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Listening Analysis Report
 Score: 22/30 in TOEFL test
a) Isabella has finished the listening part with the accuracy of 27/34, which is
better than last test (22/34).
b) Listening Score Scale for TOEFL
 Wrong answered questions：
a) Gist-content question: 1
b) Inference question: 2
c) Specific detail question: 2
d) Attitude question: 1
e) Function question: 1
To be specific, wrong questions are listed below:
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The first lecture: 2 & 6
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The second lecture: 3 & 4 & 6
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The second conversation: 3
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The fourth lecture: 1
 Analysis：
a) Isabella did well on the listening conversations, for there’s only 1 wrong
question in the second conversation. In this way, she can mostly understand
the dialogues about college real-life situations.
b) There are five wrong questions in the first two lectures, and those are where
Isabella makes most mistakes, which means she didn’t understand those two
lectures. They are about history and astronomy, so Isabella should
memorize related topic vocabulary and listen more lectures about those
topics.
c) As for the question types, Isabella made more mistakes in detail and
reference questions, which require her to first understand the basic meaning
of sentences and then the logic.
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Speaking Analysis Report
 Score: 17/30 in TOEFL test
 Analysis：
a) Topic Development
+ Major purpose included
- Unreasonable logic
- Poor organization with lack of details
b) Language Use
+ Keywords appeared
- Lack of intact sentence structure
- Confusing pronouns and personals
c) Delivery
+ Improved fluency
- Too low speed
- Sometimes unmeaningful sayings such as “like” appeared
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Writing Analysis Report
 Score: 17/ 30 in TOEFL test
 Organization & development
a) What Isabella is doing good at：
- having a clear thesis throughout the essay.
- having more than one sub-idea to support argumentation.
- writing basically in “conclusion-analysis” structure (= putting forward main idea
first and then simple analysis of ideas).
b) Isabella needs improvements on：
- Clearer essay structure
1) Though writing in “conclusion-analysis” structure, Isabella put all sub-ideas in
one paragraph, making it hard to understand the development of the whole essay.
For any types of writing, it would be clearer if they are structured into different
paragraphs, each having a clear main idea.
2) While Isabella expected to make a contrast between playing with technologies
and playing outside with friends, she made it too vague and weakly connected in
structure.
Specifically,
 Sub-idea 1: Addiction to technologies made children silent
 Sub-idea 2: Addiction to technologies is bad for children's mental and physical
health.
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 Sub-idea 3: Playing outside and socializing help children become stronger and
healthier.(no development on this idea)
One the one hand, "making children silent" would be part of their mental health,
and on the other hand, since no development is made for sub-idea 3, there is no
clue to see how playing with technologies and playing outside with friends are
contrasted.
- More detailed & logical development in sub-ideas
In the writing sample, Isabella simply mentioned only 1-2 sentences for each of her
sub-ideas. This results in weak logos in the whole essay.
For example, in the first sub-idea:
Children today rely too much on technologies, like computer and cell phones, that
they develop addiction. Addiction will cause children to become rather silent since
they will technology to communicate and entertain.
Here, Isabella used a good point of children's addiction to technology, yet it was
too simple in explanation and would be better developed if Isabella considered
questions like: How do children become addicted to technology? What would be
the negative results of children getting more silent? Learning of skills to develop an
idea will help.
 Mechanics & Sentence fluency
a) What Isabella is doing good at：
Few basic grammatical mistakes (except for some spelling mistakes, probably due
to carelessness).
Relatively good connection among sentences by using pronouns, transitional words
and repetition of key words.
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b) Isabella needs improvements on：
- More solid foundation and mastery in English grammar, especially syntax.
As it is demonstrated in writing sample, Isabella is relatively weak in syntax
related to complex sentences, which makes her expressions hard to understand.
For example,
The statement that children reply too much on technologies for fun and
entertainment nowadays, however, playing with simpler toys and friends can be
better influence in children development is something I agree with since the affects
are clear that technologies relyance is not as good as playing outside with
companions.
1) This sentence is too long in length and unbalanced in structure as well (the
highlighted part is the SVO of main clause, rest being dependent clauses).
2) With most key information put into dependent clauses, emphasis is unclear in
this sentence.
3) Incorrect use of "however" -- adverbs can't be used to connect sentences like
conjunctions, which will result in a run-on sentence.
 Recommendation for course arrangement
a) Key problems to be solved:
- how to develop ideas in a logical way
- how to organize and structure an essay
- how to write clear, concise, and coherent sentences that are grammatically correct
(needs learning of English grammar)
b) Recommendation:
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It is advised that Isabella can start from learning how to write an effective
paragraph, and then a full essay. During this process, she can learn grammar based
on needs shown in her homework and class exercises. 1-2 classes (1.5 hour each) is
recommended.
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