ICE: DOAS/Core 1
TASK: Apply these general comments to your individual essay and make necessary revisions.
*Final revised drafts are due at the start of class Friday 12/4. Remember to bring the original ICE w/rubric and revision reflection sheet (doc on calendar).
REMINDER: you are required to earn a 70%/proficient on all Core assessments. Make an Appointment with me sooner than later!!
FOCUS:
-the focus of the essay should be how YOU SEE Miller and someone else demonstrating a particular thematic lesson through support in the form of a designated literary device. That requires that you 1. have a clear and specific APS
(2-3 themes in cause and effect relationship) which 2. can be proven using the literary device examples you found to be most effective.
-see your Claim statement exercises and the notes on the calendar under Core 1 on the navigation bar
CONTENT:
-? and/or ˷˷˷˷=Misinterpretations- some of you had misunderstandings of DOAS (ex. Willy wants the life insurance money for Biff (true!) so he has been trying to kill himself (untrue); Linda knows that Willy has had an affair, because she sees her in the time shift (Ach!). This may be fixed by clarifying your writing OR you may need to return to the text and take a second look
-Some of you fell victim to ONLY discussing the motif in your Oedipus ICE and repeated that problem here.
Remember that your examples should be supporting the THEME/APS from the claim, not proving that there’s symbolism or characterization in the 2 works.
-Embedding/Analysis- each piece of evidence should be analyzed to support theme(s). Don’t Embed a text example to A. ONLY to feed plot summary (Willy was a traveling salesman “on the road every week of [his] life”
(Miller 14)) OR B. ONLY to summarize instead of analyze (Willy was a traveling salesman “on the road every week of [his] life” (Miller 14). He traveled constantly.) Explain how it proves a piece of your APS (which is your longview goal, incidentally).
STRUCTURE:
-The MANY Topic statements that start your close readings all share certain things in common: specific to the text
(Oedipus and his citizens…, Now that the Blind man has guided…, etc.) and focused on thematic purpose you will
prove (…the husband embraces his prejudices to protect himself, …the Chorus is torn by their loyalty between the
Gods and their king). Every paragraph is a piece of your larger claim (see FOCUS note), so starting your paragraph with a simple summary of events OR by copying and pasting in that half of your claim WILL NOT be enough. The essay will meander OR just be a superficial book report.
- the intro’s job is to introduce the focus of the paper (that’s why your claim is in there) and the conclusion should tell the impact of your claim (where is your added insight?) See the ppt tutorials in the Core 1 drop down.

STYLE:
-Literary present- literature is always discusses in the present. Oedipus is always “smiting his eyes,” Macbeth is always “committing the final deed,” etc.
- No “you/I/we”. These are all your opinions and you put your name on the top of page 1; no need to remind us.
- Many of you demonstrate the spelling and grammar errors of 1 st draft, in-class writing. Spell and grammar check, but make sure that the corrections they suggest are in fact what you intend.
Apply the following header at the top left margin
on pg 1
Your Name
My Name
Oedipus Motif ICE
Date due
Adjust your paper settings to the following:
 12- pt TNR
 Double spaced
 1-inch margins