专业：管理专业
Offer：卡迪夫大学 肯特大学
牛津布卢克斯大学 诺丁汉伦特大学
诺丁汉大
学
My greatest achievement to date was when I was appointed head of the 6th
form Management committee. I have turned it from a minor committee to a
thriving active part of my school. Whilst maintaining the balance between
academic and extra-curricular pursuits I have used my initiative in
starting and managing the ‘Cafe’ at my school to raise funds for any
6th form investments. Having planned this project from the outset, I have
learnt how to analyse problems and come up with solutions whilst meeting
deadlines and executing a basic business strategy. These formal positions
have taught me vital life skills such as leadership, planning, working
with others in a team, and delegation. It has given me my first taste in
managing a business, and I am eager to learn more.
After a lot of research into many careers and thorough background reading
such as "The Irrational Economist", I realized a career in business is
something I would like to pursue. Having observed the rapid changes in
global economics, and the way firms react has inspired me to take this
knowledge further. My enthusiasm for business has always been in its
management: the fine art of ensuring that a set of high quality cogs create
a functioning timepiece.
When choosing my A level subjects I took into consideration which
transferable skills would be of use whilst pursuing a business based
degree. I took the highly analytical subject Economics due to its
relevance to the current climate in the business world as well as to train
me in writing focused persuasive essays. Not only has my study of critical
thinking supported this, but it has taught me how to critique the arguments
of others. Further Mathematics has taught me how to analyse problems and
to interpret information. My study of Biology provides me with the logical
mindset required to approach any subject which will no doubt be helpful
in studying for my chosen degree. Finally, in studying AS level Religious
Studies during my free time, I learned valuable lessons, in philosophy
and ethics as well as working independently whilst exercising well
developed time management.
As well as my schoolwork I take part in many extra-curricular activities;
I am currently head of my local youth group, where I have learnt how to
take control and organise different activities. I have always been
interested in the wellbeing of others and have taken part in voluntary
work. I enjoy my volunteer work at Childline, as it gives me a sense of
purpose and achievement, whilst enabling me to communicate in an empathic
and systematic manner. Not only has it taught me to be a team player but
also some key skills of how to be a leader, such as how to listen to people’
s problems and remain uninvolved, and follow certain guidelines on how
to deal with a situation. My communication skills are further supported
by my work in speech and drama, when I have both delivered and judged
speeches and debates, teaching me how to assess objectively and give
constructive and positive feedback.
I understand that a business based degree is a highly demanding course
and needs dedication and hard work. I have taken up activities which
involve these attributes; karate is a sport which I enjoy and its basic
principles of motivation and hard work are qualities I value. I have also
taken up ballet and modern dance, Duke of Edinburgh, drama and piano;
reinforcing discipline, dedication and performance skills.
A business based degree is exceptionally diverse and can lead to many
opportunities; I will thrive on studying its many depths and breadths.
At present I have only just ventured into the business world and I am eager
to learn more. Potentially I would like to set up my own business in the
future and a business based degree will aid me. I see myself as a very
capable and enthusiastic person who will grasp this challenging degree
with both hands to further my academic potential and become an asset to
your university.
点评：
1. 商学院对专业能力要求很高，尤其是管理方面。申请者开篇即谈到了自己最
得意的成就——成为某一管理委员会的负责人。在第一段即说明与专业相关的个
人成就，很有推陈出新的意思，当然对申请者如何引导并安排其后的内容也有一
定的考验;
2. 申请者接着叙述了自己如何走上管理之路，并用了一个恰当的比喻来阐释自
己对管理的认识与爱好。在文书字里行间中，表露自身对所申请专业的深层见解
与爱好，这是为招生官所喜闻乐见的;
3. 在谈知识架构时，申请者也展示了自己的独立思考——有针对地选择相关课
程。另外在数学统计、生物、宗教、哲学与伦理学，申请者涉猎广泛;
4. 倒数二、三段，一般都会安排课外活动和兴趣爱好，对于管理专业来说，团
队协作力、领导力、交流能力则尤为重要，可以有意识举些能展示这些能力的例
子。
文书内容安排有其固定格式，比如首段快速高效引入主题，接着谈专业学识与学
术成就，再就是课外活动与兴趣爱好，最后来个总结升华。这样的文章可能没啥
风险，但也极难出彩。这篇文章贵在开篇即谈与管理相关的成就，不再千篇一律，
还能展现申请者的自信。一篇文章可以有一两个突出亮点，如何向招生官展示这
一亮点，就要靠自己多看多悟啦。