Topic Sentence: Priscilla is brave to
confront Monk and his gang of thugs.
Transition word
Lead-in
CD:For example, Priscilla calmly asks the
Kobra, “Who’s your leader, wimp?” (Peck 3).
CM:This shows that Priscilla is not afraid to
speak her mind.
CM:This is important because everyone else
quivers in fear, terrified of Monk, but Priscilla
reveals true courage in the face of danger.
2nd chunk
• CD In addition, she chops the Kobra to break
his hold on Melvin.
• CM (This shows that) Priscilla is not
intimidated by Monk or his gang, even though
they have hurt other students in the past.
• CM (This is important because) She is the only
person at her school with the confidence to
defeat a bully.
• CS It is heroic and bold of Priscilla to help
Melvin escape the Kobras.
TS: Monk is a bully because he likes
to intimidate his fellow classmates.
• CD For instance, he makes the students pay to
eat in the cafeteria.
• CM (This shows that) Monk has complete
control over the weaker kids at school.
• CM (This is important because) Monk feels
powerful taking the students’ money and he
feels smug intimidating his classmates.
2nd chunk
• Also, Monk and his gang are violent thugs,
inflicting bruises on the other students at
school.
• CM (This shows that)
• CM (This is important because)
• CS
Priscilla is brave to confront Monk and his
gang of thugs. For example, Priscilla calmly
asks, “Who’s your leader, wimp?” Priscilla is
not afraid to speak her mind. Everyone else is
afraid of Monk, but Priscilla shows courage
while defending her friend.
In addition, she chops the Kobra to break his hold on
Melvin. Priscilla is not intimidated by Monk or his
gang, even when they have hurt other students in
the past. She is the only person at her school with
the confidence to take on a bully. It is heroic and
bold of Priscilla to help Melvin escape the Kobras.
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