Trevar Hansen
Comp. 1
Self-Assessment
First of all my paper isn’t that good. When I wrote this I felt like I was just
rambling on with a bunch of junk. It was not long enough, but I couldn’t think of
anything else to write. Plus not many people probably enjoy hunting. I didn’t make it
real clear which side I was for, but I did say I liked antelope hunting more. I am sure my
grammar isn’t up to par.
My introduction paragraph should have been longer and more descriptive. My
topic sentence is okay not the greatest though. My first paragraph is pretty good. It is
decent sized and has a lot of information in it. It has the main reason why I would want
to hunt antelope instead of deer.
Then the second paragraph I have is a long paragraph
that gets kind of lengthy and boring. I don’t if people can see my rambling in this
paragraph or what. I couldn’t find different topics in that big paragraph to split it up. I
did use they and the too much. So I switched them to antelope and deer and now I think I
used them too much.
Then I had two small paragraphs that I thought were pretty good. They were
short sweet and to the point. They did tell a lot in that short amount of writing.
My concluding paragraph is okay. It explains which hunting I would pick
antelope or deer. It is okay length but it kind of blabs and doesn’t have much point to it.
Overall my paper is pretty good just not top notch though