Draft
Oct. 10
Dear Jimmy,
Thank you for your invitation of barbecue this weekend. I
would like to take part in but there are some urge things I must
deal with. I feel so sorry I can’t join. And I hope you have a
good time!
Yours,
Michelle
Oct.11
Dear Lynn,
I want to hold a party in The Boyan Restaurant to
celebrate Mr. Liu’s 60th birthday this Sunday and express our
thanks for him. I hope you can come with us. The Boyan
restaurant is near our university. Go along Wenhua road and
turn left, you can’t miss it. We will hold the party at 6:00p.m
on Sunday, Oct. 15. Please on time.
Yours,
Michelle
Oct.11
Dear Professor Whitley,
This Friday afternoon you would arrange to discuss with
my thesis but I have something important to do so I can’t
discuss with you on that day. Should we make an
appointment on Monday?
Yours truly,
Lin Xiaoyan
Oct.11
Dear Martin,
Thank you for your invitation. I would like to join the
alumni get-together. We have not seen each other since we
graduated. Miss you so much. I will go there on time.
Yours,
Michelle
Oct.11
Dear Miss Lu,
I would not attend the class this afternoon. This morning I
didn’t feel very well and went to hospital. The doctor advised
me to stay in bed for a few hours. I am so sorry for that but I
will study by myself about the class.
Yours truly,
Lin Xiaoyan
Revised by the Group
Oct. 10
Dear Jimmy,
Thank you for your invitation of barbecue this weekend. I
would like to take part in but there are some urge things I must
deal with. I feel so sorry I can’t join. And I hope you have a
good time!
Yours,
Michelle
Oct.11
Dear Lynn,
I want to hold a party in The Boyan Restaurant to
celebrate Mr. Liu’s 60th birthday this Sunday and express our
thanks for him. I hope you can come with us. The Boyan
restaurant is near our university. Go along Wenhua road and
turn left, you can’t miss it. We will hold the party at 6:00p.m
on Sunday, Oct. 15. Please on time.
Yours,
Michelle
Oct.11
Dear Professor Whitley,
This Friday afternoon you would arrange to discuss with
my thesis but I have something important to do so I can’t
discuss with you that day. Should we make an appointment
on Monday?
Yours truly,
Lin Xiaoyan
Oct.11
Dear Martin,
Thank you for your invitation. I would like to join the
alumni get-together. We have not seen each other since we
graduated. Miss you so much. I will go there on time.
Yours,
Michelle
Oct.11
Dear Miss Lu,
I would not attend the class this afternoon and ask for a
leave. This morning I didn’t feel very well and went to
hospital. The doctor advised me to stay in bed for a few hours.
I am so sorry for that and I will study by myself about the
class.
Yours truly,
Lin Xiaoyan
Comments: You should pay more attention to your
express and grammar.
Revised by the Teacher
Oct. 10
Dear Jimmy,
Thank you for
inviting me to the barbecue this weekend.
I would like to take part in it but there are some urgent things
I must deal with. I feel so sorry I can’t join you. And I hope
you have a good time!
Yours,
Michelle
Oct.11
Dear Lynn,
I want to hold a party in Boyan Restaurant to celebrate Mr.
Liu’s 60th birthday this Sunday and express our thanks for
him. I hope you can come with us. The Boyan restaurant is
near our university. Go along Wenhua road from the gate of
our university and turn left, you can’t miss it. We will hold
the party at 6:00p.m. on Sunday, Oct. 15. Please be on time.
Yours,
Michelle
Oct.11
Dear Professor Whitley,
I am sorry I can’t keep our appointment about discussing
with my thesis this Friday afternoon because I have
something important to do then. Could we make another
appointment on next Monday?
Yours truly,
Lin Xiaoyan
Oct.11
Dear Martin,
Thank you for your invitation. I would like to join the
alumni get-together. We have not seen each other since we
graduated. Miss you so much. I will be there on time.
Yours,
Michelle
Oct.11
Dear Miss Lu,
I need to ask for a leave and I am sorry that I can’t attend
the class this afternoon. This morning I didn’t feel very well
and went to hospital. The doctor advised me to stay in bed for
a few hours. I am so sorry for that and I will study the
classwork by myself.
I sincerely hope that my request will be given due
consideration and I really appreciate your kindness and
consideration.
Yours truly,
Lin Xiaoyan
Teacher’s Comments and Suggestions: All the five notes
have the correct structures and clear purposes. As to the
semantic elements, remember to give specific reasons when
you decline an invitation and cancel an appointment.
Otherwise, it will be impolite.
Your score for this assignment is 87.