More Practice Revising Unclear Sentences Revise the following sentences, eliminating as many nominalizations as you can (by turning nouns into verbs/actions) and making sure the main character is the subject of the sentence (the doer of the sentence’s main actions): 1) There has been an affirmative decision on the behalf of Congress in regard to termination of the program. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ This sentence is from an ENWR 110 paper. It is discussing the scene in “Almost Famous” when Stillwater’s plane almost crashes: 2) With sudden outbursts we learn of love affairs, jealousies, lies, and secrets that existed between the members. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ 3) In America today, innovation on the part of industry is a crucial component in its survivability. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ This sentence is from a letter that is describing a defect in a certain model of car: 4) In certain circumstances, occurrence of either of the above conditions could result in vehicle crash without prior warning. ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________