Helping our students plan effective on
demand responses!
Based on the writing program of Judith
and Evan Gould
On-Demand for 6th and 8th Grade
1 stand-alone prompt - 40 minute time
limit
1 passage prompt – 90 minute time limit
Latest On-Demand Information
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Student writing will be scored based on a
holistic 4 point scoring rubric. Form is NOT part
of the rubric.
Although forms will not be scored in ODW, they
will be mentioned in the prompt to provide
context for writing.
Students will be evaluated on their ability to
communicate effectively with an audience by
supporting complex ideas in a coherent
structure (using the requested mode).
All student writing for the assessment will be
scored with the understanding that they are
FIRST DRAFTS (because of time and space).
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All pre-writing will happen within the
student test booklet:
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Students will have 1 page to brainstorm and
pre-write (teachers will NOT provide scrap
paper).
For the 30/40 minute situational prompt,
students will have 2 pages to write their
response.
For the 90 minute passage-based prompt,
students will have 4 pages to write their
response.
Pre-writing will NOT be scored.
Prompt Modes for 2012/2013 K-PREP*
*According to KDE K-PREP Blueprint
http://www.education.ky.gov/NR/rdonlyres/EC1509B4-C7EF-4A51-A79A46676BE77BC2/0/KPREPBlueprints.pdf
Stand Alone Prompt
(Choice Between
Two Prompts)
6th Grade
8th Grade
Passage Based
Prompt
(One Mandatory
Prompt)
Narrative
Informative
Argumentative
Explanatory
Narrative
Argumentative
Informative
Explanatory
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Writing situation:
A school district has a new middle school. On the first day,
the students realize that they are the first people to sit in the
desks, use the books in the library, walk in the halls, and set
the traditions for all of the students who will attend for years
And years to come. One of the teachers suggests that
everyone write about his or her first day in the school. The
students’ narratives will be compiled in a book and placed in
the library for the students who attend after them to read.
Writing directions:
Think about what it would be like to be the first to attend a
newly built school. Write a narrative for the
book, and tell about that first day. Describe what
you do, see, and feel throughout the day.
Writing Prompts
Writing Situation: Everyone has a
fond memory of a special birthday.
 Think about a birthday that stood
out among all the others.
 Directions for Writing: Write a
paragraph/ essay telling about your
favorite birthday.
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Prepare the graphic organizer.
Now fold
your paper
into 4
squares.
I will never forget my sixth
Thesis Statement
birthday.
Fold the paper into four squares. Begin with
one well written topic sentence placed in a box
in the center. This will become the topic
sentence.
My grandmother threw
me a surprise party.
My parents gave me a
wonderful gift.
I will never forget my sixth
birthday.
It was the best
My friends and I went
birthday ever.
to the zoo.
Add three supporting sentences (one in each
box). The fourth box should be a feeling
sentence that sums up the other three. All
sentences should support the main topic in the
center.
My grandmother threw
me a surprise party.
•She baked my
favorite chocolate
fudge cake.
My parents gave me a
wonderful gift.
•They surprised me
with a golden
retriever puppy.
I will never forget my sixth
birthday.
My friends and I went
to the zoo.
It was the best
birthday ever.
•We rode the elephants.
Add a detail in each box to tell more about the
supporting sentence.
From the graphic organizer to the
lined paper………..
I will never forget my sixth birthday. My
grandmother threw me a surprise party.
She baked my favorite chocolate fudge
cake. My parents gave me a wonderful gift.
They surprised me with a golden retriever
puppy. My friends and I went to the zoo.
We rode the elephants. It was the best
birthday ever.
My grandmother threw
me a surprise party.
My parents gave me a
wonderful gift.
•favorite cake
•golden retriever
•tons of presents
•named Goldie
•exciting games
•best friend
I will never forget my sixth
birthday.
My friends and I went
It was the best
to the zoo.
birthday ever.
•elephant ride
•walked
miles
Nowfor
add
three details in each box to tell more
about
•rode
train the supporting sentence.
Again from the graphic organizer to the
lined paper………..
I will never forget my sixth birthday. My
grandmother threw me a surprise party. She baked
my favorite chocolate fudge cake. I got tons of
presents. We had such fun playing exciting games.
My parents gave me a wonderful gift. They
surprised me with a golden retriever puppy. I named
her Goldie. She is my best friend today.My friends
and I went to the zoo. We rode the elephants. The
zoo was so large we walked for miles. Finally we
gave up and rode the train. It was the best birthday
ever.
My grandmother threw
Early in the day,
me a surprise party.
My parents gave me a
After lunch,
wonderful gift.
•favorite cake
•golden retriever
•tons of presents
•named Goldie
•exciting games
•best friend
I will never forget my sixth
birthday.
Later,
My friends and I went
It was the best
to the zoo.
birthday ever.
•elephant ride
•walked for miles
•rode train
Indeed,
Adding a transition word to each
box will help the text to flow.
I will never forget my sixth birthday.
4 Square
+
3
+T
=
5
Paragraphs
Early in the day, my grandmother threw me a
surprise party. She baked my favorite chocolate
fudge cake. I got tons of presents. We had such fun
playing exciting games.
After lunch, my parents gave me a wonderful
gift. They surprised me with a golden retriever
puppy. I named her Goldie. She is my best friend
today.
Later, my friends and I went to the zoo. We
rode the elephants. The zoo was so large we walked
for miles. Finally we gave up and rode the train.
Indeed, It was the best birthday ever.
Improving the first paragraph
(introductory).
First Paragraph (Introduction)
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Topic Sentence
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Center of 4 Square
Use a hook
Prepares reader
Ties all squares
together
Getting a year older may be bad
for some, but I will never forget my
sixth birthday. The attention that I
received from friends and family made
me feel warm inside. It was a very
special day for me.
On to the
essay…...
Getting a year older may be bad for some, but I will
never forget my sixth birthday. The attention that I received
from friends and family made me feel warm inside. It was a
very special day for me.
Early in the day, my grandmother threw me a surprise
party. She baked my favorite chocolate fudge cake. I got
tons of presents. We had such fun playing exciting games.
After lunch, my parents gave me a wonderful gift. They
surprised me with a golden retriever puppy. I named her
Goldie. She is my best friend today.
Later, my friends and I went to the zoo. We rode the
elephants. The zoo was so large we walked for miles. Finally
we gave up and rode the train.
Indeed, It was the best birthday ever.
Improving the Final Paragraph (summary)
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Wrap-up Sentence with
a Transition
Personal/Feeling
Sentence, Question or
Exclamation(closing
with a punch!)
Getting a year older may be bad for some, but I will
never forget my sixth birthday. The attention that I received
from friends and family made me feel warm inside. It was a
very special day for me.
Early in the day, my grandmother threw me a surprise
party. She baked my favorite chocolate fudge cake. I got
tons of presents. We had such fun playing exciting games.
After lunch, my parents gave me a wonderful gift. They
surprised me with a golden retriever puppy. I named her
Goldie. She is my best friend today.
Later, my friends and I went to the zoo. We rode the
elephants. The zoo was so large we walked for miles. Finally
we gave up and rode the train.
Indeed, it was the best birthday ever. The wonderful
surprises from my family and friends will stay with me
forever.
From this basic format to…...
Narrative
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Personal Narrative
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Has one topic
Tells about the writer
Has beginning, middle, end
Uses words like I, me, my
Narrative
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Story
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Title
Character
Setting
Problem
Solution
Beginning
Middle
End
Moving from a 4 to a 5 or 6
 Vocabulary
 Sentence
Development
(Sentence Stretchers)
 Hook
 Visual Expression
Vocabulary
unfair
improper
bad
dreadful
Sentence Development
Sentence Stretching
The Hook
To catch the reader, use a hook in the
introductory paragraph.
Ask the reader a question.
Use a catchy phrase or quote.
Create a tongue twister.
Make an exclamatory sentence.
Use a lead in sentence that entices
the reader to read on.
Visual Expression
Use metaphors and
similes to give your
essay more visual
expression.
Atthis
thispoint
point
At
thethe
teacherhas
has
teacher
nono
more
control
thethe
class
controlover
over
than
a blind race car
class.
driver would in a
NASCAR race.
Next stop….
http://jc-schools.net/write
2006-2007 TCAP Writing Assessment
Prompt - Grade 5
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Writing Situation: Suppose one day you
found a flying carpet.
Directions for Writing: Before you begin
writing, think about where you would go,
what you would see, and what you
would do.
Now write a pretend story about your
day after finding a flying carpet.
Writing Assessment Scoring Rubric
Criteria
Score 1
Deficient
Score 2
Flawed
Score 3
Limited
Score 4
Competent
Score 5
Strong
Score 6
Outstanding
Organization
Incoherent
Weak
organization
Inadequate
organization
Adequately
organized
Generally well
organized
Well organized
Development
Undeveloped
No details
Not developed
Little or no
relevant details
Not developed
Does not explain
develop key ideas
Developed
Explains and
illustrates some
key ideas
Generally well
developed
Explains and
illustrates most
key ideas
Well developed
Clearly
explains and
illustrates key
ideas
Language Syntax
Limited or
inappropriate
word choice
Limited or
inappropriate
word choice
Limited or
inappropriate word
choice
Adequate facility
in the use of
language
Demonstrates
some syntactic
variety
Facility in use
of language
Strong
Syntactic variety
Mechanics
Serious and
persistent
writing errors
Serious errors in
mechanics,
usage, sentence
structure, or word
choice
Accumulation of
errors in mechanics,
usage, sentence
structure
Some errors in
mechanics/ usage
Generally few
errors in
mechanics/
usage
Few errors in
mechanics/
usage