FSA Practice Test – Diagnostic, August 2015
Below are some sentences and paragraphs taken from 9th grade student work. State
what is wrong with each selection. Then rewrite the selection.
1. Because of various reasons that can harm the pets or the public, owning exotic pets
should be restricted.
2. According to Do you really want a baby tiger? by Mia Lewis, “Usually only specially
trained and qualified individuals working with the backing of a specially equipped
facility are fully able to meet the needs of exotic animals” (6).
3. The following is three quarters of a body paragraph. Sentences at the end have been
eliminated. You do not have to rewrite. Just state what is wrong.
Moreover, many exotic pet owners end up without being able to provide the right
environment for them, which can be described as cruel and unusual. Exotic pet owners
can end up caging their pet, which can be detrimental to the animal’s health. If they
can’t live in the own natural environment, then they can not practice their normal
behaviors. According to REXANO, however, “Animals are personal property, and we
oppose legislation that restricts the private ownership or use of animals” (9). This
statement is saying that animals are private property and no more restrictions shall be
made.
4.
Should private citizens be allowed to keep exotic animals as pets? In my opinion,
I do not think private citizens should be allowed to keep exotic animals as pets.
5.
As said in “Do You Really Want a Baby Tiger” by Mia Lewis, “A dog is an animal,
but it is a domesticated one—a psecies that has evolved over thousands of years to
live well with people” (Lewis 5).
6. As well, wild animals require certain conditions that most domestic ones don’t, such
as living space.
7.
A trip to the vet with a puppy or a kitten is easy and fast, but taking a wild animal
to the vet is simply convoluted.
8.
Even though owning an exotic animal sounds incredibly fun, letting citizens own
them for their own personal entertainment is not morally correct. Kim Bloomer is one
of the many citizens that want this argument to end saying owning exotic pets is
legal.
9.
It’s true that wild animals are cute and they look adorable when their little, but
their cuddly face isn’t gonna stay forever.
10. “Many exotic animals are strong enough to be dangerous even without meaning to
cause harm” (Lewis 4).
11. The following is a full introduction. What is wrong with it?
Have you ever seen an exotic animal, adorable animal? Have you ever told your
parents you wanted one? Of course, most people have. Theres a big chance of parents
saying yes to a household pet, other than a wild animal because “owning an exotic pet
is expensive, time consuming, and a huge responsibility (13).
12. Like she said having an exotic animal as a pet is time consuming, dangerous, and
expensive.
13.
Disregarding this, the facts are concrete “1.5 people get killed yearly by a captive
reptile” as mentioned by Zuzaha Kupol from Rexano. This shows that exotic pets
specifically reptiles have a really insignificant homoside rate specillaly when
compared to other goliaths like traffic accidents where 45,000 people die each year.