Freshman English (Engineering Majors)
Opinion Essay Writing
Name: 郭峻彬
Instructor: Ms. Nicole Liu
Single Sex Middle Schools are Better Than Coed Middle
Schools
In Taiwan, we can separate middle schools into two types: single
sex middle schools and coed middle schools. The debate between which
type is better for students has been a topic of discussion in the field
of education for a long time. While both types have their advantages,
I think single sex middle schools are better than coed middle schools.
Single sex schools can let students be more focus on their study.
Students in their teenage years are very curious in the opposite sex,
and this make students being less focus on their study. From my
observation, most of my middle school’s classmates who have a
girlfriend didn’t do well in the Comprehensive Assessment Program for
Junior High School Students. In my opinion, having girlfriend can
lessen the time of studying and make the academic performance drop. By
separate different sex students, we can create a learning environment
free from distraction.
Single sex schools can eliminate the difference between boys and
girls in learning because they can provide an environment that cater
to the specific needs of each sex. By separate boys and girls, teachers
can tailor their teaching methods to reach the learning styles and
preference of different sex. In 2005, the U.S. Department of Education
did research about single sex versus coeducational schooling. The
result has shown that students who receive single sex education often
perform better on academic and often be more positive. From the
research, we can notice that single sex education can provide more
effective environment for students.
Although single sex education has already proved that this is the
better type of education, there are some people hold an objection.
These people believe that students in middle school should contact with
opposite sex and learn how to communicate with them because people
work with opposite sex when they grow up. I agree that students should
learn to communicate with opposite sex as well. In fact, there are a
lot of communication between boys schools and girls schools. I
graduated from a boys school, our school hold many events with another
girls school every year. For example, we have prom, film festival, and
other small events. In my three years in high school, I had a lot of
chances to communicate with the opposite sex, so I think students can
still learn how to work with the opposite sex if they study in a single
sex school.
In conclusion, single sex schools offer distinct advantages over
coed schools by providing an environment that cater to the unique needs
of boys and girls. Single sex schools can give students more effective
learning and let students be more focus on study. Although the debate
is continuing, I think single sex middle schools can provide more
benefits to students than coed middle schools.
The ChatGPT Version
In Taiwan, middle schools can be categorized into two types:
single-sex middle schools and coed middle schools. The ongoing debate
regarding which type is more beneficial for students has been a
longstanding discussion in the realm of education. While both options
have their merits, I contend that single-sex middle schools surpass
coed middle schools in several aspects.
Single-sex schools foster an environment that enables students to
concentrate more effectively on their studies. Adolescents during their
teenage years often find themselves preoccupied with curiosity about
the opposite sex, leading to a potential distraction from academic
pursuits. Based on my observations, many of my middle school classmates
who were involved in romantic relationships tended to perform poorly
in the Comprehensive Assessment Program for Junior High School Students.
I believe that having a romantic partner may divert time away from
studying, negatively impacting academic performance. By segregating
students
of
different
sexes,
a
learning
environment
devoid
of
distractions can be created.
Moreover, single-sex schools have the potential to eliminate
gender-based disparities in learning by tailoring the educational
environment to the specific needs of each gender. The separation of
boys and girls allows teachers to customize their teaching methods to
align with the distinct learning styles and preferences of each gender.
In 2005, the U.S. Department of Education conducted research comparing
single-sex
receiving
and
coeducational
single-sex
schooling,
education
often
revealing
displayed
that
students
better
academic
performance and a more positive attitude. This research underscores
the effectiveness of single-sex education in providing an optimal
learning environment.
While proponents of coed education argue that students need
exposure to the opposite sex to develop essential communication skills
for adulthood, I contend that single-sex schools can still facilitate
such skills. In my personal experience, even though I graduated from
a boys' school, we regularly engaged in events with a girls' school,
such as proms, film festivals, and various small gatherings. Over my
three years in high school, I had ample opportunities to communicate
and collaborate with the opposite sex, suggesting that students in
single-sex schools can still acquire vital interpersonal skills.
In conclusion, single-sex middle schools offer distinct advantages
over coed schools by providing an environment tailored to the unique
needs of boys and girls. Such schools facilitate more effective
learning environments, enabling students to focus on their studies.
Despite the ongoing debate, I firmly believe that single-sex middle
schools offer more benefits to students compared to their coed
counterparts.
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