Feedback on my abstract I found really helpful as I understood what to aim for which is making
my argument more clear. Then, I found feedback on my introduction quite helpful because it told
me to make the thesis statement more clear. Also, feedback on my evidence paragraphs which
told me I had some issues with some of the topic sentences. In addition, feedback that told me
that I was not showing the direct link between my evidence and claim properly, I found it pretty
useful.
As a result of the feedback, I will make quite a few changes. I will change the whole abstract
which will clearly show the main argument of my essay and also I will try to make the abstract
more clear. I will change my thesis statement in my introductory paragraph. I will try to make
the main argument more specific and clear. Also, I will revise some of the topic sentences with
clarity issues in my evidence paragraphs. I will add some more details in some of the evidence
paragraphs which will point out the link between my evidence and claim.