Introduction to Revision
Unit 4
Editing
VS. Revision
EDITING:
● fixing basic errors like
capitalization,
punctuation, and
spelling
REVISION:
•Re-viewing/Re-seeing a text
•Dealing with the paper as a whole, considering strengths and
weaknesses, arguments, focus and organization, support, and
voice, as well as mechanical issues.
•Clarifying and focusing the writer's arguments by defining
terms, making concessions and counter-arguments, and using
evidence. This may involve moving or removing entire
paragraphs, extending or narrowing ideas, rewriting vague or
confusing text, and adding to existing paragraphs
We want REVISION! (...but also
editing… ...but mostly REVISION!!)
Helpful revision tips from UNC
https://writingcenter.unc.edu/tips-and-tools/revising-drafts/
Editing:
Revising:
Fun Revision
Examples
Paula Abdul - Straight Up (1988)
J. Cole - Work Out (2011)
Sister Sledge - He’s The Greatest Dancer (1979)
Will Smith - Gettin’ Jiggy Wit It (1997)
Practice distinguishing between editing and revising
Critics of Barbie dolls argue that the figurines promote materialism and
unrealistic body proportions. Barbie dolls have undergone a lot of changes
since they were first introduced. Created in 1959. It was not until 1980 that
a Black barbie doll came out. Barbies eyes did not look straight forward until
1971. Before that, they always looked to the side. Barbie dolls helped
promote feminism in America. Supporters of barbie dolls say that Barbies
helped combat the typical gender stereotypes of the ‘50s. barbie has a lot of
different careers: pilot, astronaut, doctor, Olympic athlete and more. Barbie
is 11-inches tall. I hated Barbie dolls as a child, I cried when I was given a
Barbie doll for Christmas one year. The transformation of Barbie dolls can
actually be studied as a microcosm for the transformation of females in
american society since the 1950s.
As a child, I cried when I was gifted a Barbie doll. The girly dolls simply
were not of interest to a young tomboy. As I’ve aged, I’ve recognized that
while I might not love Barbies, they are an interesting case study in the
promotion of feminism. Barbie dolls were first created in 1959. Critics of
Barbie dolls argue that the figurines promote materialism and unrealistic
body proportions. But Barbie dolls have undergone a lot of changes since
they were first introduced. As just one example: Barbie’s eyes originally
looked submissively and mysteriously to the side, but in 1971, her eyes
looked straight ahead. Supporters of Barbie say that the dolls actually
helped combat the typical gender stereotypes of the ‘50s. Barbie had a lot
of different careers: pilot, astronaut, doctor, Olympic athlete and more. The
transformation of Barbie dolls can actually be studied as a microcosm for
the transformation of females in American society since the 1950s. Barbie
dolls helped promote feminism in America.
For the rest of class:
1. Work on the Revision Plan Activity and then post
your finished product to the discussion board.
1. If you finish, open the Revision Plan Assignment
document and begin working on your Revision
Plan.