Chau Tien An C- did not follow the structure we taught in the class. They are a talented writer but they
get everything mixed up. There is no detail and there is no conclusion
Mai Huy B – Gave some good detail Needs better structural language. Follow the advice in the course
in terms of the topic sentence.
Bui Gia Hong B– Good topic sentence. Don’t use simple sentences in your introduction Some good
support but need to add more detail. E.g. say why its important to have a shopping mall (for
entertainment) Good structure to the essay.
NGuyễn Nam Trọng Nhân A– Very good support decent structure. Nice linking words
Hồ Trần Hoài an A – A very good effort. The student has given lots of details for their opinions and
there is a good structure to the essay.
Võ Huy Hoàng A – Great introduction, following the structure taught. A very good essay, with so much
detail and support. You only argued to live in the countryside though. The second paragraph was
against the city and the third was for the country. If we treat it as an opinion essay its very good
though.
Phan Nguyên Hưng B– Didn’t include a topic sentence or a proper introduction. Don’t use second
person. Gave some good detail to back up their arguments
Nguyen Viet Bach A= needs a topic sentence in the introduction and third paragraph, you have just
included the thesis statement. Adds great detail to his support, which adds to the convincing
argument.
Đoàn Thanh Huyền B= you list a lot of reasons but you don’t go into enough detail as to why those
things are important. Don’t use simple sentences. Good argument in your paragraph 3.
Phan Nguyễn Thục Trinh A– well done for using the linking phrases we taught you. Very good detail
to back up your arguments. I like how you have picked one argument and explained it in lots of detail.
Well done.
Dương Tấn Dũng D- Essay was way to short, wrote a summary about the topic not an essay
NGUYEN BA KHANH NGOC A – always studies hard and take son advice. Her essays got
progressively better throughout the course and she has learnt to give detail to support her argument.
Lê Triệu Cát Tiên – Good topic sentence and thesis statement although needs to improve grammar.
Gives some good support but needs to proof read much better as there are lots of mistakes.
tran chau giang – B Her essay was very long. Make sure she proof reads as there were a lot of
mistakes. Added lots of support which was good.