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Process
material
material
Kamal is playing at the field with his friend, Kumar. They are flying their kites together.
relational
relational
mental
Although the wind at the field is so strong, Kamal and Kumar were happy to see their kites fly.
relational
material
material
Suddenly, Kumar string snapped and his kites flew away. Kumar and Kamal ran after the
material
material material
kites. They could not reach the kites. Kamal keep running to save his kites. Then, the kites get
relational
relational
stuck at the big and tall tree. That was a big problem.
behavioural material
relational
material
Kumar is crying and sitting under the tree. Kamal felt pity to Kumar. So, Kamal climb the
material
relational
relational
relational
tree to take Kumar’s kite. Although it was risky but Kamal is not giving up. The kite is stuck at
the branch.
material
material
verbal
relational
Kamal take the kite and throw it to Kumar. Kumar thanked Kamal. Kumar was glad
relational
because his kite is safe.
Roles
Actor
Actor
goal
Kamal is playing at the field with his friend, Kumar. They are flying their kites together.
carrier
carrier
Although the wind at the field is so strong, Kamal and Kumar were happy to see their kites fly.
carrier
carrier
actor
Suddenly, Kumar string snapped and his kites flew away. Kumar and Kamal ran after the
goal actor
goal actor
goal
carrier
kites. They could not reach the kites. Kamal keep running to save his kites. Then, the kites get
carrier
attribute
stuck at the big and tall tree. That was a big problem.
behaver
identified
identifier actor
Kumar is crying and sitting under the tree. Kamal felt pity to Kumar. So, Kamal climb the
goal
goal
token
carrier
carrier
tree to take Kumar’s kite. Although it was risky but Kamal is not giving up. The kite is stuck at
attribute
the branch.
actor
goal
recipient sayer
addressee carrier
Kamal take the kite and throw it to Kumar. Kumar thanked Kamal. Kumar was glad
carrier
because his kite is safe.
Summary
Script number
Major Process
1
Material Mental Relational Verbal Behavioural Existential
12
1
11
1
1
0
This student chooses essay A. The story is a narrative story about two boys playing kites
at the field. The most process used in the story is material process and relational process. A
material is a process of doing expressed by an action verb. Thus, the student uses a lot of physical
verbs such as play, ran, climb and the others. This is because the students is trying to explain the
physical activities that the characters are doing in the story.
Moreover, a relational process expresses what attributes a certain object has, or what
type it belongs to and also to express the identical properties of two entities. As such, the student
uses verbs such as were, is , was and others to describe the attributes of a certain object. For
example, in the sentence “the wind at the field is so strong”. The word “is” is used to relate the
“wind” and “strong”.
In short, the student is at an intermediate level and uses mostly simple basic sentence to
write the story. The process used are correct and the participants can be identified clearly.
Mistakes found
- Tenses (both past tense and present tense verbs were used)
Process
material
material
Last Saturday, Puan Rohimah went to a big restaurant near her house. She was waiting
material
for her parents to join her dinner.
mental
material
Suddenly, she saw a boy crying in front of the restaurant. She quickly approached the boy
verbal
verbal
verbal
and asked him why he cried. He said that he just lost his mother. Puan Rohimah calmed the boy
material
verbal
material
by bought him some candy. She reported that situation to the waitress. The waitress brought him
material
to the information counter. Puan Rohimah accompanied the boy.
material
material
A few minutes later, the boy’s mother was searching for her son. She quickly went to the
verbal
relational
verbal
information counter to ask about her son. Gladly, her son was there. The boy’s mother thanked
Puan Rohimah for her kindness.
Roles
Actor
goal
actor
Last Saturday, Puan Rohimah went to a big restaurant near her house. She was waiting
goal
for her parents to join her dinner.
Senser phenomenon/behaver
actor
goal
Suddenly, she saw a boy crying in front of the restaurant. She quickly approached the boy
goal
sayer
sayer
addressee
and asked him why he cried. He said that he just lost his mother. Puan Rohimah calmed the boy
goal
sayer
addressee
actor
goal
by bought him some candy. She reported that situation to the waitress. The waitress brought him
actor
goal
to the information counter. Puan Rohimah accompanied the boy.
actor
goal actor
A few minutes later, the boy’s mother was searching for her son. She quickly went to the
goal
carrier
sayer
information counter to ask about her son. Gladly, her son was there. The boy’s mother thanked
addressee
Puan Rohimah for her kindness.
Summary
Script number
Major Process
2
Material Mental Relational Verbal Behavioural Existential
7
1
1
6
0
0
This student chooses essay B. The story is a narrative story about a little boy who lost his
mother in front of restaurant in the supermarket. The most process used in the story is material
process and verbal process. A material is a process of doing expressed by an action verb. Thus, the
student uses a lot of physical verbs such as went, approached, join and the others. This is because
the students is trying to explain the physical activities that the characters are doing in the story.
Moreover, a verbal process is a process of exchanging information and it involves two
participants which is the sayer and the addressee. As such, the student uses verbal verbs such as
asked, said, calmed and others to show there is process of expressing and indicating. For example,
in the sentence, “ Puan Rohimah asked him why he cried”, the word “asked” clearly show there is
a verbal process where the sayer (Pn. Rohimah) expresses her concern towards the addressee (the
boy)
In short, the student is at an intermediate level and uses mostly simple basic sentence to
write the story. The process used are correct and the participants can be identified clearly.
Mistakes found
- Tenses (continuous tense should be use after the word by. Instead of “by buying him…”,
the student wrote “by bought him ….”)
Process
material
relational
One day, Ahmad and Jamil was flying their handmade kites at the field. They felt very
material
joyous as the wind blowing their kites high in the sky.
relational
material
Suddenly, the string snapped. The kites flew away faster and higher each minute. They
material
material
material
ran after it hurriedly and as fast as they can. They ran across the field. Jamil’s kite was hit by a
material
material
bird and fell down. Meanwhile, Ahmad’s kite went faster.
relational
relational material
Ahmad’s kite got stuck on a branch. So, he had to climb the tree with his amazing
material
material
relational
climbing skills. Ahmad quickly grabbed his kite and went sliding down. They were glad that they
relational
get to have their kites back.
Roles
actor
goal
carrier
One day, Ahmad and Jamil was flying their handmade kites at the field. They felt very
attribute
actor
goal
joyous as the wind blowing their kites high in the sky.
carrier
actor
actor
Suddenly, the string snapped. The kites flew away faster and higher each minute. They
goal
actor
goal
ran after it hurriedly and as fast as they can. They ran across the field. Jamil’s kite was hit by a
actor
carrier
bird and fell down. Meanwhile, Ahmad’s kite went faster.
carrier
actor
goal
Ahmad’s kite got stuck on a branch. So, he had to climb the tree with his amazing
actor
goal
carrier
carrier
climbing skills. Ahmad quickly grabbed his kite and went sliding down. They were glad that they
carrier
get to have their kites back.
Summary
Script number
Major Process
3
Material Mental Relational Verbal Behavioural Existential
10
0
6
0
0
0
This student chooses essay A. The story is a narrative story about two boys playing kites
at the field. The most process used in the story is material process and relational process. A
material is a process of doing expressed by an action verb. Thus, the student uses a lot of physical
verbs such as flew, ran, fell and the others. This is because the students is trying to explain the
physical activities that the characters are doing in the story.
Moreover, a relational process expresses what attributes a certain object has, or what
type it belongs to and also to express the identical properties of two entities. As such, the student
uses verbs such as were, felt, had and others to describe the attributes of a certain object. For
example, in the sentence “they felt very joyous..”. The word “felt” is used to relate the “they” and
“joyous”.
In short, the student is at an intermediate level and uses mostly simple basic sentence to
write the story. The process used are correct and the participants can be identified clearly.
Mistakes found
- Tenses (uses of wrong tenses)
Example : …. the wind blowing (blew) their kites high in the sky
Process
material
material
Yesterday, Ajib and Ali were playing their kites at the field. The wind blew perfectly like
relational
relational
they wanted it to be. They were so happy.
relational
material
verbal
Suddenly, Ajib’s string slipped from his hand. He immediately ran after it while shouting
relational material
for Ali’s help. They together tried to caught it.
relational
relational
material
material
The kite stucked at big tree. They were glad that the kite don’t flew further. Ali help Ajib
material
material
verbal
to climbed up the tree branch. They went home together and told their mother about what just
verbal
happened a few minutes ago. Their mother reminded them to always be careful.
Role
actor
goal
actor
Yesterday, Ajib and Ali were playing their kites at the field. The wind blew perfectly like
carrier
carrier
carrier
attribute
they wanted it to be. They were so happy.
actor
goal actor/sayer
goal
Suddenly, Ajib’s string slipped from his hand. He immediately ran after it while shouting
goal
actor
goal
for Ali’s help. They together tried to caught it.
Carrier
carrier
actor
actor recipient
The kite stucked at big tree. They were glad that the kite don’t flew further. Ali help Ajib
goal
actor/sayer
addressee
to climbed up the tree branch. They went home together and told their mother about what just
sayer
addressee
happened a few minutes ago. Their mother reminded them to always be careful.
Summary
Script number
Major Process
4
Material Mental Relational Verbal Behavioural Existential
8
0
6
3
0
0
This student chooses essay A. The story is a narrative story about two boys playing kites
at the field. The most process used in the story is material process and relational process. A
material is a process of doing expressed by an action verb. Thus, the student uses a lot of physical
verbs such as blew, ran, caught and the others. This is because the students is trying to explain the
physical activities that the characters are doing in the story.
Moreover, a relational process expresses what attributes a certain object has, or what
type it belongs to and also to express the identical properties of two entities. As such, the student
uses verbs such as were, wanted, stucked and others to describe the attributes of a certain object.
For example, in the sentence “they were so happy”. The word “were” is used to relate the “they”
and “happy”.
In short, the student is at an intermediate level and uses mostly simple basic sentence to
write the story. The process used are correct and the participants can be identified clearly.
Mistakes found
- Tenses (uses of wrong tenses)
Example : Ali help Abu ….
- Infinitive ‘to’ (the student adds suffix –ed/past tense after “to”
Example : to caught, to climber
Process
material
mental
Last Monday, Lily went to a shopping mall. Suddenly, she found a boy in a restaurant.
behavioural
The boy was crying tremendously.
verbal
relational
verbal
material
Lily asked the boy what had happened. The boy said that he had lost in touch with his
material
mother. He cannot find his mother in the restaurant.
mental
material
verbal
Lily felt pitied for the boy. Lily went to the information counter with the boy. She told
relational
verbal
what had happened to the information lady. The lady announced the information.
material
material
An hour later, a lady ran towards the information counter. The boy ran towards his
material
relational
relational
mother and hugged his mother tight. The boy’s mother was glad that her son was safe. She
verbal
thanked Lily for her kindness.
Role
actor
goal
senser
phenomenon
Last Monday, Lily went to a shopping mall. Suddenly, she found a boy in a restaurant.
behaver
The boy was crying tremendously.
sayer
addressee
sayer
actor
Lily asked the boy what had happened. The boy said that he had lost in touch with his
goal
actor
goal
mother. He cannot find his mother in the restaurant.
senser
phenomenon actor
goal
actor
sayer
Lily felt pitied for the boy. Lily went to the information counter with the boy. She told
addressee
sayer
what had happened to the information lady. The lady announced the information.
actor
goal
actor
An hour later, a lady ran towards the information counter. The boy ran towards his
goal
goal
carrier
carrier
sayer
mother and hugged his mother tight. The boy’s mother was glad that her son was safe. She
addressee
thanked Lily for her kindness.
Summary
Script number
Major Process
5
Material Mental Relational Verbal Behavioural Existential
7
2
4
4
1
0
This student chooses essay B. The story is a narrative story about a little boy who lost his
mother in front of restaurant in the supermarket. The most process used in the story is material
process, relational process and verbal process. A material is a process of doing expressed by an
action verb. Thus, the student uses a lot of physical verbs such as went, ran, hugged and the others.
This is because the students is trying to explain the physical activities that the characters are doing
in the story.
Moreover, a verbal process is a process of exchanging information and it involves two
participants which is the sayer and the addressee. As such, the student uses verbal verbs such as
asked, told, announced and others to show there is process of expressing and indicating. For
example, in the sentence, “ the lady announced the information”, the word “announced” clearly
shows that there is a verbal process where the sayer (lady) expressed the message to the people
(addressee) in the supermarket.
Furthermore, a relational process expresses what attributes a certain object has, or what
type it belongs to and also to express the identical properties of two entities. As such, the student
uses verbs such as “was” and “had” to describe the attributes of a certain object. For example, in
the sentence “the boy’s mother was glad…”. The word “was” is used to relate the “the boy’s
mother” and “glad”.
In short, the student is at an intermediate level and uses mostly simple basic sentence to
write the story. The process used are correct and the participants can be identified clearly.
Mistakes found
- Wrong use of verbs – “she found a boy” instead of “she saw a boy”
- Wrong use of nouns – “the lady announced the information” instead of “the lady
announced the news”
- Wrong use of adverbs – crying tremendously
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