English 105
| Agenda
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Run On Relay
Grammar- the Semicolon
Drafting & Revising (chpt 5)
Get your papers back & Review
them. What went wrong?/right?
5. Revising Narrative Paper
6. Using “Turn It In.com”
Review: Run ON
• 2 or more independent clauses (whole
sentences) combined incorrectly.
– Too many ANDS (goal 1-2 “and”s per sentence)
– Fused
• Jammed together with no punctuation
– Comma Splice
• Jammed together with just a comma (need comma
conjunction!!!)
Game!
• Run-On Race
• 4-5 Teams: Each team runs this like a relay
– Identify Sentence, Fragment, or Run On
– Fix the Fragments/Run-Ons
– I will send you back to your group if the answer is
wrong.
– Form a “batting order” – the first person cannot go
again until every person on the team has been up.
• Every 5 questions you complete, your race car
will move forward.
• First to the end wins!
If you finish early:
Review Description Essay Results and
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• http://www.turnitin.com – click on Training
Commas, Colons, and
Semicolons
Oh my!
Commas ,
• Commas clarify meaning
• Set sentence meter (breaths) for readers.
• Use commas to separate items in a list, date,
or address.
– I can’t believe you went to Disneyland, Six Flags,
and Universal Studios all in one day!
– Please buy mustard, onions and chili for the
hotdogs.
– We went to Belgrade, Nebraska, on July 1, 2011.
Use of the Comma (cont.)
• Use commas after longer introductory
phrases and clauses.
Introductory phrase
– After we completed our to all three parks, we
fell into a dead sleep for 12 hours.
Usually starts with a
Preposition, adverb, or
Conjunction
Comma use (cont.)
• Use commas after shorter introductory
phrases and clauses if necessary to avoid
confusion.
– To
Sam,Mickey
Mickey
is stranger
no stranger.
To Sam
is no
– To chili, hotdogs are a natural
accompaniment.
Comma use (cont.)
• Use commas to set off nonrestrictive
(nonessential) elements from the rest of a
sentence (also caused appositive phrases).
These phrases just give more information.
– Mickey Mouse’s main squeeze, Minnie, is one
cute mouse.
– I can’t believe, he groaned silently, I ate so many
hotdogs. - NOTE: It can also be correct to
use parentheses ( ) instead
of commas in unnecessary,
information adding phrases!
Comma Use (cont.)
• Use commas to separate coordinate modifiers
(descriptive modifiers of equal rank).
– To determine whether modifiers are coordinate or
not, insert “and” between them. If the sentence still
makes sense, the comma is required.
– Disneyland is a fun, expensive place. (coordinate)
– He eats only roasted Hebrew
National hotdogs. (not coordinate)
Commas (cont.)
• Use commas to separate two independent
clauses joined by a coordinating conjunction.
– We knew it would be a long day, but we decided
to go to all three amusement parks anyway.
– He roasted five hotdogs at the bonfire, and he
also set a hay bale on fire.
Colons :
• Colons announce. They add dramatic flourishes
that introduce lists, quotations, complete
sentences, and dialogue.
• Use a colon to introduce a
quotation longer than one
sentence introducesWhen
a quotation
inintroduce
the next
you use a colon to
a
complete sentence, capitalize the first
paragraph.
word.
– The attendant looked straight at us and said: “This
ride is not for sissies. It is a high speed thrill ride. You
will yell. You will scream. You will cover your eyes and
beg for your mommy. If you don’t think you can
handle it, get out of line now!”
Use of the Colon
• To introduce the text of questions and
answers (e.g. in interviews).
– Q: What was your favorite Disneyland ride?
– A: Pirates of the Caribbean
• Use colons to show times.
– We finished our theme park tour at 1:15 a.m.
• Use colons to show citations.
– Ecclesiastes 3:1-8 tells us that there is a season
for everything.
Semicolons ;
• A semicolon is not quite a comma, not quite a
period. It is a break in thought, but not a
complete stop… more like an elongated pause.
• Use a semicolon to connect independent clauses
and avoid run-on sentences or comma splices.
– We went to Disneyland; we had a great time.
– He ate six hotdogs; he also got a stomach ache.
Semicolons (cont.)
• Use a semicolon to separate items in a list
that also include commas.
– Donald Duck brought his favorite lunch: a
sandwich, chips, and crackers; his nephews, Huey,
Dewey, and Luey; and his favorite girl Daisy
– In order to win the contest, John starved himself
for two days, Monday and Tuesday; wore extra
large clothes, size 42 jeans and XXL shirt; and
drank castor oil.
Teacher Evaluation
• Please take a moment to evaluate this class.
– Anonymous
– Place in the “turn in here” folder when complete
• I will leave the room
Drafting, Revising:
Creative and Critical Thinking
Chapter 5 pg 95
Revision – what is it!
• Just because you wrote it doesn’t mean its
done.
• Revision isn’t editing and proofreading, its
reconsidering audience, purpose, tone, etc.
• Its not punishment or busywork.
• No part of your work is sacred or permanent
– you can save multiple drafts!
• Everyone must revise. At
all levels of writing.
Homework
• Final Draft of Narrative – due via email
– May turn it in to TurnItIn.com as well.
• Journal 3 – topic “How do my instructors view
me”
– MLA format
• Grammar log for Descriptive Essay
– if required