UPM-CALC/LPE2501/SEM 1/2020-21/WP/TASK 3
SEMESTER 1, 2020/2021
LPE2501 ACADEMIC WRITING
WRITING PORTFOLIO – TASK 3 (30%)
SUBMISSION CHECKLIST
ITEMS
TASK 3
TICK ()
WRITING FORM (DRAFT)
SELF-EDITING FORM
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WRITING FORM (FINAL)
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Name
Matric No.
Ng Kai Xian
203209
Group No.
: 31
Teacher’s Name
: Madam Hasnah Mohd Rais
FOR TEACHER USE ONLY
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WRITING PORTFOLIO TASK 3
WRITING FORM (DRAFT)
NAME: NG KAI XIAN
GROUP: 31
MATRIC No.: 203209
Based on your OUTLINE FORM (FINAL) in Task 1 and PARAPHRASE AND SUMMARY
FORM (FINAL) in Task 2, write two complete body paragraphs. Include a reference list for all
your in-text citations in APA style. The paragraphs must be typed using font Arial 11/Times
New Roman 12 with 1.5 spacing.
TOPIC:
The Applications of Biotechnology in Environmental Issues
Thesis Statement:
The applications of biotechnology in environmental issues include solving pollution issues
and environmental detection and monitoring.
Body Paragraphs:
Firstly, the application of biotechnology in environmental issues is to solve and
improve pollution issues as it can improve air quality. Bioreactors are important in treating
air pollutions biologically [simple]. Biofilters that are used during common operating state of
pressure and temperature are the most suitable method for biological treatment of gases
pollutants even though they are usually only productive in a low amount of natural pollutants
[compound] (Famideh et al., 2014). Other than that, biotechnology is applicable in treating
wastewater as well. Arora (2016) claims that the elimination of pollutants from surface water
and groundwater, such as metals from wet soil and ground can be done by rhizofiltration
through adsorption, condensation onto roots or immersed organs of metal-endurance
aquatic flora. Therefore, one of the importance of biotechnology in environmental issues is
to solve and improve pollution issues.
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Secondly, environmental detection and monitoring is another application of
biotechnology in environmental issues. Biotechnology can help to detect pollution and can
be used in continuous monitoring of pollutants. Biosensors and immunoassays have been
evolved for biological detection purpose and are now marketed. Microbes are usually
integrated into the biosensors to detect contamination of metals or pollutants. With these
methods, scientists can assess the degree of contamination in-place and get the results
instantly instead of sending samples to a laboratory for testing (Godani, 2015). In addition,
pollution detection can be carried out through biological detection methods using biosensors
and immunoassays. Scragg (2005) claims that physico-chemical transducer has been
incorporated for the enhancement of biosensors which involves the combination of a
particular and sensitive derived detecting component [complex]. Hence, environmental
detection and monitoring are one of the applications of biotechnology in environmental
issues.
References:
Arora, S. (2016). Applications of Biotechnology in Environment: Cell Biology. Retrieved
from https://www.biologydiscussion.com/biotechnology/applicationsbiotechnology/applications-of-biotechnology-in-environment-cell-biology/39204
Fahmideh, L., Khodadadi, E., & Khodadadi, E. (2014). A Review of Applications of
Biotechnology in the Environment. International Journal of Farming and Allied
Science, 3(12), 1319-1325.
Godani, K. (2015). Environmental Biotechnology: Meaning, Applications and Other
Details. Retrieved from https://www.biologydiscussion.com/biotechnology/environmentalbiotechnology/environmental-biotechnology
Scragg, A. H. (2005). Environmental biotechnology. New York: OXFORD university press.
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SELF-EDITING FORM
WRITING PORTFOLIO TASK 3
Review your paragraphs in WRITING FORM (DRAFT). Tick the relevant boxes and provide
comments to help improve the paragraphs.
TOPIC SENTENCES
 Use keywords or phrases from the thesis statement to indicate the
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NO
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part of the thesis statement that will be discussed.
 Write the key words or phrases.
 Solving pollution issues
 Environmental detection and monitoring
 Have clear topics and controlling ideas.
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 Circle the topics and underline the controlling ideas in the topic
sentences.
 Contain appropriate transition signals such as first and second.
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 Write the transition signals used.
 Firstly
 Secondly
SUPPORTING SENTENCES
 Contain relevant points to support the main idea in the topic
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sentence.
 Develop, clarify and support the topic sentence adequately.
SUPPORTING DETAILS (Paraphrase/Summary)
 Explain and support the supporting sentences.
 Write the types of supporting details used (fact, example, quotation,
or statistic).
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Paragraph 1: Facts
Paragraph 2: Facts
 Retain relevant ideas and meaning from the excerpts.
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 Use own words/phrases and did not copy from the excerpts.
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CONCLUDING SENTENCES
 Begin with a suitable concluding signal.
 Write the concluding signals used.
 Hence
 Therefore
 Restate the topic sentence or summarise the main ideas in the
paragraph.
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 Do not consist of new points in the sentence.
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CITATIONS & REFERENCES (APA Style)
 In-text citations contain the name of author in correct format.
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 In-text citations contain the year of publication.
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 In-text citations use appropriate reporting verbs (for within the
sentence citation only).
 List the reporting verbs used.
 Claims
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 In-text citations use correct punctuation.
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 Reference list matches the in-text citations and is correctly formatted.
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UNITY & COHERENCE
 All the supporting sentences/ supporting details are relevant to the
main idea.
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 Paragraphs achieve coherence by repeating key nouns, using noun
substitutes, consistent pronouns and appropriate transition signals.
Write the:
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NO
YES
NO
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NO
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Repeated key noun(s):
 Biotechnology
 Bio filters
Noun substitute(s)
 It
 They
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Transition signals
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 Other than that
 In addition
 Another
 Such as
 Even though
 Instead
 Paragraphs flow smoothly from beginning to the end.
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LANGUAGE AND SENTENCE ERRORS
 Correct punctuation, capitalisation and spelling.
 Circle/underline errors in the draft, if any.
 Use a variety of sentence types (simple, compound, and complex
sentences).
 Underline/highlight a few examples of the types of sentences in the
draft.
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NO
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 No language and sentence errors (non-parallel structures, run-ons,
fragments, comma splices, subject-verb agreement, word form, and
tenses)
 Circle/underline errors in the draft, if any.
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COMMENTS
THREE most important amendments I should make are:
1.Amend non-parallel structures to parallel structures.
Eg:
Incorrect: Biotechnology can help to detect pollution and can be used in continuous
monitoring of pollutants.
Correct: Biotechnology can help to detect pollution and used in continuous monitoring of
pollutants.
2. Amend sentence fragments into complete sentences.
Eg:
Incorrect: Other than that, biotechnology is applicable in treating wastewater as well.
Correct: Other than treating pollutants biologically, biotechnology is applicable in treating
wastewater as well.
Incorrect: With these methods, scientists can assess the degree of contamination inplace and get the results instantly instead of sending samples to a laboratory for testing
(Godani, 2015).
Correct: With the integration of microbes into biosensors, scientists can assess the
degree of contamination in-place and get the results instantly instead of sending samples
to a laboratory for testing (Godani, 2015).
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WRITING PORTFOLIO TASK 3
WRITING FORM (FINAL)
NAME: NG KAI XIAN
GROUP: 31
MATRIC No.: 203209
Based on the review of your draft, edit your body paragraphs. Include a reference list for all
your in-text citations in APA style. The paragraphs must be typed using font Arial 11/Times
New Roman 12 with 1.5 spacing.
TOPIC:
The Applications of Biotechnology in Environmental Issues
Thesis Statement:
The applications of biotechnology in environmental issues include solving pollution issues
and environmental detection and monitoring.
Body Paragraphs:
Firstly, the application of biotechnology in environmental issues is to solve and
improve pollution issues as it can improve air quality. Bioreactors are important in treating
air pollutions biologically. Biofilters that are used during common operating state of pressure
and temperature are the most suitable method for biological treatment of gases pollutants
even though they are usually only productive in a low amount of natural pollutants (Famideh
et al., 2014). Other than treating pollutions biologically, biotechnology is applicable in
treating wastewater as well. Arora (2016) claims that the elimination of pollutants from
surface water and groundwater, such as metals from wet soil and ground can be done by
rhizofiltration through adsorption, condensation onto roots or immersion of organs from
metal-endurance aquatic flora. Therefore, one of the importance of biotechnology in
environmental issues is to solve and improve pollution issues.
Secondly, environmental detection and monitoring is another application of
biotechnology in environmental issues. Biotechnology can help to detect pollution and used
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in continuous monitoring of pollutants. Biosensors and immunoassays have been evolved
for biological detection purpose and are now marketed. Microbes are usually integrated into
the biosensors to detect contamination of metals or pollutants. With the integration of
microbes into biosensors, scientists can assess the degree of contamination in-place and
get the results instantly instead of sending samples to a laboratory for testing (Godani,
2015). In addition, pollution detection can be carried out through biological detection
methods using biosensors and immunoassays. Scragg (2005) claims that physico-chemical
transducer has been incorporated for the enhancement of biosensors which involves the
combination of a particular and sensitive derived detecting component. Hence,
environmental detection and monitoring are one of the applications of biotechnology in
environmental issues.
References:
Arora, S. (2016). Applications of Biotechnology in Environment: Cell Biology. Retrieved
from https://www.biologydiscussion.com/biotechnology/applicationsbiotechnology/applications-of-biotechnology-in-environment-cell-biology/39204
Fahmideh, L., Khodadadi, E., & Khodadadi, E. (2014). A Review of Applications of
Biotechnology in the Environment. International Journal of Farming and Allied
Science, 3(12), 1319-1325.
Godani, K. (2015). Environmental Biotechnology: Meaning, Applications and Other
Details. Retrieved from https://www.biologydiscussion.com/biotechnology/environmentalbiotechnology/environmental-biotechnology
Scragg, A. H. (2005). Environmental biotechnology. New York: OXFORD university press.
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