Positive
1. You have given reasons given for your opinions, which helps successfully
develop your arguments. Links between your different ideas could have
been stronger
2.
You used the APA style consistently for formatting the paper. However it should be at the
separate page. You have structured your work logically into paragraphs. To
develop, you could improve your introduction by introducing your main
argument, in addition to providing an overview of the subject of the essay
3.
4. Work on summary part. Make sure that your summary is not just a sentence.
Negative Comments
1. You have presented the key information accurately, but need to develop your
evaluation by explaining your opinion and interpreting the sources in greater
detail.
2. Do not add your own stories or samples. You have to discuss given lecture and text.
3. Try to make it more academic. After writing proofread
4. Good extra research from a range of sources. It would be good to demonstrate
critical evaluation by analysing the reliability of the sources.
5. Please, read the rubric carefully for future assignments. Work on the structure of the essay:
Introduction, body part and conclusion.