UPM-CALC/SEM2/2020-21/LPE2301/SCL WORKSHEET 8
LPE2301 ACADEMIC INTERACTION AND PRESENTATION
SCL WORKSHEET 8
WEEK 10 (USING SPOKEN LANGUAGE)
Name
Matric No.
Group
Due date
: Nuralia Nisa Binti Roslizam
: 205292
: 69
: 6 June 2021
Exercise 1
The following sentences are not concise. Based on the problem, rewrite the sentences to
achieve conciseness.
1.
2.
3.
4.
Problem
Original
sentence
Revised
sentence
:
:
Problem
:
Sentence uses redundant or unnecessary words.
Original
sentence
:
For each and every problem, there will be an effective and practical
solution.
Revised
sentence
:
For every problem, there will be an effective solution.
Problem
:
Sentence uses jargon.
Original
sentence
:
The patient is being given positive pressure ventilatory support.
Revised
sentence
:
The patient is given support by a ventilator.
Problem
:
Sentence uses negatives.
Original
sentence
:
It is not impossible to practise Zero Waste lifestyle in the university.
:
Sentence is too long.
The point I am trying to make is sometimes public policy does not
accomplish what it set out to achieve.
Sometimes public policy does not accomplish what it set out to
achieve.
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5.
Revised
sentence
:
It is possible to practice Zero Waste lifestyle in the university.
Problem
:
Sentence uses weak verb.
Original
sentence
:
Before I start my presentation, let me tell you something about
Himalayan Tigers.
Revised
sentence
:
Before I start my presentation, let me share some knowledge about
Himalayan Tigers.
Exercise 2
Change the sentences below from passive to active.
1. Three distinct aspects of the distribution of power within societies such as economic,
communal and authoritarian power were identified by German sociologist, Max Weber.
The German sociologist, Max Weber have identified three distinct aspects of the
distribution of the power within societies such as economic,communal and authoritarian
power.
2. Employees were not expected to demand anything more than the salary, holidays,
pension, and bonuses associated with their role.
The employers did not expect their employees to demand anything more than the
salary,holidays,pension and bonuses associated with their role.
3. Today, extraordinary quantities of greenhouse gases are being released into the
atmosphere by one billion vehicles.
One billion vehicles have released extraordinary quantities of greenhouse gases into the
atmosphere today.
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4. Listeners and viewers are now seen by media owners as consumer of their commodities
in much the same way as how customers are seen as consumers of their products by
retail chains.
Media owners see listeners and viewers as consumer of their commodities in much the
same way as how retail chains see their customers as consumers of their products.
5. Sweating and breathing deeply are the two examples of how energy is released by
humans.
Sweating and breathing deeply are the two examples of how humans release energy.
Submission:
Submit the completed Exercise 1 and 2 in PDF format.
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