BE SPECIFIC
DON’T SAY
DO SAY
This is really good.
I could relate to your story. My little sister drives me crazy too. I like how
you gave specific details about the things your sister does to annoy you like
taking your phone charger and borrowing your clothes without asking.
This is boring.
Maybe you could add some dialogue to help develop and show your
characters more. OR I love your story idea. Maybe you could work on
describing the people and places using more sensory language.
I like this sentence.
I love how you used the word “galloped” when you were describing your
great dane. That is the perfect verb. It conveys how big he is!
This makes no sense.
I got a little confused when your dad walked in the room and you screamed.
Why did you scream?
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QUESTIONS!
Focus on
content,not
grammar or
punctuation.
Give feedback,
not an evaluation.