important to
prevent its adverse effects on individuals and society.
4. Conclusion
While technological development brings numerous benefits,
its rapid advancement also hides significant dangers that threaten
individuals and societies alike.
Part B: Writing the Opinion Paragraph
Using the notes from your graphic organizer, compose a cohesive opinion paragraph. Ensure it is no more than 200 words. Start with your topic sentence,
follow with your reason and supporting details in a logical order, and conclude with a strong closing statement that reiterates your main opinion.
While technology has brought many benefits, its rapid progress also threatens individuals and societies, so we often fail to understand the risks that come with
moving too fast. For example, various negative effects of social media on mental health have been linked to social media, including increased rates of
depression, especially among young people. In addition, I believe that the widespread adoption of automation and artificial intelligence could disrupt
traditional employment patterns, leading to job losses and widening economic inequality. And then, I think we're too dependent on that, and we might be
subject to cyber attacks, and I think that's very dangerous. Therefore, it is important to recognize and solve these hidden dangers. I believe that by raising
awareness to reduce risks, we can harness the benefits of technology while preventing its harm to ourselves
Part C Evaluator Guidelines & Rubric
Opinion Paragraph Evaluation Rubric
Criteria
Excellent (17-20)
1. Clarity of
Opinion
Clearly stated and
focused opinion.
2. Strength of
Reasoning
3. Quality of
Supporting Details
Good (13-16)
Opinion is clear with
minor ambiguities.
Satisfactory (9-12)
Poor (5-8)
Very Poor (0-4)
Opinion stated but some
confusion present.
Poor clarity; opinion not Very unclear or off-topic.
well defined.
Strong, logical
Generally logical with
reasoning throughout. minor flaws.
Basic reasoning,
somewhat logical.
Weak reasoning, lacks
logic.
Illogical or no reasoning
evident.
Highly relevant and
convincing details.
Mostly relevant details
with minor issues.
Some relevant details but
lacks depth.
Few irrelevant details;
lacks conviction.
No supporting details.
4. Organization and Highly coherent and
Coherence
well-organized.
Well-organized, minor
organizational flaws.
Some organization
present, lacks coherence.
Poorly organized, hard
to follow.
Lacks any organization.
Noticeable errors,
understanding not
hindered.
Many errors, hinders
understanding.
Frequent errors, significantly
impede understanding.
5. Grammar and
Mechanics
Minimal to no errors. Few minor errors.
Total
100
Checklist for Evaluation:
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The topic sentence clearly presents the main opinion.
The reason provided logically supports the opinion.
Supporting details are relevant and strengthen the argument.
The conclusion effectively summarizes the opinion and reasoning.
The paragraph is cohesive, with a logical flow of ideas.
Points
Awarded
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The writing is grammatically correct and free of spelling and punctuation errors.
Student Name: ______________________
Evaluator 1 Name: _____Camellia_______________
Date: _________________
Criteria
1. Clarity of Opinion
Points Awarded Comments
20/20 Strengths:The examples are very accurate, the
paragraphs are very clear, and the topic is well
explained.
Areas for Improvement:
More words to better explain and interpret their
topic.
2. Strength of Reasoning
20/20 Strengths:
You have Strong, logical reasoning throughout.
Areas for Improvement:
The reason can be more detailed, complete the
paragraph more completely, and try to write more
content to enrich the paragraph.
3. Quality of Supporting
Details
20/20 Strengths:
Supporting details are relevant.
Areas for Improvement:
Mainly related details and small problems, related
details need to be filled in more.Supporting details
are relevant, but strengthen the argument and list
more examples to prove your point.
4. Organization and
Coherence
20/20 Strengths:
Highly coherent and well-organized.
Areas for Improvement:
Just keep doing.
5. Grammar and Mechanics
16/20 Strengths:
Some minor errors in grammar and structure.
There's not much difference. Clear sentences and
structure with proper punctuation.
Areas for Improvement:
Make the essay make fewer grammatical mistakes
next time.
Criteria
Total
Points Awarded Comments
96/100 Overall Comments:
While technology offers many benefits, its rapid
progress also threatens individuals and society, so
we often fail to understand the risks that come with
moving too fast. It is his topic sentence, and the
examples given are also good explanations of the
topic sentence. This article is based on real life, the
selection of materials is appropriate, very
innovative, clear paragraphs, natural transition,
readable. The article is very clear and easy to
understand, the words are accurate and the structure
is reasonable. Leon has a thorough understanding of
the subject under discussion and develops the
discussion step by step, giving the reader a
comprehensive perspective. However, the number
of words is too small, and there is less connection
and summary of their own life.
Student Name: ______________________
Evaluator 2 Name: ____________________
Date: _________________
Criteria
1. Clarity of Opinion
Points Awarded Comments
/20 Strengths:
Areas for Improvement:
2. Strength of Reasoning
/20 Strengths:
Areas for Improvement:
3. Quality of Supporting
Details
/20 Strengths:
Areas for Improvement:
4. Organization and
Coherence
/20 Strengths:
Criteria
Points Awarded Comments
Areas for Improvement:
5. Grammar and Mechanics
/20 Strengths:
Areas for Improvement:
Total
/100 Overall Comments: