Teacher’s Name: Jill and Leslie
Topic: revising
Grade: college
Presumed background: general revising of own papers
I.
Learning Objectives
a. Student should be able to differentiate between a “good” paper and a
“bad” paper.
b. Student should be able to revise a “bad” paper into a “good” paper.
II.
Materials Needed: “good” paper, “bad” paragraph for class revision, “bad”
paper for individual practice
III.
Procedures
Teacher
1. Teacher will ask
why revision is
necessary
2. Teacher will hand
out copy of “good”
paper
3. Teacher will ask
what the students
think of the
example –are any
revisions
needed/what makes
it good.
4. Teacher will hand
out “bad” paper
5. Teacher will do the
same as in 3
6. Teacher will hand
out “bad” paper 2
7. Teacher will ask
students to share
revisions
Student
Est. Time
1.Student will respond with 1 min
why they think revision is
necessary
2. Students will read the
2min
“good” paper aloud
3 mins
3 students will discuss
points of the paper.
4. Students will read “bad
paper
5. Student will
respond with how
this one can be
improved
6. Students will revise
this paper on their
own.
7. Students will share
revisions
2 mins
3 mins
5 mins
3 mins
20 minutes
Evaluation of learning objectives:
a. Students are able to revise the “bad” paragraph
National standards met: 4, 6
Reflection: The “good” paper part did not go how I thought it would. Some of
the students didn’t think the writing was good. I just turned it around then to
prove that everyone needs to revise, even professional writers. They were able to
pick out what was good about the essay and ways to improve it. There was a lot
of interaction between the class.